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Comment from Sharon Haiste
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This is a good poem for the PIX This writing prompt.
It is a wonderful match for the picture.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
    Glad you enjoyed. mike
Comment from Gloria ....
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For a second there I thought I was Gretel listening to Debbie Harry reading fairy tales in the Gingerbread House.

Hmmm Father died mysteriously disappeared overnight while at Gammy's. Wait a minute is he Santa? Uh oh, no.

A young girl, newly found to womenhood, (womanhood)

feeling of helplessness begins to lesson. (lessen)

This is fabulously wonderful, zany and all things Christmas, Mav. You've outdone yourself, and it appears so has gammy, but not those worms.

Great stuff!

Ange

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
    Never underestimate a woman, especially a sweet one who can bake gingerbread cookies. Thanks a million, Ange. AND for the close read. I fixed those little errors. Somehow after a while, I just don't see them anymore.

    Mav
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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Great story for the Pix this challenge mike. Loved the twists and turns, the worms in the garden feed on the Mr Willoughby's and finally Granny and the kids back at the hearth, in peace and love. Very well told. Had to give this a sixer, great write.
cheers.

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2017

Comment from nordicgirl
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Wowwheeeee. This is an amazing whatever it is. A bit poem? Oh well, no one does anything like this but you. It is amazing. Easy to read, buy full of mind boggling insights and pictures. More. NG

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2017

Comment from Brigitte Elko
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I don't have six starts but then you know you deserve them. The mingling and mangling of these words bound together in this poem are ironic , metaphorical, but most of all enjoyable. You are one of a kind poet! When I am served stew,I hunt for what is in it before eating a spoonful; the same with your poetry I look for the obvious but always find that it is too unique to be easily digested. I really enjoyed this one, Michael. Keep penning..
Enjoy the night,
Brigitte

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2017

Comment from Leineco
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My, my. . .what strange paths your mind does explore!

I must say though, you totally held my attention all the way through!!

The worms do turn
most diligently
whatever may land
in the compost heap;

though bones resist
the fleshy parts
make such a lovely
fertilizer
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;-)


 Comment Written 04-Dec-2017

Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written poem and an excellent interpretation of the picture. A great warm and cozy scene with grandma abdcgrand kids waiting for Santa to arrive.

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2017

Comment from c_lucas
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Over the centuries, many evil beings has been fed to the earthly worm. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2017

Comment from Mustang Patty
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Wow, Michael;
this started out as such a sweet story about Gammy. But then the story took a dark turn and kept going. Well done - I like the idea of the mean men sleeping with the worms,

~patty~

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2017

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
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WOW! Quite the journey you took us in with this interpretation of the artwork. There are always undertones and secrets no matter how pretty the picture appears on the outside - you seemed to have brought all the shadows out into the light. This is very well done. Thank you very much for sharing it.

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 Comment Written 04-Dec-2017