In Ivy
a ghazal61 total reviews
Comment from nomi338
I found your references to ivy very interesting since there were possibly mixed or confused memories and feelings tied into Ivy. Given you early antipathy towards Ivy, I was surprised by your gifting your mom with a flower arrangement that included Ivy, or was it really a gift of love?
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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I found your references to ivy very interesting since there were possibly mixed or confused memories and feelings tied into Ivy. Given you early antipathy towards Ivy, I was surprised by your gifting your mom with a flower arrangement that included Ivy, or was it really a gift of love?
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Yes, nomi338, ivy entangles both happy and sad memories. I could not write this without acknowledging the many memories ensnarled. Thank you for your review.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, I can only comment regarding the fluid movement of this poem, because I am completely unfamiliar with the form. Therefore, I found the poem pragmatic in its narration of events, yet lyrical in presentation. I wish you best of luck in the contest...
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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In my opinion, I can only comment regarding the fluid movement of this poem, because I am completely unfamiliar with the form. Therefore, I found the poem pragmatic in its narration of events, yet lyrical in presentation. I wish you best of luck in the contest...
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Oh, thank you for your review. There are so many poetic forms around the world. I enjoyed this Arabic-Indian one and am glad you enjoyed it, too. Thanks also for wishing me the best of luck in the contest.
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You are very welcome, Andre, and yes, I enjoyed it - thank you for a memorable read...Eve
Comment from Lucian Carter
Having read my first ghazal, I'm not sure I like it. It's not that you've done something wrong, it's that I'm not keen on the structure itself.
Still, this is lovely and brings a wonderful, emotional, tale to life. I'm left feeling positive about the piece overall. I'd just skip the format moving forward.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Having read my first ghazal, I'm not sure I like it. It's not that you've done something wrong, it's that I'm not keen on the structure itself.
Still, this is lovely and brings a wonderful, emotional, tale to life. I'm left feeling positive about the piece overall. I'd just skip the format moving forward.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Oh, thank you, Lucian, for your review. I can understand your reservations about this unfamiliar form. Still, I will continue to seek out non-Western forms of poetry and adapt them to our culture. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your use of dialog and rhymes plus the "ivy" echoes in the Ghazal form. You added a vivid, reinforcing artwork as well. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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I admired your use of dialog and rhymes plus the "ivy" echoes in the Ghazal form. You added a vivid, reinforcing artwork as well. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Thank you, Joan, for your review and for wishing me the best in the contest. I have to thank the poet who inspired my dialogue ghazal.
Comment from Laine Carson
I too love Ivy. I like how it takes special care and when given that special care; IT THRIVES! I love that not everyone is successful at growing it, so the plant itself testifies to your efforts. I enjoyed your poem because it told just how much care it had been given.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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I too love Ivy. I like how it takes special care and when given that special care; IT THRIVES! I love that not everyone is successful at growing it, so the plant itself testifies to your efforts. I enjoyed your poem because it told just how much care it had been given.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Oh, thank you, Laine, for your review. I love how ivy thrives. Everything gets entangled. Thanks.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
It's a really interesting form and one I had not seen before. I like your approach to the contest prompt as it is fresh ... just like ivy. All the best in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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It's a really interesting form and one I had not seen before. I like your approach to the contest prompt as it is fresh ... just like ivy. All the best in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Oh, thank you, Mystic Angel, for your encouraging review and contest best wishes. There are so many romantic poetic traditions around the world other than sonnet. There is so much potential to write fresh poems using these forms. Thanks.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your contest entry and immediately thought of Wrigley Field and the Ivy fence. Oh my!!! Baseball in poetry. I've raised too many boys. LOL I wish you the best of luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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I enjoyed reading your contest entry and immediately thought of Wrigley Field and the Ivy fence. Oh my!!! Baseball in poetry. I've raised too many boys. LOL I wish you the best of luck with the contest.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Yes, Barbara, it's amazing the associations that ivy has. The genesis of my poem was when I watched a video of a tranquilized mountain lion tumbling down an ivy-covered San Francisco hill. I began to smell crushed ivy leaves and recall memories of me playing in ivy half a century ago. Like ivy, the memories and sensations would not let me go. So I wrote about them. Thank you for your review and for wishing me the best in the contest.
Comment from zekeziemann
You did a wonderful job describing an unknown use of a common plant. Your brain must have worked magic. Well done with good rhythm.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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You did a wonderful job describing an unknown use of a common plant. Your brain must have worked magic. Well done with good rhythm.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Thank you, zekeziemann, for your review. Both ivy and ghazals are magical. Thanks.
Comment from Janet Foor
I loved this Andre. A beautiful piece my Mother would have loved as she was a lover of ivy. As a memorial for her, we bought new alter cloths for her church with embroidered ivy on them in the shape of the Trinity.
A lovely love poem. Good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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I loved this Andre. A beautiful piece my Mother would have loved as she was a lover of ivy. As a memorial for her, we bought new alter cloths for her church with embroidered ivy on them in the shape of the Trinity.
A lovely love poem. Good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Yes, yes, yes, Janet, it's amazing the memories associated with ivy, a plant poets seldom mention. My mother would have loved this poem if she were alive. Thank you for your generous, six star review and wishing me good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing your ivy memories, too.
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Andre;
-I'm also a follower and associate member to Rattle And will have to go back and read Barbara Crane's poem "Love Refrains: a ghazal".
- From what I read of your poem I find its dichotomy and formulation of the surrounding words conceptual theme of loving Ivy is trying to accomplish something that may be difficult but you seem to have smoothly and fluidly made it simple.
-The simplicity of this writing is what makes a great.
-Once passionate affection with Ivy is displayed with such Impressionistic demonstratively descriptive imagery. But in a very simple way.
-Good luck in the love poem contest and take care and have a good one Andre'.
Alex
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Cheers, Andre;
-I'm also a follower and associate member to Rattle And will have to go back and read Barbara Crane's poem "Love Refrains: a ghazal".
- From what I read of your poem I find its dichotomy and formulation of the surrounding words conceptual theme of loving Ivy is trying to accomplish something that may be difficult but you seem to have smoothly and fluidly made it simple.
-The simplicity of this writing is what makes a great.
-Once passionate affection with Ivy is displayed with such Impressionistic demonstratively descriptive imagery. But in a very simple way.
-Good luck in the love poem contest and take care and have a good one Andre'.
Alex
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Yes, Alex, go back and read Crane's poem. It is so seldom that rhymed poems are published in Rattle, so this caught my attention because it is a semi-finalist in the contest. While I voted for Jimmy Pappas' "Bobby's Story" in the Readers' Choice Award, I still admire Crane's innovation in this Arabic-Indian form.
Thank you for your review and for wishing me good luck in the FanStory contest.
