Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written six-word poem. When we exercise to do good to others. Good deeds will be returned in ways we never expect it. Our souls will be happier than ever before.

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017

Thank you Sandra for taking the time to review my six word poem. I appreciate you comments, as always. ~DD

Comment from Poetic Friend

Excellent

This is really good. In its brevity, your poem spoke volumes and volumes.

I love your play on words with "feats." Very clever word choice.

Also, I love the wisdom that lies within these six words.

Good luck in the contest. This poem certainly has winning potential.

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017

Thank you so much Poetic Friend. Your review on my six word poem was very much appreciated and encouraging. It made my day : -) ~DD

Comment from jenintorre

Excellent

Excellent six word poem. You are quite right I did have to read it out loud to fully appreciate it.
It then became apparent. Very clever. I wish you luck in the competition.

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017

Thank you so much for taking the time to review my six word poem jenintorre. Your comments are much appreciated. ~DD

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

A good six word poem. Much said in a few words. Not an easy thing to do.
A great play on words.
Nicely done.
Good luck to you in the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017

Sharon, thank you for your encouraging review on my six word poem. It is much appreciated. ~DD

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi, dip;
thank you for sharing your entry in the Six-word poetry contest. You have done a good job with your inspired use of homonyms here. Good luck in the contest,

~patty~

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017

Thank you Patty for your review of my six word poem. I hope it was for me as you addressed it to dip :-) I?m very grateful anyway. ~DD

reply by Mustang Patty on 07-Nov-2017

Oh no. I always get you two confused. I'm so sorry. I did enjoy the poem.

Comment from Rubylou

Excellent

Hello,
Great lesson/message in these so few words.
I like the comparison of exercise with the body to reach a goal for the mind/spirit.
Nicely done.
Rubylou

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017

Thank you Rubylou for your review. I really appreciate your comments on my short poem. Kind regards ~DD

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Very clever and unique. Great pun. Imaginative and effective. good entry for the contest. My only suggestion pertains to flow and enjambment. I suggest using a dash or semicolon. Examples:

Exercised bare feats --
make happier souls ~


Exercised bare feats;
make happier souls ~


Or even use parenthesis:

Exercised bare feats
(make happier souls)


Or spacing to sculpt phrasing cadence:

Exercised
bare feats
make
happier souls ~


Good luck!

Warmly rd

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 Comment Written 07-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017

Hi RD, thanks so much for reviewing my short poem and for your constructive comments. I didn't want to use punctuation but appreciate the point on spacing to sculpt phrasing cadence...good point and I like it. I'm happy to shower a nomination on you too : -) ~DD

reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017

Hi RD, thanks so much for reviewing my short poem and for your constructive comments. I didn't want to use punctuation but appreciate the point on spacing to sculpt phrasing cadence...good point and I like it. I'm happy to shower a nomination on you too : -) ~DD

reply by rama devi on 07-Nov-2017

Thanks so much for your kind words, gracious response and considerate gesture. Much appreciated!!! Warmest Smiles, rd

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks taking physical exercise for keeping body fit and taking exercise bare feats make souls happier as the poet gets this sort of feeling in course of practice; I liked.

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 Comment Written 07-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017

Alcreator Litt Dear, thank you so much for taking the time to review my six word poem. I'm so glad you liked it. Kindest regards ~DD