Help them find hope
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Comment from Hitcher
Good on you for having a go at a new form friend, it is in the practise and discovery of new forms we improve, learn and eventually shine as writers. I don't think I've tried my hand at the loop thus far but have tried a great many other forms of poetry and each and every one has something to teach. Well done!
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2017
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Good on you for having a go at a new form friend, it is in the practise and discovery of new forms we improve, learn and eventually shine as writers. I don't think I've tried my hand at the loop thus far but have tried a great many other forms of poetry and each and every one has something to teach. Well done!
Comment Written 08-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much, and yes new forms are a great learning curve so I will keep venturing, many thanks****kahpot
Comment from Abby Wilson-hand
I LIKED WHAT YOU HAVE WRITTEN
HERE YOUR IMPROVING IN YOUR
WRITTING SINCE YOU HAVE BEGUN
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2017
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I LIKED WHAT YOU HAVE WRITTEN
HERE YOUR IMPROVING IN YOUR
WRITTING SINCE YOU HAVE BEGUN
Comment Written 08-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2017
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Thank you for this excellent and encouraging review****kahpot
Comment from smileycloud
very unique style/form
it is a very difficult pattern you have done here
the loop part most certainly is working where your reading top to bottom left and right hand side is one word down to exact same
well done for sure
I am a little wary though of the last word of line three leads nowhere and is not flowing on in comparison to all the other last and first words definitely lead somewhere important and the flow of the story line is smooth
I am a novice at poetry especially this extremely difficult form so I could be speaking out of turn
I am so proud of a poet who does these intricate forms
blessings
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2017
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very unique style/form
it is a very difficult pattern you have done here
the loop part most certainly is working where your reading top to bottom left and right hand side is one word down to exact same
well done for sure
I am a little wary though of the last word of line three leads nowhere and is not flowing on in comparison to all the other last and first words definitely lead somewhere important and the flow of the story line is smooth
I am a novice at poetry especially this extremely difficult form so I could be speaking out of turn
I am so proud of a poet who does these intricate forms
blessings
have a smiley day
Comment Written 08-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much, smileycloud there is no speaking out of turn if something you read does not relate it should be considered as help, in this case, you are quite correct I tried "forever' but lost the meaning by changing other words to suit, as I was just experimenting decided to leave as is very much appreciate your review, many thanks do not stop asking or wondering as this is very helpful to all****kahpot
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Blessings for that dear FS friend
Comment from RBDJR007
This is really cool! I found it to be a pretty vivid poem, and in reading your description, you nailed it. It's great that you're experimenting with different styles and I found that you pulled it off really well. The message was great as well. In times like these, hope for the future is something that we want for all of our kids.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2017
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This is really cool! I found it to be a pretty vivid poem, and in reading your description, you nailed it. It's great that you're experimenting with different styles and I found that you pulled it off really well. The message was great as well. In times like these, hope for the future is something that we want for all of our kids.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much, and yes a better world for those we leave it with, many thanks****kahpot
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Kahpot. I've seen a few of these lately and I must say, I truly believe this is one of the better Loop pieces I've read. I also like your presentation. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Hi Kahpot. I've seen a few of these lately and I must say, I truly believe this is one of the better Loop pieces I've read. I also like your presentation. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 07-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Hello Kiwi Thank you very much for this excellent review****kahpot
Comment from Bichon
A very well written poem. It all flowed nicely and made for a very enjoyable read. The theme was very good too, we all need hope these days, even a little helps a lot.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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A very well written poem. It all flowed nicely and made for a very enjoyable read. The theme was very good too, we all need hope these days, even a little helps a lot.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much, and yes a little would go a long way, many thanks****kahpot
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, my friend,
I never tried writing a loop poem. I like it. You did a great job with yours. Hope is so important for people. I need hope to carry on. Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Hello, my friend,
I never tried writing a loop poem. I like it. You did a great job with yours. Hope is so important for people. I need hope to carry on. Well done.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from royowen
There is certainly a need for hope and therefore a future in which one can live within that hope. I love the scripture, of Jeremiah 29:11, "I know the plans I have for you, says God, plans to prosper you and not harm you, plans to give you a future and a purpose." Beautifully written loop poem, with a decent theme, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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There is certainly a need for hope and therefore a future in which one can live within that hope. I love the scripture, of Jeremiah 29:11, "I know the plans I have for you, says God, plans to prosper you and not harm you, plans to give you a future and a purpose." Beautifully written loop poem, with a decent theme, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 07-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much, I like " a future with a purpose" many thanks****kahpot
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Most welcome
Comment from DonandVicki
I am sure that the spirit of Mother Teresa is hovering over those that need it, especially those that are in need nowadays. A joy to read and contemplate. Well done Don and Vicki.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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I am sure that the spirit of Mother Teresa is hovering over those that need it, especially those that are in need nowadays. A joy to read and contemplate. Well done Don and Vicki.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from papa55mike
I love the way you wrote this form. How each line builds the next one to the end. Hope is the one thing we seem to lose too quickly, this world needs faith to build the hope we need. I love the point you bring out.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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I love the way you wrote this form. How each line builds the next one to the end. Hope is the one thing we seem to lose too quickly, this world needs faith to build the hope we need. I love the point you bring out.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 07-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much this excellent review****kahpot
