Senryu (smiles and cries combined)
A senryu poem.11 total reviews
Comment from B.B. Rose
This aims at a complex human situation where happiness is derailed and, as a result, there are tears followed by anger. I think you might consider using the word "then" in place of "and" in your opening line. This would better reflect that progression. Just a thought.
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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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This aims at a complex human situation where happiness is derailed and, as a result, there are tears followed by anger. I think you might consider using the word "then" in place of "and" in your opening line. This would better reflect that progression. Just a thought.
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Comment Written 25-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely and blessed Sunday.
