If I Did Love Thee in the Fall
a love poem for the young and young at heart26 total reviews
Comment from Asem.inspirations
If you loved me in the fall it would be great but love me all of the time. Your poem is sweet and the words are flowing like a love song. The picture appropriately gives that feeling that feeds my imagination with the poem. The fall is truly a great time to walk together among all of the colors creating memories of walks together for years to come. NICE!
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2017
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If you loved me in the fall it would be great but love me all of the time. Your poem is sweet and the words are flowing like a love song. The picture appropriately gives that feeling that feeds my imagination with the poem. The fall is truly a great time to walk together among all of the colors creating memories of walks together for years to come. NICE!
Comment Written 01-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2017
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I agree that love is wonderful any time of year. Thanks for sharing my love poem, Tier, and your kind praise.
Comment from patcelaw
Author this is wonderfully worded and presented poem for the contest. I did enjoy the read and I wish you luck in the contest. Patricia
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2017
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Author this is wonderfully worded and presented poem for the contest. I did enjoy the read and I wish you luck in the contest. Patricia
Comment Written 01-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2017
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Thank you so much, Patricia, for sharing my love poem and your very kind praise.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A good contest entry, but it seems like you're working too hard to be poetic. It's only my dumb opinion, but I think the poem would read better if was not so flowery.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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A good contest entry, but it seems like you're working too hard to be poetic. It's only my dumb opinion, but I think the poem would read better if was not so flowery.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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I truly appreciate your taking the time to read "If I Did Love" and comment, Thomas. Perhaps you are right, but I hope the voters do not share your opinion.
Comment from RGstar
I really liked the idea, as well some beautiful phrases here, yet, I can't but help think that you might use "you" instead of "thee," for when you use archaic words, you must try to follow throughout, or it works against the write.
The repeating line with "thee" seems so detract from the rest in each of the stanzas, I think using "you" would form that bridge a little better, for it is a lovely write.
My best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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I really liked the idea, as well some beautiful phrases here, yet, I can't but help think that you might use "you" instead of "thee," for when you use archaic words, you must try to follow throughout, or it works against the write.
The repeating line with "thee" seems so detract from the rest in each of the stanzas, I think using "you" would form that bridge a little better, for it is a lovely write.
My best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 30-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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I really appreciate your taking the time to share my poem, RGstar, and your praise and suggestions are much appreciated. I know the term is archaic, but to me there is something more romantic and intimate about "thee"."
Comment from Joy Graham
This is lovely :) I hoped you'd change the last line to declare that you do love thee in all seasons. I love the art that sets the mood. I love your use of music terms like chorales, and serenade. I'm unsure of canticle as I can't find it in my Oxford dictionary. I thought it was a musical word??? I love your all around soft and romantic poetry. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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This is lovely :) I hoped you'd change the last line to declare that you do love thee in all seasons. I love the art that sets the mood. I love your use of music terms like chorales, and serenade. I'm unsure of canticle as I can't find it in my Oxford dictionary. I thought it was a musical word??? I love your all around soft and romantic poetry. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much, Joy, for your high praise of my love poem. A "canticle" is a song, poem, or hymn, specially of praise.
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Yes, I googled it. I enjoyed your musical words in this poem.
Comment from hari anand
A wonderful love poem that describes the beauty of fall too...Those magical moment is very well painted in your poem and the painting chosen....
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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A wonderful love poem that describes the beauty of fall too...Those magical moment is very well painted in your poem and the painting chosen....
Comment Written 30-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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I truly appreciate your sharing my love poem and your very kind praise.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a lovely, somewhat solemn view of love - solid in its fluid movement and striking in its presentation and complementary image. I found the poem smooth in rhythm and easy in its rhyming sound - fully compliant with the prompt. Best of luck in the contest...
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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In my opinion, a lovely, somewhat solemn view of love - solid in its fluid movement and striking in its presentation and complementary image. I found the poem smooth in rhythm and easy in its rhyming sound - fully compliant with the prompt. Best of luck in the contest...
Comment Written 30-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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Thank you for your very thoughtful review and kind praise of my love poem. I meant the poem to be ironic not solemn as he obviously loves this woman quite a bit.
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Well, you accomplished your objective beautifully, and you are very welcome...
Comment from Irish Rain
I love this. I love the refrain, and the imagery this creates in my mind is beautiful. Sure to be a winner, a great entry! Blessings....
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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I love this. I love the refrain, and the imagery this creates in my mind is beautiful. Sure to be a winner, a great entry! Blessings....
Comment Written 30-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much for the lovely compliments and encouragement, Irish.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A serene tranquil write of loves sweet caress and the warmth it brings as Autumn winds impress and breezes freeeze, but not inside the hearts of lovers under the covers, perfect words, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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A serene tranquil write of loves sweet caress and the warmth it brings as Autumn winds impress and breezes freeeze, but not inside the hearts of lovers under the covers, perfect words, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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I am truly delighted you enjoyed my love poem, Dolly. Thanks for sharing.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written love poem. When lovers walking together through the lane hand in hand, we always think back about our first love in our youth, some survive the test of time and others are lost.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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A very well-written love poem. When lovers walking together through the lane hand in hand, we always think back about our first love in our youth, some survive the test of time and others are lost.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Sandra, for sharing my love poem and your kind praise.
