Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

This is a very nicely composed poem using the words provided for the contest. The image is beautiful and tranquil and matches your well described poem. Marilyn

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017

Thank you for the read and the review.

Comment from Asem.inspirations

Excellent

Good morning, anonymous Poet:

This is also a very good "Use these Words" contest entry. You have made very good use of these word. The picture is deeply beautiful, full of color and life and the words to your poem allows me to envision myself there. Very nicely done.

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017

Thank you for the read and your encouraging words.

Comment from angel123

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your poem and you followed the contest rules by using all of the required words. I like your artwork choice and good alliteration of r, t, and s, words. Best wishes!

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017

Thanks for your read and your kind words.

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Dear Anonymous Poet;
thank you so much for sharing your entry in the 'Use these words' contest. You managed to successfully use all of the words, and you crafted the piece so that nothing felt forced or contrived.

Good luck in the contest,

~patty~

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017

Thanks for the read and the comments.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Dear Mystery Author,

This poem is clever and well-conceived -- unfortunately, it is not well-executed. *smile* You have a couple of issues that need to be taken care of before the voting begins.

First of all, you have neglected to use two of the words from the required list. I didn't see 'running' or 'drink'. I imagine you probably forgot and edited them right out! hahahaha! But that is easily fixed.

As another small note - I don't think that's a 'river' in your picture. Where I live, we would call that a 'creek' or a 'stream', though that may just be me.

Anyway, good luck in your contest!

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017

Caught the mistakes and corrected. You must have seen a per-corrected copy. I may reconsider the picture.
See below:

I cross an old battered cement bridge
that spans an eager, running river
racing to join the immense ocean

Thirsty, I hop to the river bank
cup my hands, dip into the stream, bring
crystalline relief to my lips, drink
the still sweet water before it turns
brackish when it churns with the salt sea

reply by robyn corum on 12-Oct-2017

Much better!