FAMILY TIES.
Viewing comments for Chapter 55 "Here and Now""ALL IN THE FAMILY."
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Comment from GracieAnn
ronni,
This is such a creative and unique story that depicts well the choices people make and the results of those choices. Jealousy is such a monster, as they say. This reminds me of the biblical story of Cain and Able. Nice work! :0 GracieAnn
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ronni,
This is such a creative and unique story that depicts well the choices people make and the results of those choices. Jealousy is such a monster, as they say. This reminds me of the biblical story of Cain and Able. Nice work! :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
"They don't call me Mother Mud for nothing," the old lady laughed.
HERE and NOW, thick gooey black mud still covers Sly's lazy body. And it will never come off as long as he lies and steals, as long as he's mean. and as long as he says, ain't. ' This reads like an old time fable. Very funny, very clever. I enjoyed it immensely and it teaches a story. Well done, this is great writing. A little work on formatting needed I think, the spaces are a bit odd but that may just be the way it turns out on here, it can be a nightmare to format. Kindest regards Meia x
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"They don't call me Mother Mud for nothing," the old lady laughed.
HERE and NOW, thick gooey black mud still covers Sly's lazy body. And it will never come off as long as he lies and steals, as long as he's mean. and as long as he says, ain't. ' This reads like an old time fable. Very funny, very clever. I enjoyed it immensely and it teaches a story. Well done, this is great writing. A little work on formatting needed I think, the spaces are a bit odd but that may just be the way it turns out on here, it can be a nightmare to format. Kindest regards Meia x
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
