The Culturin' Up of Forest Frederick
Song lyrics27 total reviews
Comment from RGstar
Cleverly done. I thought the chorus could be a little closer in tying the subject matter to the main verses, but all in all, a splendid job with the irony, humor and short choppy Phrases ( positive) always make well for a good song.
Good luck with this.
A jolly well done.
My best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Cleverly done. I thought the chorus could be a little closer in tying the subject matter to the main verses, but all in all, a splendid job with the irony, humor and short choppy Phrases ( positive) always make well for a good song.
Good luck with this.
A jolly well done.
My best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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I'll look at that. Perhaps it's out there on its own a bit as you point out. Thanks for the thoughts and a great review. :))
Comment from teols2016
Hmm...Adultry among animals. You create some interesting images with your words. Well done and best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Hmm...Adultry among animals. You create some interesting images with your words. Well done and best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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HAAAA! Thanks so much. :))
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"The Culturin' Up of Forest Frederick", is quite a well written and entertaining piece.
It's only my opinion, but this poem would benefit with more stringent editing. Good luck with the contest.
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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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"The Culturin' Up of Forest Frederick", is quite a well written and entertaining piece.
It's only my opinion, but this poem would benefit with more stringent editing. Good luck with the contest.
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Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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I'm pleased you found this entertaining. Any editing suggestions would be appreciated. :))
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Dear Anon,
You're more than welcome.
Best wishes, bless you and take care,
the Duchess
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hahahaha...
This is quite the epic song, Mike.
It sounds as if the lovely, fair Princess Hornette is in for the ride of her life.
Interesting mixture of mono rhyming and an occasional aabb rhyme scheme.
I could easily imagine this being sung by big, bulky, burly red-headed dudes with cups in Irish pubs.
Hilarious...
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Hahahaha...
This is quite the epic song, Mike.
It sounds as if the lovely, fair Princess Hornette is in for the ride of her life.
Interesting mixture of mono rhyming and an occasional aabb rhyme scheme.
I could easily imagine this being sung by big, bulky, burly red-headed dudes with cups in Irish pubs.
Hilarious...
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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HA! Maybe some shorter grey Irish dudes as well, yes? LOL
Glad you liked this, Dean. Great fun to write and even more so with a few shots in me. :))
Comment from smileycloud
have read it 3 or 4 times
enjoyed it every time
love the comedy
love the language from common to elite
their names are terrific and their character form is alive and vivid and so endearing
well done indeed
good luck in the contest with this great entry
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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have read it 3 or 4 times
enjoyed it every time
love the comedy
love the language from common to elite
their names are terrific and their character form is alive and vivid and so endearing
well done indeed
good luck in the contest with this great entry
have a smiley day
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Thanks sooooo much, Smiley
I'm delighted you enjoyed. What an encouraging review. I AM smiling! :))
Comment from Allyzeé
After I read your description I went back and read the lyrics imagining an Irish tune, and men sitting by a camp fire with cups. It's was comical to imagine that. Nice song I really liked it
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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After I read your description I went back and read the lyrics imagining an Irish tune, and men sitting by a camp fire with cups. It's was comical to imagine that. Nice song I really liked it
Comment Written 18-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Oh, great. Thanks for taking the extra time. All in good fun. I loved writing this and glad you got a kick out of it. :))
Comment from Lucian Carter
As I read it I wasn't thinking Irish, but looking back it works very well. A fine bawdy tale which is clearly a song, not a dressed up poem. You understand song better than I so this is a perfect fit for the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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As I read it I wasn't thinking Irish, but looking back it works very well. A fine bawdy tale which is clearly a song, not a dressed up poem. You understand song better than I so this is a perfect fit for the contest.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Thanks so much. A lot of times the words sitting by themselves don't stand up as well without the music. But once you have some music in mind, it makes more sense. :)) mike
Comment from nordicgirl
This is the best laugh I have had in a long time. Too funny. I don't know meter, but this was easy to read and sure sounds like a fun song to me. So far, this has my vote. NG
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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This is the best laugh I have had in a long time. Too funny. I don't know meter, but this was easy to read and sure sounds like a fun song to me. So far, this has my vote. NG
Comment Written 18-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Aww. Glad to hear it. Great to hear you could imagine this being sung and it was an easy read. That's the key to lyrics. YES!
Thanks so much. :))
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This sounds like a marriage made in Heaven. No problem here. A girl showed me her wedding pictures. I' not kidding. She was wearing a beautiful white dress. Her groom was wearing shorts and a tee shirt. I asked if he knew they were getting married. She said yes, she didn't know why he dressed like that. I said, "Run away."
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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This sounds like a marriage made in Heaven. No problem here. A girl showed me her wedding pictures. I' not kidding. She was wearing a beautiful white dress. Her groom was wearing shorts and a tee shirt. I asked if he knew they were getting married. She said yes, she didn't know why he dressed like that. I said, "Run away."
Comment Written 18-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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I told her I wasn't worth it. I don't know what she was thinking. She looked great in that dress though. I hope she likes our anniversary song. LOL
Comment from gramalot8
Ha ha.... I can just hear the tinkling of the beer glasses as all the drunken lad's at the pub are belching out this song, leaching onto the bar maidens serving up their beer.... and other needs. LOL .... Great job and good luck in the contest. Gramalot8
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Ha ha.... I can just hear the tinkling of the beer glasses as all the drunken lad's at the pub are belching out this song, leaching onto the bar maidens serving up their beer.... and other needs. LOL .... Great job and good luck in the contest. Gramalot8
Comment Written 18-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Ahhh .... perfect. Just what I wanted to hear. Fun for me to write. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Thanks a million. :))
