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Comment from brenda faye curtis
You've fleshed out the story more with the added element of genetic development (no, rhyme not really intended). The script is getting more interesting, and your cliffhanger at the end is effective.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
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You've fleshed out the story more with the added element of genetic development (no, rhyme not really intended). The script is getting more interesting, and your cliffhanger at the end is effective.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
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Thanks, Brenda
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You're welcome.
Comment from Joan E.
It was good to learn that the humanoid animals had taken over a century to develop and were investigating Pluto. I liked your references to several popular movies and the dialog. More smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
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It was good to learn that the humanoid animals had taken over a century to develop and were investigating Pluto. I liked your references to several popular movies and the dialog. More smiles- Joan
Comment Written 04-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
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Thanks, Joan
Comment from nomi338
I feel so much better now that I know that you are going to continue this story. It seems that Father Bear is acting like so many other parents, anybody but my child. Rare is the parent willing to allow their child to venture out into the unknown.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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I feel so much better now that I know that you are going to continue this story. It seems that Father Bear is acting like so many other parents, anybody but my child. Rare is the parent willing to allow their child to venture out into the unknown.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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He should have added not to volunteer for dangerous missions to his list of DON'Ts.
Comment from apky
Professor Gorilla's last remark regarding an explanation, sounded as civil servant as they come!
I'm still having a great time with this, and almost there in transcribing Bear's accent on my word processor!
I had a huge grin at this one, Bill:
Similar, perhaps, to ice cubes melting on one's navel or other area of the skin's surface, all at once, and not in an enjoyable way?
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Professor Gorilla's last remark regarding an explanation, sounded as civil servant as they come!
I'm still having a great time with this, and almost there in transcribing Bear's accent on my word processor!
I had a huge grin at this one, Bill:
Similar, perhaps, to ice cubes melting on one's navel or other area of the skin's surface, all at once, and not in an enjoyable way?
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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I hope this ends well. This is Aardvark 's World so I guess he needs to be a part of wherever we're going.
Thank you for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
He's right that Pluto is colllddd... shudder. Not my first choice, nor theirs, but it's the only one left. I love Plan 9 from Outer Space... so funny! I must have watched it four times over the years. :)
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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He's right that Pluto is colllddd... shudder. Not my first choice, nor theirs, but it's the only one left. I love Plan 9 from Outer Space... so funny! I must have watched it four times over the years. :)
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Ed Wood came up in conversation the other day as someone was discussing bad movies with cult followings.
Comment from Gloria ....
Another fascinating chapter, Bill. Uh oh, the plot is thickening because any time there's a secret it usually means bad news for the ones kept out of the secret.
Looking forward to where this goes next.
Gloria
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
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Another fascinating chapter, Bill. Uh oh, the plot is thickening because any time there's a secret it usually means bad news for the ones kept out of the secret.
Looking forward to where this goes next.
Gloria
Comment Written 02-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
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Thanks, Gloria. I've changed some dialogue to make the captain seem more informed about the secret mission.
Comment from pbomar1115
Isn't it always the way? The leader, the one who called the meeting, Captain Lion is the last to know the particulars of the meeting. Now, what will he do? Hopefully, I will learn that in the next scene.
Phillip
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
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Isn't it always the way? The leader, the one who called the meeting, Captain Lion is the last to know the particulars of the meeting. Now, what will he do? Hopefully, I will learn that in the next scene.
Phillip
Comment Written 02-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
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That's a great point, Phillip. I've reassigned some dialog to get the skipper up to speed. Thanks.
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No, no, no, Bill. I'm not making any corrections, but if you see where my review helps then that's ok. Write what you think. I get ideas from reviews too. Sometimes they help my story goal and sometimes not. Do what you what.
Phillip
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Too late; changed it!!
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It was up to you, my friend.
Phillip
Comment from BeasPeas
Good job on this, Bill. As a matter of fact, I may be the only person on the planet (except perhaps you) who actually has a VHS tape of "Attack of The Killer Tomatoes." It's on the bookshelf next to me as I type this.
There is a slight typo here: "other area (areas) of the skin's surface, all at once, and not in an enjoyable way?"
Marilyn
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
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Good job on this, Bill. As a matter of fact, I may be the only person on the planet (except perhaps you) who actually has a VHS tape of "Attack of The Killer Tomatoes." It's on the bookshelf next to me as I type this.
There is a slight typo here: "other area (areas) of the skin's surface, all at once, and not in an enjoyable way?"
Marilyn
Comment Written 02-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
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I see your point on the 'area' use, but feel that my intention was suggestive of a specific area as opposed to anywhere. Otherwise I'd agree wholeheartedly.
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. Suspense. I can't imagine the need for such secrecy but we will know in the next episode. I did watch Plan 9 from Outer Space. I don't remember a thing except that we watched it because of the Ed Wood movie.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
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Lol. Suspense. I can't imagine the need for such secrecy but we will know in the next episode. I did watch Plan 9 from Outer Space. I don't remember a thing except that we watched it because of the Ed Wood movie.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
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Thanks, Helen, for giving this a look. Things have changed in the future. There is no trust, unlike now. Things may get better though. (In the future; for now we're SOL.)
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Another good chapter in your Aardvark tale.
I think that you are having fun with this one, yes?
Well done.
I'm looking forward to the next bit.
Sharon
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
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Another good chapter in your Aardvark tale.
I think that you are having fun with this one, yes?
Well done.
I'm looking forward to the next bit.
Sharon
Comment Written 02-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
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Thanks, Sharon.
