Comment from B.B. Rose

Excellent

Best check to see what folks here at FanStory consider "haiku." I'm thinking the "experts" would label these forms as 5-7-5 verses. I thought your first verse was a nice capture of modern culture and the second verse a well done cautionary vision of the future. I hate to admit it, but didn't get the last verse. At first I thought the math might be 666, but that math didn't work. Rose

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017

Thanks for the good review and kind comments brother. I really appreciate your view. In the third one what I was hinting at is that everything is advancing exponentially another words 3 + 30 than 300

Comment from irishauthorme

Excellent

Recognized that nebula, and your verse reflects the thoughts that go through our minds as we look in wonder.
The slow turnings of the universe affect us more than we acknowledge and the truth is hidden most of our lives as we do go too fast-and faster.
A drawback that so much is hidden from us in life and only revealed after we cross that abyss.
Rhyme, Reason?
Who the hell knows?
irish

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2017

Really appreciate your in-depth comments. I do not find it ironic that you're one of the few people that comprehends the hidden meanings on my work.
Blessings brother badger

Comment from frierajac

Excellent

This is an interesting thought and the presentation is interesting. You may want to consider using the word, 'score' as a multipicative. instead of using ' more' twice.
Because of the use of 'thrice', it seems to fit. Just a suggestion.

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017

Thank you sir for the great review and your great suggestions I really appreciate it. I really hate using the word more than once I thanks for your advice I will definitely edit. Blessings, brother badger. Thanks for your continued support

Comment from Bucketlist

Excellent

I lost track, but I think this one preceded Secret Door in posting. My reviews are way behind schedule, your poem is an interesting 'take' on the 'rat race' of life.
Thanks for sharing.
BL

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017

Thanks Tricia I really appreciate your comments and continued support keep up the good work. God bless and blessings, Darren

reply by Bucketlist on 13-Nov-2017

Always welcome B.B.

Comment from smileycloud

Excellent

well
I see now where our earth might be going
pending doom is always on the cards when one does not regard their home planet
and all that it holds including their fellow man
I must admit I do not understand the numbers in the last stanza but then again I can tend to be a bit slow
blessings
very nice write
have a smiley day

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017

What I meant by the numbers in the last 10 days that we are advancing exponentially another words 1st at 3 then 30 then 300. We are advancing at faster rate all the time. Thanks for the wonderful and kind review. Blessings, Darren

reply by smileycloud on 10-Nov-2017

::))

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi, Brother Badger;
Are we simply moving faster towards the coming disaster? Your words worked well with the photo and the lines of your work made me think and reflect,

Well done,

~patty~

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017

Miss Patty always a pleasure and an honor to hear from you thank you for sharing your kind words I'm perspective. Blessings, Darren

Comment from lauralumummu

Excellent

So true the more we know the less we learn, Too bad wisdom and common sense don't always accompany knowledge. Interesting and thoughtful. I guess this is poetic license but I wish there were capitols ( uppercase ) at the beginning of each sentence. All the best, Laura.

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017

Thank you so much for stopping by Laura. Always a pleasure and honor to hear from and meet somebody new here. I really appreciate your help and your comments with my poetry. I started using lower case for my haikus because I wanted to seem less significant unless understated however I really do appreciate the critique. I know how to write with you. Blessings, Darren

reply by lauralumummu on 10-Nov-2017

Your Welcome!