Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Sweet and simple and sincere. Nice imagery and tone. Apt presentation for the metaphor of fire crackling (fire of love in the heart). Nice subtle pun on 'stories under a blanket'. Fine alliteration of W and F and consonance of C-K. Good flow. An excellent entry! Good luck.
Bravo

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thank youvery much.namaste.

reply by rama devi on 20-Oct-2017

Namaste, dear Sanku. Hope you had a happy Diwali

Comment from Aussie

Excellent

Well done poet. In three little lines you have created a story of life. The brightness of your presentation gives credence to the poem. Forty winters is a long time. I liked your Katauta entry and wish you well in the contest. XXK.

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thank you very much.

Comment from gramalot8

Excellent

Dear Sanku... I have never written a Katauta poem but this has prompted me to do so. Your beautiful poem does seem to fit the requirements for this contest. It is easy to feel the love that was shared between the two lovers for forty years. Great job and good luck in the contest. Gramalot 8

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thank you very much .and for the great comments.

Comment from Nick DeMoss

Excellent

Excellent use of the katauta. The last line is perfect. It's difficult to set a scene, introduce characters and make them relateable in the course of three short lines, but you've done it wonderfully.

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thank you very much.for the beautiful comments.

Comment from marybell1

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your katauta Fire Crackling". You followed all the rules for this genre and you chose an appropriate sketch.,
All the best.
Marybell1.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thank you very much.

reply by marybell1 on 20-Oct-2017

You are most welcome.
Marybell1.

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

thank you so much for sharing your entry in the Katauta Poetry contest. Your presentation and words give us a glimpse that this is a couple who have been together for forty-years and enjoy their time together.

Good luck in the contest,

~patty~

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thank you very much for reading and your lovely comments

Comment from Earthlover

Excellent

Great little poem for the contest. I really like the simplicity and the mood this poem creates. The simple pleasures of enjoying the company of a loved one. I like the last line..."Fourty winters warmed our hearts"
No doubt this expresses a long marriage or relationship with the same person. Lovely poem.
Earthlover

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thank you very much.

Comment from Lucian Carter

Excellent

A nice little Katauta. Gentle love is celebrated here. Mature love. Seasoned love. :Love that has stood the test of time. Rhymes are necessary and would actually take away from this. Good job.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thank you very much

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

Not too sure about the first line on reading yet after a few times reading saw the connection, but nicely done with the image and imagery projected.
Good luck with this.
My best wishes, Sanku.
Have a great evening.
RGstar

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thank you very much.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

I would consider forty years to be a long time for a marriage. Not many today can make it that far. Good luck in the contest.
Patricia

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thank you very much.