Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

A lovely Katauta Poem Craig, and wonderful sentiments both in your verse and in the Rick Springfield quote. Sorry I'm so late reading, but am glad I caught this one.
cheers.
valda

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2017

No worries, Valda. Thanks for reviewing. I think I underappreciated Aussie Rick when I was younger. Cheers, Craig

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

This is a very nicely composed Katauta. We all need to know that our loved one is backing us up, letting us know that we are important enough to give freedom. Marilyn

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2017

Thanks for the kind comments, Marilyn. Much appreciated - Craig

Comment from bichonfrisegirl

Exceptional

Oh, this is lovely! Not only a lovely sentiment but also lovely in its simplicity. Having someone believe in us really does give us the freedom to dream.

Exceptional! Good luck in the contest. ~~ Connie

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017

Thank you so much for the wonderful rating and the very kind comments, Connie. I'm glad you enjoyed :) Craig

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

I have not seen them done in first person, but have seen them done referring to he or she.
Rules followed with excellent syllable count and reference to a lover.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017

Well, I've never done one before, or seen one, to my recollection - so I probably broke multiple rules without knowing it. It's fun to try something new :) Cheers, Craig

Comment from --Turtle.

Excellent

Hi, Craig...

Read through this katauta, I thought to myself, seeing a few of these... katuata's make for excellent sweetest day cards... personalized packagable thoughts that contain the core of intimacy between two who are emotionally involved.

This katauta has a well-worn, tried and true sort of respect about it. Not the ... in love with your hot body, variety, but the type of poem that pays homage to ... more solid rock love than fire-type.

Relaxed with a hint of soulful gratitude. Nicely presented.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017

Thanks, Turtle. It's the first one I've tried, so I don't know much about them. Seems to me they're like a haiku, but with less restrictions. Never hurts to try new things :) Cheers, Craig

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Poem meets the requirements of this contest in that it is directed to a lover and written in 5-7-5.

"The freedom to dream" is a neat gift one lover can give another.

Should make an interesting entry into this contest.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017

Thanks for the kind comments - much appreciated. Craig

Comment from ~Dovey

Excellent

Hi Craig -

This is a beautiful sentiment. It is either extremely romantic or at the very least sensitive and insightful. Ummmm... so, you wrote it for Bella? Misty? One of the alpacas? ;) If you give it to Jayne you might stop her heart! lol

You are branching out on a new limb here...

Good luck in the contest.

Kim

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017

Just what are you saying, Kim? lol

I've written romantic stuff before - not a huge amount, mind you, but some...

Thanks for the good wishes :) Craig

reply by ~Dovey on 10-Oct-2017

Just that I know you lol ;)

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written katauta in appreciation of a loved one who allows you to dream and help you to fulfill your dreams. A gift from a loved one that is above all other gifts

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017

Thanks for reviewing, and for the kind comments, Sandra. Craig

Comment from Gloria ....

Exceptional

Gorgeous poem, Craig. Trust is the thing isn't it? Your artwork is fantastic too. You'd have to travel far and wide to find something so unique.

Just one small thing you need to add a couple of syllables to your final line to make this a true Katauta.

Exceptional in any regard. Best wishes to you in the contest.

Gloria

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017

Now you've put me in a quandary, Gloria. At the moment, I can't think of an alternative I prefer. I was going by the contest rules, which say it can be 5-7-5 or 5-7-7, but I'll happily accept your advice that it should be the latter to be true to form. I guess I need to put my thinking cap on - I've come up with a couple of thoughts, but I'm not happy with them. Many thanks for the advice, the lovely comments, and the truly treasured gift of an "exceptional" rating. Cheers, Craig.

reply by Gloria .... on 10-Oct-2017

Oh, sorry about that, Craig. If it's fine as is, just leave it as is, and ignore my comment. Reeeeeee. I should read the instructions beyond the first example.

reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017

LOL - too late! Well, if you don't mind checking out my modification, if you think the former was better, I'll change it back :)

reply by Gloria .... on 10-Oct-2017

I liked the first one better.

reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017

OK, back it goes :)

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks one is happy to be brought into the world having freedom to dream and liberty to think free as one wishes so it is the gift that is brought before for dreaming free; I liked.

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017

Thank you for the kind comments. Craig