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Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello again Cybertron1986
Now I believe that I beginning to understand the boy's fear of nightmares that they could become reality.
To me makes an Terrie and mysterious story to continue reading.
Gert
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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Hello again Cybertron1986
Now I believe that I beginning to understand the boy's fear of nightmares that they could become reality.
To me makes an Terrie and mysterious story to continue reading.
Gert
Comment Written 04-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2019
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Thank you for that additional comment and rating, Gert!
Comment from kahpot
Yeah I couldn't wait and this chapter deserves it just one line I would like to inquire about " Quick action equals quick victory!" he reminds to himself, does the "to" really have to be there, this story is just getting better and better****kahpot
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2018
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Yeah I couldn't wait and this chapter deserves it just one line I would like to inquire about " Quick action equals quick victory!" he reminds to himself, does the "to" really have to be there, this story is just getting better and better****kahpot
Comment Written 20-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2018
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Wow! Thank you, kahpot! Your feedback and notes are vital to this project that I have aspired to document since graduating from University. I, too, am not a professional writer. I tend to make minor mistakes that I often overlook. However, this story has been a part of me ever since I was an undergraduate at San Francisco State University back in the mid- 1990's. The events have made me think over the many years since leaving the room as described in my novel.
Unknowingly, I was assigned a room that the housing administration failed to inform me of a dark past. Later, in 2013, I found this article:
https://goldengatexpress.org/2012/12/04/haunted-dorm-stories-spark-supernatural-interest/
After reading this article, it proved to me that my experiences there, almost seventeen years after the article was written, were not a coincidence, nor a chance encounter. There have been countless events and similar encounters there.
These stories, are what I recalled during that time. They are about eighty to eighty-five percent accurate. The dreams, the girl from the phone booth, the places, and even the spirit there all happened. The ghost is already known throughout the campus.
Thank you again, kahpot. I hope to hear more of your reviews. I'm waiting to reset my six star ratings as well.
-Euell
Comment from sunao
Wow, the blue bolt of lightning in the image is splendid! Thank you so much for sharing this piece of writing. Please keep up the good work and have a wonderful day!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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Wow, the blue bolt of lightning in the image is splendid! Thank you so much for sharing this piece of writing. Please keep up the good work and have a wonderful day!
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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Thank you :) It?s always a gratifying feeling to receive a positive reaction from readers. So happy you enjoyed it Thank you!
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Your welcome!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This was a terrific write. I really like how you are sharing an amazing story. Very imaginative. Your use of internal thought works well. This was enjoyable to read and easily held my interest.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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This was a terrific write. I really like how you are sharing an amazing story. Very imaginative. Your use of internal thought works well. This was enjoyable to read and easily held my interest.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Thank you. Your kind rating and praise is truly appreciated. I hope you are able to read future chapters for my project. Thank you!
Comment from royowen
I was only contemplating this very problem this morning, I wrote something similar. It's a wondrous thing, the imagination, as you've displayed here. Good prime character, with an interesting mission, that of searching out his sister in a most fascinating place and way. Excellent job, well done, enjoyable, blessings, Roy
Typo : what is waiting on the other side (of) the door. 2 : Whether(,) or not,
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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I was only contemplating this very problem this morning, I wrote something similar. It's a wondrous thing, the imagination, as you've displayed here. Good prime character, with an interesting mission, that of searching out his sister in a most fascinating place and way. Excellent job, well done, enjoyable, blessings, Roy
Typo : what is waiting on the other side (of) the door. 2 : Whether(,) or not,
Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Thank you. Your insightful comments, and encouragement is truly uplifting. Thank you for catching those typos :)
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Well done
Comment from apky
I still very much enjoy your unique story, and I think I've missed a couple of posts that I need to go back to in order to catch up.
The boy's fears and perception of them are very real and tangible, and the style with which you phrase the words is simply unbeatable and fits the kind of stoy you're telling. Now I have to go back to past posts before other things pull me away.
Well done, and keep it up.
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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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I still very much enjoy your unique story, and I think I've missed a couple of posts that I need to go back to in order to catch up.
The boy's fears and perception of them are very real and tangible, and the style with which you phrase the words is simply unbeatable and fits the kind of stoy you're telling. Now I have to go back to past posts before other things pull me away.
Well done, and keep it up.
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Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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Thank you. I'm glad to hear from you, and how the story is beginning to take shape into your interest. I try and use real life experiences to create a tangible feel to it. So happy to hear you were able to sense that. Thank you for your kind rating.
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Thank you. I'm glad to hear from you, and how the story is beginning to take shape into your interest. I try and use real life experiences to create a tangible feel to it. So happy to hear you were able to sense that. Thank you for your kind rating.
Comment from giraffmang
I really like this tale, it is quite unique.
"Eu El," Windcharger whispers, "In times of darkness, - the second part of the dialogue is contuing dialogue without the previous sentence being closed off so as a continuation, it should start with a lower case - in.
I like the pop cultural references and they are very much in keeping with how the lad sees the world.
The fear in him is grows - delete is from here.
You have an odd way of phrasing things but it seems to work for this tale. It makes it eerie, almost other-worldly.
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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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I really like this tale, it is quite unique.
"Eu El," Windcharger whispers, "In times of darkness, - the second part of the dialogue is contuing dialogue without the previous sentence being closed off so as a continuation, it should start with a lower case - in.
I like the pop cultural references and they are very much in keeping with how the lad sees the world.
The fear in him is grows - delete is from here.
You have an odd way of phrasing things but it seems to work for this tale. It makes it eerie, almost other-worldly.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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Hi!
I'm grateful for your continued input and proofreading. I'm not actually an author. I just write what I recall. Not sure how to present it at times since I don't have any experience in literature. Thank you again for your continued input, proofread, interest, and kind ratings that help guide my focus.
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Hi!
I'm grateful for your continued input and proofreading. I'm not actually an author. I just write what I recall. Not sure how to present it at times since I don't have any experience in literature. Thank you again for your continued input, proofread, interest, and kind ratings that help guide my focus.
