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Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about genes, unknown and unconscious and uncontrollably we become the victim of genes inevitably for breeding, but choosing the right genes is situational and somewhat impossible; I liked.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2017
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This speaks about genes, unknown and unconscious and uncontrollably we become the victim of genes inevitably for breeding, but choosing the right genes is situational and somewhat impossible; I liked.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2017
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I appreciate your encouraging comments. Indeed we are driven by genes. It has been recognized long time ago that development of human race depends on the properly adjusted genes for a better progeny. Selective marriages among the royalties all over the world was practiced. In India, a science of gene matching was known thousands of years ago and cast systems were built on this. Thanks.
Arun
Comment from gene roush
This is an informative story with a nice protanganist.
Your lack of use of definitive articles(the, a, that) disrupt the flow of the story.
There are some basic grammatical errors that with correction could improve the story.
This is an interesting post, on an overlooked subject.
Thanks for sharing
Gene
You misuse "The"
"In the most cases" The word, "the" is a definitive article, to be used to indcate a perticular case, not in a generalization.
The word "A" can also be used to indicate a particular event or individual. In many cases you failed to use either. Examples is:
He treated (a)few wounded rebel soldiers
I'm sorry, the lack of use of "the" and "a" seemed more rampant on my first reading. I'm struggling to find examples now.
So perhaps they were just over sites that jumped out at me.
Thanks again for sharing your story.
Gene
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2017
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This is an informative story with a nice protanganist.
Your lack of use of definitive articles(the, a, that) disrupt the flow of the story.
There are some basic grammatical errors that with correction could improve the story.
This is an interesting post, on an overlooked subject.
Thanks for sharing
Gene
You misuse "The"
"In the most cases" The word, "the" is a definitive article, to be used to indcate a perticular case, not in a generalization.
The word "A" can also be used to indicate a particular event or individual. In many cases you failed to use either. Examples is:
He treated (a)few wounded rebel soldiers
I'm sorry, the lack of use of "the" and "a" seemed more rampant on my first reading. I'm struggling to find examples now.
So perhaps they were just over sites that jumped out at me.
Thanks again for sharing your story.
Gene
Comment Written 21-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2017
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I wish you had identified few such sentences. I used the advance editing of fanstory.Com, but it did not identify any. As a writer, I pay attention to my story telling and leave grammar etc., to the editors. I find it quite vexing when I get criticized by grammatical correctness of some reviewers because when I use the Oxford dictionary recommended definitive articles, I get red ink from the Advanced Editor Software, and if I take that as an American grammatical norm, I get criticized too. Well this is how I write and when the novel will go for the publication, I will leave it to the editors to fix the problems. I will be reviewing the chapter to see where I missed those, a,the, and that. Thanks for your review.
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Give me the holiday and I'll get back to you with examples.
Gene
