The Joy of Pulling Weeds
Working in the yard24 total reviews
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This is a very nice piece of writing. good tone and depth of feeling. very nice indeed.
My lady-like days / layer of ladylike sunblock - you use two variations of the same here. it is usually better to stick to one form for consistency.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Hi there,
This is a very nice piece of writing. good tone and depth of feeling. very nice indeed.
My lady-like days / layer of ladylike sunblock - you use two variations of the same here. it is usually better to stick to one form for consistency.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Thank you for reading my work and your suggestions. All taken. Thanks!
Comment from Poetic Friend
Amada, my friend,
I am so glad your return, even if it is just for a little while. I miss you writer's voice around FanStory. Whether prose or poetry, your voice is always gentle.
There is a gentleness in this story. You express the joy of gardening, including pulling weeds. I can not say that I find joy in pulling weeds. However, the end result is nice, because the plant looks nicer.
Good luck in the contest, my friend.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2017
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Amada, my friend,
I am so glad your return, even if it is just for a little while. I miss you writer's voice around FanStory. Whether prose or poetry, your voice is always gentle.
There is a gentleness in this story. You express the joy of gardening, including pulling weeds. I can not say that I find joy in pulling weeds. However, the end result is nice, because the plant looks nicer.
Good luck in the contest, my friend.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much for your beautiful lines in here. I am almost choking that I am missed. Tragedy struck me deeply,, I am recuperating, with the help of the Almighty and my friends.
Comment from robyn corum
A,
Wow. This post is filled to overflowing with fresh images of time spent in the garden -- and all the benefits of that time!!
So sweet and real and down to earth. Super job!
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2017
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A,
Wow. This post is filled to overflowing with fresh images of time spent in the garden -- and all the benefits of that time!!
So sweet and real and down to earth. Super job!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2017
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Thank you Robyn.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend this is well written you have given many examples why gardening is pleasurable you certainly do enjoy the pastime well done good luck I enjoyed regards Jill
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Hello my friend this is well written you have given many examples why gardening is pleasurable you certainly do enjoy the pastime well done good luck I enjoyed regards Jill
Comment Written 14-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Thank you for reading and commenting in my gardening essay.
Comment from country ranch writer
The joys of gardening can be rewarding to be able to see the unfruitful of your labor. Beauty is in the heart of the beholder and you get to reap the rewards when the garden blooms.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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The joys of gardening can be rewarding to be able to see the unfruitful of your labor. Beauty is in the heart of the beholder and you get to reap the rewards when the garden blooms.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Thank you for reading my essay on gardening. Beautiful comments.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
As you age you learn to do your gardening in pots on the porch or deck which ever you have. Your knees will get to the point you can't kneel or lay down in the grass. It is too hard to get up off the ground. LOL This was fun to imagine. Well done my friend. NAncy
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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As you age you learn to do your gardening in pots on the porch or deck which ever you have. Your knees will get to the point you can't kneel or lay down in the grass. It is too hard to get up off the ground. LOL This was fun to imagine. Well done my friend. NAncy
Comment Written 14-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Yes, I love those pots, grass, flowers, perennials, annuals. Thank you so much for reading this work!
Comment from Teri7
This is a great story about taking your time picking the weeds. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with your words as well. Best wishes in the contest my friend! Teri
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2017
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This is a great story about taking your time picking the weeds. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with your words as well. Best wishes in the contest my friend! Teri
Comment Written 14-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2017
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Thank you Teri7 for reading and commenting in this essay.
Comment from Heather Knight
I love what you have written. You've turn gardening into something magical.
In this sentence:My lady-like days of delicately picking stray weeds are one, did you mean 'gone'?
There's an extra X at the beginning of: X I love kneeling down and spending time with the soil,
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2017
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I love what you have written. You've turn gardening into something magical.
In this sentence:My lady-like days of delicately picking stray weeds are one, did you mean 'gone'?
There's an extra X at the beginning of: X I love kneeling down and spending time with the soil,
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2017
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Thank you Maria Jose for reading and alerting me about certain mishaps! Corrected. Thank you.
Comment from rama devi
This is a charming share, dear. Deliciously descriptive and original. I enjoyed it! You're good with prose. I can't recall reading prose from you before. This might place well in the contest. I wish you luck, and also made a few suggestions and observations...
NOTES
*My lady-like days of delicately picking stray weeds are (d)one.
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Some weeds are(were) easy to loosen up. One pull and they were out, roots and dirt and worms.
*I am promoting myself to higher and loftier duties: to dig deep, to clean and boost with grace and beauty the space around those hard-wearing weeds:(.) I think of myself as a newly minted yard artist.
LOVE THIS PHRASING: why a rebellious spiraling twig deviates the graceful flow of the rhythm between the nurturing tree trunk and its bronzed breezy branches.
NICE:
Sometimes I feel guilty: I am rearranging flora...but then I take a step back, like a sculptor would, and I admire my very own nascent masterpiece. I feel like a genie. Magic, oh yes, I see magic in the midst of an overbearing blueberry bush.
*Why is there and X here:
X I love kneeling down and spending time with the soil,
LOVE THIS: I admire the movements of the ants, scurrying around, maybe passing secret messages to each other.
LOVE THIS TOO (Note one spag suggestion)
Digging deep(,) I can touch the many intricacies of long tree roots, traveling like a silent underground highway. I feel like a nature inspector!
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I observe two yellow garden snakes twirling in the sun, then I turn over an old crocked(cracked) pot just sitting by(,) and I see three still sweet snails just sitting there.
Nice alliteration of B:
In between tasks I take breezy breaks.
*I lie in the lazy grass and as the sun sweeps low.
Remove AND in the above line and this one too:
And I love the green smell of fresh in my hair! I feel like a newborn child. (LINE BREAK HERE FOR NEW PARA) Oh yes, I am a painter, as well. Or maybe, a very sarcastic sculptor.
Nice closing note:
You tell me.
. (remove unwanted period here)
Love you, my friend. You're a gem of a person and it shines between your lines.
Gardening is great fun, and your post captures this with fine detail and great pacing.
Bravo
warmly, rd
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2017
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This is a charming share, dear. Deliciously descriptive and original. I enjoyed it! You're good with prose. I can't recall reading prose from you before. This might place well in the contest. I wish you luck, and also made a few suggestions and observations...
NOTES
*My lady-like days of delicately picking stray weeds are (d)one.
*
Some weeds are(were) easy to loosen up. One pull and they were out, roots and dirt and worms.
*I am promoting myself to higher and loftier duties: to dig deep, to clean and boost with grace and beauty the space around those hard-wearing weeds:(.) I think of myself as a newly minted yard artist.
LOVE THIS PHRASING: why a rebellious spiraling twig deviates the graceful flow of the rhythm between the nurturing tree trunk and its bronzed breezy branches.
NICE:
Sometimes I feel guilty: I am rearranging flora...but then I take a step back, like a sculptor would, and I admire my very own nascent masterpiece. I feel like a genie. Magic, oh yes, I see magic in the midst of an overbearing blueberry bush.
*Why is there and X here:
X I love kneeling down and spending time with the soil,
LOVE THIS: I admire the movements of the ants, scurrying around, maybe passing secret messages to each other.
LOVE THIS TOO (Note one spag suggestion)
Digging deep(,) I can touch the many intricacies of long tree roots, traveling like a silent underground highway. I feel like a nature inspector!
*
I observe two yellow garden snakes twirling in the sun, then I turn over an old crocked(cracked) pot just sitting by(,) and I see three still sweet snails just sitting there.
Nice alliteration of B:
In between tasks I take breezy breaks.
*I lie in the lazy grass and as the sun sweeps low.
Remove AND in the above line and this one too:
And I love the green smell of fresh in my hair! I feel like a newborn child. (LINE BREAK HERE FOR NEW PARA) Oh yes, I am a painter, as well. Or maybe, a very sarcastic sculptor.
Nice closing note:
You tell me.
. (remove unwanted period here)
Love you, my friend. You're a gem of a person and it shines between your lines.
Gardening is great fun, and your post captures this with fine detail and great pacing.
Bravo
warmly, rd
Comment Written 13-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2017
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Hi dear friend. Thank you for this great comments and and the correction of some of my mistakes. I so appreciate your kindness and support and encouragement.
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:-)))) xxxooo
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
are gone. (gone) ------------get rid of the second gone and put a period there.
First paragraph is confusing as you tell what you wear now but then go back to what you wore looking demure. Reverse that.
You are confusing past tense and present tense. It should be the same.
when you use (-) leave a space before and after, if not it looks like a hyphenated word. The same with (...)
flora, but,
(X) I love--------------need to get rid of the X
the last three paragraphs were wonderful in the wording and the play on words and that is where the five comes in.
A great piece, just needs a little reworking
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2017
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are gone. (gone) ------------get rid of the second gone and put a period there.
First paragraph is confusing as you tell what you wear now but then go back to what you wore looking demure. Reverse that.
You are confusing past tense and present tense. It should be the same.
when you use (-) leave a space before and after, if not it looks like a hyphenated word. The same with (...)
flora, but,
(X) I love--------------need to get rid of the X
the last three paragraphs were wonderful in the wording and the play on words and that is where the five comes in.
A great piece, just needs a little reworking
Comment Written 13-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2017
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Hi Barb. Thank you for reading and editing this work. I so appreciate your support. Gardening is very therapeutic for me. Thank you, dear Barb.
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Hope you don't mind
