Bring Me Home (2)
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Comment from doggymad
You have done really well with this 5-7-5. There is so much truth here.
I had never thought about it before, but many people never even got to visit a grave as it was so far from home
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Freda
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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You have done really well with this 5-7-5. There is so much truth here.
I had never thought about it before, but many people never even got to visit a grave as it was so far from home
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Freda
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from RGstar
Yes, absolutely so. Heroes seem to have a forgotten name because it bares little strength in these times.
Back then, hero meant hero, now we seem not to know of them any longer.
My best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Yes, absolutely so. Heroes seem to have a forgotten name because it bares little strength in these times.
Back then, hero meant hero, now we seem not to know of them any longer.
My best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Knighteagle
Well written about a truth many fail to think about. While that is less the case in recent conflict, it does still happen. Good thought provoking piece. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Well written about a truth many fail to think about. While that is less the case in recent conflict, it does still happen. Good thought provoking piece. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Hitcher
Your creative little poem reminds me of the classic Russel Crowe movie... The Water Diviner, if you haven't seen it you should watch it friend. I enjoyed your contest poem, good luck!
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Your creative little poem reminds me of the classic Russel Crowe movie... The Water Diviner, if you haven't seen it you should watch it friend. I enjoyed your contest poem, good luck!
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thank you very much, and my first one"Bring Me Home" was inspired by that Movie****kahpot
Comment from Pantygynt
Indeed it is only recently that both British and American dead are brought home The final resting place of many remains where they fell, far away. One problem here, easily recified
"Hero's left to free their land"
This is not a single hero who has left to free his land but plural
"Heroes left to free their land" so no apostrophe and the plural form.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Indeed it is only recently that both British and American dead are brought home The final resting place of many remains where they fell, far away. One problem here, easily recified
"Hero's left to free their land"
This is not a single hero who has left to free his land but plural
"Heroes left to free their land" so no apostrophe and the plural form.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thank you very much, and I have corrected my slip up, many thanks****kahpot
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
such a sad thing, war, because ultimately no-one ever wins. A really well written piece my friend and you are helping people to remember-lest they forget the disgusting travesties that occurred not long ago. well done kind regards Meia xx
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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such a sad thing, war, because ultimately no-one ever wins. A really well written piece my friend and you are helping people to remember-lest they forget the disgusting travesties that occurred not long ago. well done kind regards Meia xx
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from visionary1234
The topic is a sad one indeed, Kahpot! Plural of 'hero' should be 'heroes' though, not 'hero's' (which is eithe possessive, or short for 'hero is' - but if that were the case, then you'd need to have agreement with singular/plural 'their' land???
:)S
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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The topic is a sad one indeed, Kahpot! Plural of 'hero' should be 'heroes' though, not 'hero's' (which is eithe possessive, or short for 'hero is' - but if that were the case, then you'd need to have agreement with singular/plural 'their' land???
:)S
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thank you very much and I have corrected****kahpot
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem. When conflict arise, soldiers of the country are willing to leave their homes and families to protect the citizens of their country. Not all of them return safe unharmed.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem. When conflict arise, soldiers of the country are willing to leave their homes and families to protect the citizens of their country. Not all of them return safe unharmed.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
YOur syllable count is perfect but I would change one of the left for another word, doesn't matter which one but it makes it awkward as is.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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YOur syllable count is perfect but I would change one of the left for another word, doesn't matter which one but it makes it awkward as is.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thank you very much, and I will have a look****kahpot
Comment from Dean Kuch
Young men and women go off to war everyday to fight and die for the freedoms we enjoy today.
It is the unselfish sacrifices of these brave souls and their families to whom we owe our deepest gratitude and respect.
Best wishes to you in the contest, kahpot.
~Dean
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Young men and women go off to war everyday to fight and die for the freedoms we enjoy today.
It is the unselfish sacrifices of these brave souls and their families to whom we owe our deepest gratitude and respect.
Best wishes to you in the contest, kahpot.
~Dean
Comment Written 19-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thank you very much****kahpot
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