Looking through the window of love
Love's window is always clear15 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about love and how we look at what we want through a window, when going too close is not possible. A loved one far away is the one we adore the most.
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A very well-written poem about love and how we look at what we want through a window, when going too close is not possible. A loved one far away is the one we adore the most.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Thanks as always Sandra much appreciated
dip
Comment from closetpoetjester
Oooh, nice view, AND it rhymes haha
Your window is clear, open, breezy...shit! Brrrrr, shut that thing will ya?!
It's fookin cold.
Now if I'm staying, just WHAT are your pouring in the morning?? LOL
And whats this about forgetting about the badness...
I thought thats why I was here hahaha
Px
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Oooh, nice view, AND it rhymes haha
Your window is clear, open, breezy...shit! Brrrrr, shut that thing will ya?!
It's fookin cold.
Now if I'm staying, just WHAT are your pouring in the morning?? LOL
And whats this about forgetting about the badness...
I thought thats why I was here hahaha
Px
Comment Written 10-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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I'll leave the window ajar just for you snookems You bad arse girl you with no panties on
xdip
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Give them back LOL
They look better on me, you ninny
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I love the idea of staring out the window and in the pane of glass, seeing the reflection of the one you love, sadness, but still longing. Great content
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I love the idea of staring out the window and in the pane of glass, seeing the reflection of the one you love, sadness, but still longing. Great content
Comment Written 10-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Thanks again Barb much appreciated
dip
Comment from Sis Cat
Dip, your poem on the window of love reminds me of that phrase "the eyes are the window of the soul." In your poem, love itself is the window through which one sees a beloved. This is an apt metaphor as you express here:
The window of love is so clear
I look out to the world through the pane
Knowing you'll always be near
Beautiful memories will always remain
After rhapsodizing on the window of love, your poem ends with the shadow-cast clouds of loneliness and longing:
I lay on my pillow and the sadness
Creeps in to my life once more
Just have to forget all the badness
Of not having the one I adore
This is a fine poem that talks about different aspects of the window of love. the window of love can also leave you outside in the cold rather than inside snuggling warm with a beloved.
Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Dip, your poem on the window of love reminds me of that phrase "the eyes are the window of the soul." In your poem, love itself is the window through which one sees a beloved. This is an apt metaphor as you express here:
The window of love is so clear
I look out to the world through the pane
Knowing you'll always be near
Beautiful memories will always remain
After rhapsodizing on the window of love, your poem ends with the shadow-cast clouds of loneliness and longing:
I lay on my pillow and the sadness
Creeps in to my life once more
Just have to forget all the badness
Of not having the one I adore
This is a fine poem that talks about different aspects of the window of love. the window of love can also leave you outside in the cold rather than inside snuggling warm with a beloved.
Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 10-Nov-2017
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Thanks again Andre much appreciated as always
dip
Comment from sandy montgomery
This is well done. Good use of imagery. Great flow throughout the piece. Your rhymes are well constructed and natural. I love the image of the window your words evoke. Good metaphor too. Thank you for sharing your work.
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This is well done. Good use of imagery. Great flow throughout the piece. Your rhymes are well constructed and natural. I love the image of the window your words evoke. Good metaphor too. Thank you for sharing your work.
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Comment Written 10-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much for reading Sandy. You always make me feel good about my poetry
dip
