The Cardinal
A poignant moment from my childhood.45 total reviews
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Laura: I like your story about the cardinals. Yes, we see cardinals
in our pine trees. The male is the darker bird and he watches his mate.
I'm sure that this moment of time stuck in your head, birds watching
each other. The bird seemed to want to tell his story.
Nice story. flylikeaneagle - nancy
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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Laura: I like your story about the cardinals. Yes, we see cardinals
in our pine trees. The male is the darker bird and he watches his mate.
I'm sure that this moment of time stuck in your head, birds watching
each other. The bird seemed to want to tell his story.
Nice story. flylikeaneagle - nancy
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful comments.
Comment from Mabaker
Yes so do Drongo's. Two came for a visit one day just after we moved into a new rental. A man with a bird aviary shot one that was hanging around his caged birds. The lone bird still calls for his mate. Sad but true. Anne.
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Yes so do Drongo's. Two came for a visit one day just after we moved into a new rental. A man with a bird aviary shot one that was hanging around his caged birds. The lone bird still calls for his mate. Sad but true. Anne.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
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That is so sad. Thanks for your feedback, I really appreciate it.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Wow! This story touched me and this must have been a sad moment for you. You were only 8 years old and this memory has been with you all these years, such a kind heart you have, a sad meloncholy story that is so very touching, love Dolly x
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Wow! This story touched me and this must have been a sad moment for you. You were only 8 years old and this memory has been with you all these years, such a kind heart you have, a sad meloncholy story that is so very touching, love Dolly x
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Thanks, Dolly your comments are always thoughtful and encouraging.
Comment from c_lucas
Some fowls and mammals mate for life. This is a very sad poem with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery and descriptive read.
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Some fowls and mammals mate for life. This is a very sad poem with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery and descriptive read.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
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Thank you for your comments I really appreciate them.
Comment from Dan Diego
Warm, well-written, and aimed right for the heart. I loved it. It combines the innocence of an eight-year old with the harsh reality of loss. I looked for spelling, and grammar errors. I found none. Though I felt a few commas were needed after a few clauses (When I was about eight years old...), this did not interrupt the flow. Plus, as the writer, you get to decide when you want the reader to take a breath. Of course, the strength of this submission is the last line. In Missouri, we learn that a cardinal outside your house means that someone in Heaven is thinking about you.
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Warm, well-written, and aimed right for the heart. I loved it. It combines the innocence of an eight-year old with the harsh reality of loss. I looked for spelling, and grammar errors. I found none. Though I felt a few commas were needed after a few clauses (When I was about eight years old...), this did not interrupt the flow. Plus, as the writer, you get to decide when you want the reader to take a breath. Of course, the strength of this submission is the last line. In Missouri, we learn that a cardinal outside your house means that someone in Heaven is thinking about you.
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Thanks for your thoughtful comments. I appreciate your feedback.
Comment from apky
Oh, how beautiful and sad at the same time. I'm amazed at how many creatures, unlike us humans, have the moral fibre to mate for life. The big cats do that too, and I've read of a number of sea creatures who also mate for life.
Thanks for this lovely story. Good luck with the contest.
he seemed to be looking down at something on (the) road and was very still.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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Oh, how beautiful and sad at the same time. I'm amazed at how many creatures, unlike us humans, have the moral fibre to mate for life. The big cats do that too, and I've read of a number of sea creatures who also mate for life.
Thanks for this lovely story. Good luck with the contest.
he seemed to be looking down at something on (the) road and was very still.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
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Thanks for your thoughtful comments. I really appreciate them.
Comment from zekeziemann
Wonderful story, well written with a little build up to a great ending. I have never seen a Cardinal except in a baseball uniform. Keep writing.
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Wonderful story, well written with a little build up to a great ending. I have never seen a Cardinal except in a baseball uniform. Keep writing.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2017
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Lol, the birds are really beautiful. Thanks for your thoughtful comments.
Comment from mermaids
I have quite a few cardinals in my backyard here on Cape Cod. Your story is touching, it is so sad to see a cardinal grieve. These beautiful birds are such a joy to watch and your story enters the heart.
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I have quite a few cardinals in my backyard here on Cape Cod. Your story is touching, it is so sad to see a cardinal grieve. These beautiful birds are such a joy to watch and your story enters the heart.
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Thank you for your kind review. I really appreciate it.
Comment from Ferkit
Wow. That brought tears to my eyes. I'm such an animal lover. I can sense your excitement for riding a bike by yourself. And what a sadness that came over you when you saw the cardinal. It's a sad memory told with great feeling.
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Wow. That brought tears to my eyes. I'm such an animal lover. I can sense your excitement for riding a bike by yourself. And what a sadness that came over you when you saw the cardinal. It's a sad memory told with great feeling.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2017
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Thanks so much for your kind review! I appreciate it more than you can ever know.
Comment from kahpot
What a wonderful yet very sad story, and it is quite strange that sometimes we can tell or feel the pain of others, very well done and good luck in your competition****kahpot
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What a wonderful yet very sad story, and it is quite strange that sometimes we can tell or feel the pain of others, very well done and good luck in your competition****kahpot
Comment Written 09-Dec-2017
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Thanks so much for your kind comments I really appreciate them.
