I Stand A Naked Man
A life lived.62 total reviews
Comment from Janis Miller
Oof, a very sad and dark story indeed. Your use of language is always a joy to read to learn new words. I don't have any suggestions. Another great work.
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Oof, a very sad and dark story indeed. Your use of language is always a joy to read to learn new words. I don't have any suggestions. Another great work.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent poem and commentary. Great word choices and imagery of such sad story. Good beginning and ending that culminated in result brought on by greed and selfishness. But as it's often said, the most precious things are free.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
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Excellent poem and commentary. Great word choices and imagery of such sad story. Good beginning and ending that culminated in result brought on by greed and selfishness. But as it's often said, the most precious things are free.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It's not until you've lost everything looking for that extra something, that you realise you were rich in everything but never saw it. Greed for more takes even more important things away. This is a really sad poem, and the saddest of all is that many go through this and don't know it till it's all gone. Great poem, EE. Well done. :) Sandra xx
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It's not until you've lost everything looking for that extra something, that you realise you were rich in everything but never saw it. Greed for more takes even more important things away. This is a really sad poem, and the saddest of all is that many go through this and don't know it till it's all gone. Great poem, EE. Well done. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
Comment from Lisasview
Oh dear I am confused??? I thought I already read an entry from you for the Poem of the Month contest entry?
But then again I have kept up daily with your work and so i may have read a poem for an earlier contest entry.
This poem f your feels so differnt from any of the rest... but you already know that.
Lisa
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Oh dear I am confused??? I thought I already read an entry from you for the Poem of the Month contest entry?
But then again I have kept up daily with your work and so i may have read a poem for an earlier contest entry.
This poem f your feels so differnt from any of the rest... but you already know that.
Lisa
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Oh my! This is quite noir. Still, the story has been repeated time and again, with financial gains being more important to many a person than their family was/is/ and likely shall be.
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Oh my! This is quite noir. Still, the story has been repeated time and again, with financial gains being more important to many a person than their family was/is/ and likely shall be.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I think the image of standing naked in front of a mirror says speaks volumes. At the end of the day, we're just flesh and blood and, yet, our mind can deceive us that we're something else. This verse is strong and dramatic in its capturing of the illusions and delusions of youth and how they can leave one shameful and impoverished to the point of not wanting to live any more. Well done! Debbie
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I think the image of standing naked in front of a mirror says speaks volumes. At the end of the day, we're just flesh and blood and, yet, our mind can deceive us that we're something else. This verse is strong and dramatic in its capturing of the illusions and delusions of youth and how they can leave one shameful and impoverished to the point of not wanting to live any more. Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Whoa. I hope this is not autobiographical. This is the saddest most depressing poem I have ever read written by you in a melancholy style of woe. The bride you chose to hide your deceitful ways has died too early from a broken heart. The last line is dark and a suicidal gesture ends the author's life as well.
Jesse
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Whoa. I hope this is not autobiographical. This is the saddest most depressing poem I have ever read written by you in a melancholy style of woe. The bride you chose to hide your deceitful ways has died too early from a broken heart. The last line is dark and a suicidal gesture ends the author's life as well.
Jesse
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
Comment from Jacob1395
Your poem clearly demonstrates the damage chasing success can bring. It does make you think of everything else that is around you, and in the end may make you regret that you didn't hold onto the ones you loved. The image of the bride who he then slowly turned away from is very strong and powerful. I really enjoyed it. Good luck in the contest.
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Your poem clearly demonstrates the damage chasing success can bring. It does make you think of everything else that is around you, and in the end may make you regret that you didn't hold onto the ones you loved. The image of the bride who he then slowly turned away from is very strong and powerful. I really enjoyed it. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, I Stand a Naked Man, presented with twelve ABCB-rhymed quatrains, painfully relives a man's misspent time as a husband that has led to sorrow and regret in the bitter end. This verse is poignant and true of most of us.
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This poem, I Stand a Naked Man, presented with twelve ABCB-rhymed quatrains, painfully relives a man's misspent time as a husband that has led to sorrow and regret in the bitter end. This verse is poignant and true of most of us.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
Comment from Wendyanne
As always your poetry is very well written Easy. I have really missed reading it. It is full of vividly descriptive images, too many to mention. very interesting and thought-provoking.
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As always your poetry is very well written Easy. I have really missed reading it. It is full of vividly descriptive images, too many to mention. very interesting and thought-provoking.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2023
