Comment from Kelly Grim

Excellent

This is so nice! Warm, festive, welcoming... that's the best thing, I think, just how welcoming both your poem and the festival is! That last full stanza before the end is my favorite! Lovely tribute to a lovely tradition!

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2018

Comment from Donka Kristeva

Excellent

Lively, enchanting, and very entertaining introduction ( to me) to a Diwali festival. The festivity, joy and gratitude are expressed in honesty and clarity. All in great rhyme and rhythm.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2018

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

I would most certainly come if I could! It sounds wonderful, and I love learning about different cultures. I've discovered that I adore ethnic food...it's the tempting spices!!! Loved this!!
Blessings...

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2018

Comment from Shanbreen

Excellent

I like this poem because it reminds me of my days in India. However, I find it a bit choppy and the assonance and the rhyme seems a bit forced. For example,

With delight and gratitude, we joyfully dine.
Every feeding before us; "Ummm! ... just fine."

Also, there are some grammar problems. For example,

Every mother's child, have taken their places ("Every mother's child has taken his/her place" or better yet, "Children have taken their places.")

Overall, a good job. It made me happy reading it.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2018

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

This Contest Winner was well written and Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read Well and Flowed well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content and Objective Content were both excellent and exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Doctor Ricky 1024

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2018

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

What a joyful and uplifting write celebrating a colorful religious Hindu festival -- Diwali! ;) Love these posts that share the different and wonderful cultural heritage we have in the Fanstory family! ;) Thank you for sharing!

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2018

Comment from LaFrance

Excellent

Thank you for sharing your festive poem. It has a nice flow and pleasing rhyme and an intriguing tale of a Hindu Festival of Lights. Very nice poem and good luck.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2018

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Hi Rhonnie. This is a fine poem about a Diwali Festival of Lights celebration. It's bright, colourful and one can feel the joy.

One small typo:

Diya dinning (dining) lamps are lit.

I can see why this poem won. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2018

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi there,

Thank you for reviving your winning entry. You did a wonderful job of describing the joy of Diwali.

The rhyme and rhythm was wonderful and I learned a great deal about this Hindu holiday.

MP

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2018

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

This is a great poem in celebration of Diwali. I like the rhymes and the message. Congratulations on your win. Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2018