My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 51 "Oh, the Longing"a collection of my poetry
41 total reviews
Comment from Leineco
:-) This should be sub-titled "Melancholy" . . . as that is the
essence of what these evocative few lines portray.
In fact - it could almost be the perfect submission for a
Story in a Poem contest. . .it paints such a complete picture.
Nicely done Patty!
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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:-) This should be sub-titled "Melancholy" . . . as that is the
essence of what these evocative few lines portray.
In fact - it could almost be the perfect submission for a
Story in a Poem contest. . .it paints such a complete picture.
Nicely done Patty!
Comment Written 05-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Hi there;
thank you for the lovely, shining SIXTH star! I'm touched by your words, 'it paints such a complete picture.'
Maybe I should watch sad movies more often!
~patty~
Comment from jenintorre
I Really loved reading this Katauta poem. it is very sad and poignant. Sadly we can never turn back time. Well done. I wish you good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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I Really loved reading this Katauta poem. it is very sad and poignant. Sadly we can never turn back time. Well done. I wish you good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Hi there;
We will be able to turn back time when someone finally gets around to creating that time machine!
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing,
~patty~
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think we have all felt like this at some time Patty. I have so many happy memories of my husband and would love to turn back the clock and just have ten minutes with him again, lovely words here patty, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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I think we have all felt like this at some time Patty. I have so many happy memories of my husband and would love to turn back the clock and just have ten minutes with him again, lovely words here patty, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Hi Dolly;
thank you so much for the lovely review.
~patty~
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
This is a beautiful katauta poem you've penned, Patty. I chuckled when I read your notes, that you just watched a sad movie, lol. It's funny cause everyone does take everything written so literal. ~Kerry
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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This is a beautiful katauta poem you've penned, Patty. I chuckled when I read your notes, that you just watched a sad movie, lol. It's funny cause everyone does take everything written so literal. ~Kerry
Comment Written 05-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Hi Kerry;
thank you so much for the lovely review.
~patty~
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Your welcome.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written katauta. When separated from a loved one we can only think of their lovely smile we know so well. We wish to turn the clock back, but we only have memories left.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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A very well-written katauta. When separated from a loved one we can only think of their lovely smile we know so well. We wish to turn the clock back, but we only have memories left.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Hi Sandra;
thank you so much for the lovely review,
~patty~
Comment from Cybertron1986
Your poem hit the right note to me as the reader. Involving time and empathy to the feeling of the loved one connected me with emotions long lost and cherished. Beautiful piece and well presented that I had to give it a SIX rating. Thank you
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Your poem hit the right note to me as the reader. Involving time and empathy to the feeling of the loved one connected me with emotions long lost and cherished. Beautiful piece and well presented that I had to give it a SIX rating. Thank you
Comment Written 05-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Hi there;
Thank you for honoring me with the EXCEPTIONAL rating. I'm glad this poem struck a chord within you. It certainly came from my heart.
~patty~
Comment from Lucian Carter
In a few words, you cram in a boatload of sadness. That movie must have been pretty damn good. You nailed the 5/7/7 and this is addressed to a lover (or is it former lover) so it seems like a good Katauta. I really like it, good luck in the contest.
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In a few words, you cram in a boatload of sadness. That movie must have been pretty damn good. You nailed the 5/7/7 and this is addressed to a lover (or is it former lover) so it seems like a good Katauta. I really like it, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Hi there;
thank you so much for the warm review. It is addressed to a former lover, and the movie did indeed start a cataclysmic flood of emotion. I appreciate your well wishes for the contest,
~patty~
Comment from estory
There's a nice echo here of 'smile' and 'time' that links this memory to the moment, so good use of form there. It might be better with some kind of an image, a symbol of that moment, more than that smile. What are you smiling about? Put it in the poem and I think its better. But of course you have to work in the space, so its a little challenging. estory
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There's a nice echo here of 'smile' and 'time' that links this memory to the moment, so good use of form there. It might be better with some kind of an image, a symbol of that moment, more than that smile. What are you smiling about? Put it in the poem and I think its better. But of course you have to work in the space, so its a little challenging. estory
Comment Written 05-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Hi;
thank you so much for the lovely review, along with the understanding of working within a poetic format.
~patty~
Comment from rtobaygo
Good morning, Patty
Very poignant and very true. To be able to back to that point in one's life and experience the love that was.
The picture was made for your poem.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Good morning, Patty
Very poignant and very true. To be able to back to that point in one's life and experience the love that was.
The picture was made for your poem.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 05-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Hi Ray;
thank you so much for your loyalty in reading my work. I appreciate your kind words and rating,
~patty~
Comment from sunnilicious
That heart image is so endearing. It longs for a nice hug. Great presentation.
Great visual imagery. Well thought out and clearly written to convey a nice message about caring, loving, missing and thinking about you. Nice work :)
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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That heart image is so endearing. It longs for a nice hug. Great presentation.
Great visual imagery. Well thought out and clearly written to convey a nice message about caring, loving, missing and thinking about you. Nice work :)
Comment Written 04-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017
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Hi there;
thank you so much for stopping by to read and review my little poem,
~patty~
