Comment from doggymad

Excellent

Now that is what I call a decent Halloween offering. Nice nasty witches looking for innocent children.

Nice bats and broomsticks and an eerie feel running throughout.

Well done

hugs

Freda

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2017

Hi, Freda;

thank you so much for reading my entry in the Halloween Poetry contest. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Hopefully, it didn't scare you too much,

~patty~

Comment from Mitchell Brontė

Excellent

Hi Patty
A fantastic Halloween poem, that ticks all the boxes, loved the chill within your words and the fear factor throughout, an excellent, enjoyable read.
Mitchell

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017

Hi, Mitchell;
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this Halloween poem. I enjoyed working with the Monchielle poetic form, and writing a bit of horror,

~patty~

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I am pretty sure if people took your poem seriously they would send their children out on Halloween. I enjoyed watching your video. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017

Hi, Barbara;
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this Halloween poem. I enjoyed working with the Monchielle poetic form, and writing a bit of horror,

~patty~

Comment from emptypage

Excellent

Creepy poem, very effective, Patty.

My favorite lines?

It's children they're after,
Jealous of their beauty,
They hate high-pitched laughter.

And:

Witches come out tonight,
Black robes and pointed hats,
On their brooms they fly high,

They are the least violent lines, I see, but that isn't why I liked them best. The rhythm got me in those two places.

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017

Hi Marla;
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this Halloween poem. I enjoyed working with the Monchielle poetic form, and writing a bit of horror,

~patty~

Comment from papa55mike

Excellent

Let's add some "Hocus Pocus" to this wonderfully written poem. I love the sexy picture and the form is spectacular. Best of luck with your book.

Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017

Hi, Mike;
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this Halloween poem. I enjoyed working with the Monchielle poetic form, and writing a bit of horror,

~patty~

Comment from dovemarie

Exceptional

Dear patty, Great Halloween poem! I liked your use of black and orange, typical Halloween colors. Your poem sent out a warning to and about children - there are some children who are hurt at Halloween by razors in apples, and things like that. Good picture too! Dove

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017

Hi Dove;
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this Halloween poem. I enjoyed working with the Monchielle poetic form, and writing a bit of horror,

~patty~
ps: I love the shining sixth star!

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Hi Patty, a well written Monchielle - yet another poetry form I have not heard of LOL. A good topical story, suitably spooky for the occasion. All five stanzas in correct form, I needed your author notes to find this out. Good picture! Great Bette Midler number. Thanks for posting - good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017

Hi, Dorothy;
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this Halloween poem. I enjoyed working with the Monchielle poetic form, and writing a bit of horror,

~patty~

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

This poem has inspired me to enter this contest, but not with a monchielle which is an interesting form of which I was not previously aware. The first line effectively acts as a refrain and you have some unusual rhymes here, particularly exempt/tempt. I think I will let my witches fly in free verse upon their broomsticks.

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017

Hi, Jim;
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this Halloween poem. I enjoyed working with the Monchielle poetic form, and writing a bit of horror,

~patty~

Comment from nbonner

Excellent

Nice Halloween poem. Witches were always my favorite when it came to Halloween. I always wanted to be the witch when trick-o-treating. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest, nb

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017

Hi,
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this Halloween poem. I enjoyed working with the Monchielle poetic form, and writing a bit of horror,

~patty~

Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)

Excellent

Ha I was just thinking pf the witches from Hocus Pocus and also from Roald Dahls the Witches where he makes it clear witches want to kill children! I had never seen it written so boldly but the film is halloween fave and the Book is an absolute classic I have read so many times. Well done this is great a lovely and scary slice of Halloween fun xx

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017

Hi Meia;
Yes, I was definitely envisioning the witches from Hocus Pocus, and the horror stories of old, when I wrote this one. I'm glad you enjoyed it,

~patty~