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Slowly letting the mind glow

picture prompt for October 6

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Comment from DonandVicki
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Minds "Glowing" what a beautiful poetic thought, Dan, nowadays my mind has been wandering as well. The writing seems to put that glow back, even if it's only for a short time.

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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written poem and an excellent interpretation of the picture for the 'picture this' challenge. Young minds learn quicker than older ones, but many things that they still have to learn the older ones will ponder on.

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Comment from bichonfrisegirl
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This is a very unique approach that you took in writing about the picture. You thought outside of the box on this one. So right you are. When we are young are minds absorb like a sponge. When old, our minds tend to wander.

Excellent rhyming, and your poem is something that every older person can relate to extremely well. "Learning comes with fear, that more is lost than near" ... my favorite line. Nice job on this challenge! ~~ Connie

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Comment from gramalot8
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Danpald. this was a great poem that definitely went well with the picture you chose. Yes, as we age, how we so long for the days of real learning, and retention. And, the mind that wanders now was so much steadier and constant in younger years. Great job and thanks for sharing this with us. Gramalot8

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I can only remember longing for the footy field, cricket ground and related things, (I wasn't much of a student) but I think in hindsight you're right. Beautifully composed piece in response to the picture this prompt, nice, evenly paced narrative, in no fixed meter, and aabb rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy

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Comment from Teri7
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Dan, This is a very well written poem you have penned for the Picture This challenge. You used very good wording that makes a person think about days gone by. I enjoyed it very much! Blessings, Teri

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Dan, this is a nice take on the picture this challenge. You have told a good story of the need of education for our young. Sad, though many school are not teaching our children they are brainwashing the young minds. Patricia

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