This Time - That Time 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "The Wedding"Veronica is sent back again
36 total reviews
Comment from alexisleech
What a wonderful chapter! You manage to guide the reader through the events that led up to the conception of Francis, and the way you explain it, leaves us in no doubt that Gwendolyn had no choice but to escape the miserable life she would have if she married Randolph. But what does she do now?
I can't wait to find out!
Hugs from France,
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2017
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What a wonderful chapter! You manage to guide the reader through the events that led up to the conception of Francis, and the way you explain it, leaves us in no doubt that Gwendolyn had no choice but to escape the miserable life she would have if she married Randolph. But what does she do now?
I can't wait to find out!
Hugs from France,
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 28-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much, my dear friend, for that lovely review and all those shiny stars!! You are wonderful! Big hugs. Sandra xxxx
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Sandramitchell,
The Wedding - An interesting piece of Fiction, which becomes more interesting in the end leading to the next part.
Smooth and captivating flow from the beginning to the end.
Worth enjoying!
I'm waiting for the coming part.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2017
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Hello Sandramitchell,
The Wedding - An interesting piece of Fiction, which becomes more interesting in the end leading to the next part.
Smooth and captivating flow from the beginning to the end.
Worth enjoying!
I'm waiting for the coming part.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much, my friend. I'm so pleased you are enjoying my story! :) Sandra xxx
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Sandra, Most Welcome!
~ RP
Comment from royowen
Well what can I say? It is a fairly big twist in the story Sandra, but nevertheless one I should have seen coming, how else could Gwendolyn have conceived a child? So Jacob is the father, I was just wondering if the gene is similar to a red haired gene? Well done, excellent progress in the story, you're proving to be a real novelist, a good one too. Good job, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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Well what can I say? It is a fairly big twist in the story Sandra, but nevertheless one I should have seen coming, how else could Gwendolyn have conceived a child? So Jacob is the father, I was just wondering if the gene is similar to a red haired gene? Well done, excellent progress in the story, you're proving to be a real novelist, a good one too. Good job, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 27-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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Thank you for another wonderful review, and for that lovely compliment, my dear friend. Albinism is an inherited condition, it's the same as redheads. Albinos have a missing gene which causes the strange red eye and white hair. Thank you again, my friend. Big hug. :) Sandra xxx
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Utmost pleasure Sandra.
Comment from Brigitte Elko
"The Wedding" is an interesting tale of love and hate. It defines the thin line between the emotions subtly. This is a well written story with some twists within. It may the British spelling but should realise be realize? Though the story was lengthy , it was an intriguing read. Anxious to read about the pregnancy and its effect. Thank you for sharing.
Blessings,
Brigitte
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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"The Wedding" is an interesting tale of love and hate. It defines the thin line between the emotions subtly. This is a well written story with some twists within. It may the British spelling but should realise be realize? Though the story was lengthy , it was an intriguing read. Anxious to read about the pregnancy and its effect. Thank you for sharing.
Blessings,
Brigitte
Comment Written 27-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much for your lovely review. Yes, realise, is UK spelling, I have many problems with UK/US spellings, lol. xx Sandra xxx
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Your writing is most impressive, Sandra - I think she's done the right thing by not marrying him, altho it was a hard decision.
Most enjoyable, my talented friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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Your writing is most impressive, Sandra - I think she's done the right thing by not marrying him, altho it was a hard decision.
Most enjoyable, my talented friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 27-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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What a lovely compliment, thank you so much, Margaret! Gwendolyn has to face her brother now, and he will not be impressed. I don't think I would have like to live in those days. I hope you are still improving, (and resting) my friend. Big hugs. Sandra xxxx
Comment from mbroyles2
This is a tremendous post, my friend.
Your writing stands out with such attention to detail and a well spun storyline.
I love the intrigue and the special characters you bring to life both in the present and in the past.
Super Job!
Michael
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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This is a tremendous post, my friend.
Your writing stands out with such attention to detail and a well spun storyline.
I love the intrigue and the special characters you bring to life both in the present and in the past.
Super Job!
Michael
Comment Written 27-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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It is so nice to see you back again, Michael! I've really missed Granite, so I hope you are here to stay? Thank you so much for this lovely review and all those stars. I really do appreciate you. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from aryr
Definitely an intriguing chapter, Sandra. It answered a lot of questions that had been teasing one's mind. It was well plotted and I really enjoyed how you easily flowed between the times- Veronica's and then Gwendolyn's. It was indeed a wise decision she made by running from the wedding and Randolph even if it was the most difficult decision she ever had to make. He would not have been right for her. Now the hard parts are ahead. Hopefully Frances will be reunited with Jason. Very well done, thanks my friend.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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Definitely an intriguing chapter, Sandra. It answered a lot of questions that had been teasing one's mind. It was well plotted and I really enjoyed how you easily flowed between the times- Veronica's and then Gwendolyn's. It was indeed a wise decision she made by running from the wedding and Randolph even if it was the most difficult decision she ever had to make. He would not have been right for her. Now the hard parts are ahead. Hopefully Frances will be reunited with Jason. Very well done, thanks my friend.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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Oh, Alie, that is such a lovely review. Thank you so much, my friend. I'm so pleased you are still enjoying it. My first book is now on Amazon, and I am so nervous. I have to make this book perfect as the 2nd in the series, so your review is so encouraging. Big hugs, my friend. :) sandra xx
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Awww you have nothing to worry about, your writing is great.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
I agree Sandra. it would have been hard to stop in any place other than where you did. This is such an engaging story and you cleared up a few details for me in this chapter. Your writing is so well thought out and researched. I'm enjoying the saga. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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I agree Sandra. it would have been hard to stop in any place other than where you did. This is such an engaging story and you cleared up a few details for me in this chapter. Your writing is so well thought out and researched. I'm enjoying the saga. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 27-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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That is such a lovely review, Kiwi, thank you so very much. I had news this morning that my first book in this trilogy has been published and on Amazon. I just never thought it would happen. I cried like a baby! lol. Thanks for all your support, my friend. xxx Sandra xx
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Are your books on Kindle edition? I would buy them no problem. Love your style! xx deborah
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Yes it is, the first in this trilogy came out today. I'm so excited. I have to make sure this one is good now! Thank you so much for that lovely compliment, that was so kind of you. I'm still on cloud nine! :) xxx
https://www.amazon.co.uk/This-Time-That-1/dp/1978269390
https://www.amazon.com/This-Time-That-1/dp/1978269390
Comment from c_lucas
A woman on her wedding day would be highly sensitive to her emotions. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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A woman on her wedding day would be highly sensitive to her emotions. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much, Charlie! That is so very kind of you to read my story. Big hugs. :) Sandra xxxxx
I hope you are feeling a little better, my friend, I know you've had a rough time of it lately. Sending another hug. xxx
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Cousin.
I've been waiting for this, to see who the dude is.
"'I wasn't at all surprised when he later told me he was a teacher at the local missionary church.'" (Ah, there ya go!)
"'Any mention of Jacob, and your friend would(will... as in present tense, I think.) be in deeper trouble.'"
"Let me tell you a bit about Jacob first. That way you will understand more fully.'" (Yes, I agree. I know you are excited, woman... but shut up so I can hear about him please! Lol.)
"I secretly met Jacob almost every day at a little(-)used barn where"
"'Especially in the upper level where the hay is fully dried.'" (Ah, so, that's where it happened. Cosy!)
" 'Yes. Apparantly,(Apparently,) it was a gradual happening, although his"
"At last, a smile the melancholy that had been holding Gwendolyn's emotions hostage." (I've read this line six or seven times and something seems wrong, but I'm not sure what. Sorry. Check it out and let me know what you think... I'm curious. Maybe a comma after "smile.")
"'It either is, or it isn't,' I told her." (Take out the dialogue tag because you have the same in the line before it.)
"But we had nowhere to go, and neither of us had the means to support a life together.' " (God, that's sad. Well placed.)
"'As I said before, I believed I had no choice at the time." (Damn!)
" Instead of an encouraging smile, he pulled out his pocket watch and frowned!" (Shit I hate men!)
Wow, she ran out of the church! Go you good thing and never, ever, look back! I sure didn't.
What a brilliant chapter, mate. So sad, and yet with a finish that thrilled me, because I know how it feels to be in a place where you are not wanted, or even liked.
You are a star writer. I got so excited reading this chapter as you can probably tell lol.
Delia says "Kumusta."
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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G'day Cousin.
I've been waiting for this, to see who the dude is.
"'I wasn't at all surprised when he later told me he was a teacher at the local missionary church.'" (Ah, there ya go!)
"'Any mention of Jacob, and your friend would(will... as in present tense, I think.) be in deeper trouble.'"
"Let me tell you a bit about Jacob first. That way you will understand more fully.'" (Yes, I agree. I know you are excited, woman... but shut up so I can hear about him please! Lol.)
"I secretly met Jacob almost every day at a little(-)used barn where"
"'Especially in the upper level where the hay is fully dried.'" (Ah, so, that's where it happened. Cosy!)
" 'Yes. Apparantly,(Apparently,) it was a gradual happening, although his"
"At last, a smile the melancholy that had been holding Gwendolyn's emotions hostage." (I've read this line six or seven times and something seems wrong, but I'm not sure what. Sorry. Check it out and let me know what you think... I'm curious. Maybe a comma after "smile.")
"'It either is, or it isn't,' I told her." (Take out the dialogue tag because you have the same in the line before it.)
"But we had nowhere to go, and neither of us had the means to support a life together.' " (God, that's sad. Well placed.)
"'As I said before, I believed I had no choice at the time." (Damn!)
" Instead of an encouraging smile, he pulled out his pocket watch and frowned!" (Shit I hate men!)
Wow, she ran out of the church! Go you good thing and never, ever, look back! I sure didn't.
What a brilliant chapter, mate. So sad, and yet with a finish that thrilled me, because I know how it feels to be in a place where you are not wanted, or even liked.
You are a star writer. I got so excited reading this chapter as you can probably tell lol.
Delia says "Kumusta."
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 26-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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Thank you - thank you, my lovely, wonderful cousin!! You picked up hundreds of errors which I've now corrected. That line you couldn't work out, OMG! I left a word out. this is what it should have said....
.... At last, a smile penetrated the melancholy that had been holding Gwendolyn?s emotions hostage...
One word and it threw the whole sentence out. I'm so glad you told me. Thank you also for the lovely 6 stars, dear Walu, (I like that name,) Your reviews always give me a chuckle. If I lived near you, I would come and give you a big hug. :) (with Delia's permission, but cousins are allowed to hug, aren't they? lol.)
MY BOOK HAS BEEN PUBLISHED!!! IT'S ON AMAZON! Now my nerves are playing up. It is so nerve-racking. Just wait till yours is out there. Thanks again, you've been so supportive, and I love you for it. Give Delia a hug from me! xxxxxx
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Woooohoooo! Congrats my special cousin... that is soooooo cool! I hope you sell millions.
It is strange how one simple word can change to whole line. Crazy huh?
Wow, I'm so happy for you that I'm going to go and buy some beer and celebrate tonight. The problem is Delia is out collecting money from yesterdays pork sale and Boy has gone home for the day... Ummmmm... what could possibly go wrong if I go by myself?
Nothing you say? Ah, okay, if something does I'll just tell Delia it's your fault hahahahaha!
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Thank you my precious cousin!! I'm just so excited. No, I can't see any problem you going out on your own to have a beer! It might take them a while to find you, but I'm sure they will by Christmas!! LOL.
