This Time - That Time 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Enlightenment part 1"Veronica is sent back again
36 total reviews
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi Sandra,
I must have missed these chapters where you introduce Gwendolyne so I'm catching up now. You have a talent for explaining this story to make it believable. You convinced me that time travel is quite normal lol!
Joy xx
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Hi Sandra,
I must have missed these chapters where you introduce Gwendolyne so I'm catching up now. You have a talent for explaining this story to make it believable. You convinced me that time travel is quite normal lol!
Joy xx
Comment Written 29-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Thanks, Joy. Yes, I pop back and forth every now and then! LOL. Your words are like sweet syrup over my yummy spotted-dick! (if you don't know what that is, it's a suet pudding with sultanas in, steamed for at least 2 hours and served with loads of golden syrup poured over it! ) Big hugs, dear friend! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from rwilliam
Oh it is so good to be back and reading your story. I've missed it! The photo you picked fit this chapter so perfectly. I didn't see any fixes and enjoyed it very much. It is so believable. I like that! :-)
Have a wonderful Holiday Season.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2017
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Oh it is so good to be back and reading your story. I've missed it! The photo you picked fit this chapter so perfectly. I didn't see any fixes and enjoyed it very much. It is so believable. I like that! :-)
Have a wonderful Holiday Season.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2017
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Thank you so much for going back and reading this part, Rebecca, and for giving it the lovely 6 stars! I've missed you too! You are such an encouraging reviewer and I really appreciate that. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from frogbook
Oh, my gosh, I am striving to catch up as I have been so busy and off site for the most part. This was a GREAT chapter though, revealing some relationships before others we are well aware of. Very captivating.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Oh, my gosh, I am striving to catch up as I have been so busy and off site for the most part. This was a GREAT chapter though, revealing some relationships before others we are well aware of. Very captivating.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Hi JoAnn, lovely to see you. I'm so pleased you liked this part. Thank you for reading it, I know what it's like when we need to take time away to sort out the mundane things, like, LIFE, LOL. I think we all have times like that, I know I do. Big hugs for coming and another big hug for the lovely review, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from write hand blue
Hi Sandra. I'm sorry to see that you have been ill, I hope it was nothing serious and that have recovered.
There is a homeliness to this story that draws me to it. A down to earth story (if that is the correct description for the supernatural). Lady Gwendolyn full of anxiety for her son Francis, a natural emotion and strong enough to keep her at the house past her Earthly life.
I could find no fault in this excellent episode.
~Mel~ xx
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Hi Sandra. I'm sorry to see that you have been ill, I hope it was nothing serious and that have recovered.
There is a homeliness to this story that draws me to it. A down to earth story (if that is the correct description for the supernatural). Lady Gwendolyn full of anxiety for her son Francis, a natural emotion and strong enough to keep her at the house past her Earthly life.
I could find no fault in this excellent episode.
~Mel~ xx
Comment Written 09-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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I think that is a lovely description of my story, thank you so much, Mel. I would love to use it for my website I'm putting together in the testimonials page once this book is finished, If that is alright with you? I really appreciate your lovely words, thank you! :) xx
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My pleasure. Please do go ahead, I would be flattered. My first published work. lol ~Mel~
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I'd like to view your website when it's running...
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I'll let you know when it is. :) Do you have one? I'm new to all this, so it's a bit trial and error. I'm slowly getting there. xx
:)
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Sandra, I've answered you with a PM...
Comment from mmonaghan777
Please keep going. I have to know how you keep it straight between the ghosts and the traveler from the future. I really am enjoying this and can't wait for more.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Please keep going. I have to know how you keep it straight between the ghosts and the traveler from the future. I really am enjoying this and can't wait for more.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Thank you! I have a long way to go yet. I'm really pleased you are enjoying my story. :) sandra xx
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good image choice.
-Another good chapter, too, Sandra.
-It tells us a bit more about L. Gwendolyn,
like she does not have the title of Lady.
-Gwendolyn does not easily reveal
information without knowing something
about Ver., in turn.
-Their discussion shows how they
are trying to figure out what to do
about Francis, but there are no easy answers.
-Ver. even says that Sir John was petrified
of Francis, and then this part of the
story ends with Gwendolyn's seemingly dire
thought that she doesn't complete.
-Thus, the chapter ends with the continuing
puzzle about Francis, his father, and what
has happened to the boy.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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-Good image choice.
-Another good chapter, too, Sandra.
-It tells us a bit more about L. Gwendolyn,
like she does not have the title of Lady.
-Gwendolyn does not easily reveal
information without knowing something
about Ver., in turn.
-Their discussion shows how they
are trying to figure out what to do
about Francis, but there are no easy answers.
-Ver. even says that Sir John was petrified
of Francis, and then this part of the
story ends with Gwendolyn's seemingly dire
thought that she doesn't complete.
-Thus, the chapter ends with the continuing
puzzle about Francis, his father, and what
has happened to the boy.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Hi Pam, I love your review, my friend, it is so good I want to read the book!! LOL. Bless you, my friend. Thank you so much for another really wonderful review and all the shiny stars! Big hugs, :) Sandra xxx
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I am glad you liked the review and want to read the book; I highly recommend it🙂
You are very welcome and deserving of the review and stars, Sandra!
Comment from rspoet
Sandra,
Ha, so one page in the mystery comes to the fore
Mistress Gwendolyn is in fact the mother. I thought she had some secrets.
Note: you spelled the name Gwendolyne with the "e' in the notes.
Now the question is, who is the father?
Is it a new character? There seem to be few possibilities.
Only the people at the mission have appeared so far.
and mission church seems the best option to "get rid of Frances."
An excellent chapter that explains a little and leaves a lot unexplained, as it should.
Well done
Hope your health improves, my friend. That is the most important thing.
It's a good thing you don't live in 1846.
RS
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Sandra,
Ha, so one page in the mystery comes to the fore
Mistress Gwendolyn is in fact the mother. I thought she had some secrets.
Note: you spelled the name Gwendolyne with the "e' in the notes.
Now the question is, who is the father?
Is it a new character? There seem to be few possibilities.
Only the people at the mission have appeared so far.
and mission church seems the best option to "get rid of Frances."
An excellent chapter that explains a little and leaves a lot unexplained, as it should.
Well done
Hope your health improves, my friend. That is the most important thing.
It's a good thing you don't live in 1846.
RS
Comment Written 08-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Hi Robert. thank you for the spelling error in Gwendolyn, I would never have noticed it had you not pointed it out.
You thought she had some secrets? Mmm, you could be right there, on the other hand.... Mmm.
Me thinks Veronica has to improve her interrogation skills!
Thank you so much for another of your really lovely reviews, my friend and another galaxy of shiny stars! Bless your heart. Big hugs! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from EverInParadise
Good story as I follow along I've become more and more aware of the strength on this tale. I read still the way you have mostly TELLING of facial expressions instead of SHOWING the 'grimace or smile or appearance of body response. But overall I do enjoy these writings.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Good story as I follow along I've become more and more aware of the strength on this tale. I read still the way you have mostly TELLING of facial expressions instead of SHOWING the 'grimace or smile or appearance of body response. But overall I do enjoy these writings.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Thank you, EverinParadise, I'll keep an eye on that and see if I can learn to show more than tell. I'm glad you're enjoying the story though, so thank you for your input. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Rasmine
Good chapter.
I hope you feel better. I hate being sick, myself.
I didn't find any errors. I just hope that Francis is going to be okay. It's also so cool that you wrote the mother's ghost in the chapter! :)
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Good chapter.
I hope you feel better. I hate being sick, myself.
I didn't find any errors. I just hope that Francis is going to be okay. It's also so cool that you wrote the mother's ghost in the chapter! :)
Comment Written 08-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Rasmine, I'm glad you enjoyed this part, we might start to get somewhere soon!! Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Jay Squires
Ah, Sandra ... reading this is like coming home to a dear friend. I'd missed your story and now I find you hadn't posted for a while owing to an illness. I hope you are better and that it wasn't too serious.
Here are a few things I stumbled upon that you might want to consider:
'I won't be able to rest easy until I know he's safe. If my brother decides to get rid of him, I never will.' [I realize this is dialogue and dialogue trumps narrative because it is character driven. But sometimes what is delivered as realistic dialogue by a character can cause confusion to the reader if it's not modified. In this case, her tag-along, "I never will" can refer to not resting easy (which I believe is your intention), but it can also refer to "I never will GET RID OF HIM." Does that make any sense?]
She straightened up and looked at me steadily, while I held my breath as I waited for her to answer my question. As it turned out, I was to be disappointed. [Just a little question on syntax. Because of the two uses of "as" in consecutive sentences and also "while" which serves the same bridge-like function, I'd offer a suggestion to use the present participle "waiting" for the "as I waited". It seems to lend the sentences a little more flow. Just a thought for you to consider.]
I have as much power as you have, in that respect.' [Or ... "I have as LITTLE power as you, in that respect." To me, that offers more vivid contrast. But I may be just picking nits.]
. Her eyes seemed to drink up the view, and then blink it into her mind for safe keeping. [I like your use of "blink it into her mind ..."]
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Ah, Sandra ... reading this is like coming home to a dear friend. I'd missed your story and now I find you hadn't posted for a while owing to an illness. I hope you are better and that it wasn't too serious.
Here are a few things I stumbled upon that you might want to consider:
'I won't be able to rest easy until I know he's safe. If my brother decides to get rid of him, I never will.' [I realize this is dialogue and dialogue trumps narrative because it is character driven. But sometimes what is delivered as realistic dialogue by a character can cause confusion to the reader if it's not modified. In this case, her tag-along, "I never will" can refer to not resting easy (which I believe is your intention), but it can also refer to "I never will GET RID OF HIM." Does that make any sense?]
She straightened up and looked at me steadily, while I held my breath as I waited for her to answer my question. As it turned out, I was to be disappointed. [Just a little question on syntax. Because of the two uses of "as" in consecutive sentences and also "while" which serves the same bridge-like function, I'd offer a suggestion to use the present participle "waiting" for the "as I waited". It seems to lend the sentences a little more flow. Just a thought for you to consider.]
I have as much power as you have, in that respect.' [Or ... "I have as LITTLE power as you, in that respect." To me, that offers more vivid contrast. But I may be just picking nits.]
. Her eyes seemed to drink up the view, and then blink it into her mind for safe keeping. [I like your use of "blink it into her mind ..."]
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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You, nit pick? No, you are right in pointing it out. I've made the changes to all your suggestions, and thank you so very much for them. I've missed your insight and help, my friend, and welcome all you have to give me, gratefully. Thank you. When will I see your books on the market? Big hugs, my dear friend. :) Sandra xxxx