The Pick-up Line
Two unique strangers come to understand each other.12 total reviews
Comment from Allyzeé
Wow, I really liked this poem, it's awesome, the humor on it it's really good. The rhymes flowed together naturally. It is a really good poem. Good luck in the contest, this one of the best poems I read for this contest
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Wow, I really liked this poem, it's awesome, the humor on it it's really good. The rhymes flowed together naturally. It is a really good poem. Good luck in the contest, this one of the best poems I read for this contest
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much for this encouraging review. It was fun to write, glad you thought it fun to read.
Fan friend,
Brigitte
Comment from For better for verse
Great poem, and very amusing.
There is a message in there too, but I thought it was very clever
and really enjoyed it.
Great writing, well done.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2017
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Great poem, and very amusing.
There is a message in there too, but I thought it was very clever
and really enjoyed it.
Great writing, well done.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2017
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This is a review that I will remember. It is encouraging to this " wannabe" writer. Thank you so much.
Fan Friend.
Brgitte
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a funny and deplorable experience of passing moments in love and passing time with a stranger and tells about appreciation and understanding him but alas; I liked.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2017
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This speaks a funny and deplorable experience of passing moments in love and passing time with a stranger and tells about appreciation and understanding him but alas; I liked.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2017
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Thank you for this review and comments, I am glad you "got it".
Fan Friend,
Brigitte
Comment from kiwigirl2821
I'm with you mystery poet. Truth and being straight up would have probably saved a lot of time and been much more mutually satisfying. Good luck in contest. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2017
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I'm with you mystery poet. Truth and being straight up would have probably saved a lot of time and been much more mutually satisfying. Good luck in contest. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 07-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2017
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Thank you fellow writer. Misunderstandings in life can lead to good and bad consequences,
Fan Friend,
Brgitte
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
hahahahaha! Am I to understand you to say that if people were only to speak more plainly to each other we might have world peace and less hostility and even less terrorism?? AND even more one night stands, possibly? hahahahaha! That's definitely a new one. Good luck in the contest. This is unique. hahaha!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Dear Mystery Writer,
hahahahaha! Am I to understand you to say that if people were only to speak more plainly to each other we might have world peace and less hostility and even less terrorism?? AND even more one night stands, possibly? hahahahaha! That's definitely a new one. Good luck in the contest. This is unique. hahaha!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Thank you taking the time to comment and review. This scene I described is new to me and I really had to put my imagination into gear. I enjoyed doing this one. Hopefully, readers will understand that differences can be good if one takes the time to understand others....not judge or hate.
Fan Friend,
Brigitte
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Oops! (shhhh.... be careful about signing your name to anonymous contest entries. You can get in trouble for that. Some people might tell.... Shhhhh....)
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Our secret....geez...I don't think I entered this one.
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Comment from Mustang Patty
Wow. Poor little geek. He didn't know how to pick up a girl, but he probably did better than over half the other Romeos in the room.
Well phrased and a nice surprise at the end,
~patty~
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Wow. Poor little geek. He didn't know how to pick up a girl, but he probably did better than over half the other Romeos in the room.
Well phrased and a nice surprise at the end,
~patty~
Comment Written 05-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Thank you. Glad you liked it. Happy endings sometimes are a surprise.
Fan friend,
brigitte
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Yes! I liked this off the wall mismatch and a great story told here in poetry form, I wish you luck with the contest and you nailed the brief here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Yes! I liked this off the wall mismatch and a great story told here in poetry form, I wish you luck with the contest and you nailed the brief here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much for this glowing review. You have made my night.
Fan Friend,
brigitte
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Very funny. I like the ending.
I sure as hell wasn't having none.
You have a double negative in this line. It might be better to write "I sure as hell was having none."
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Very funny. I like the ending.
I sure as hell wasn't having none.
You have a double negative in this line. It might be better to write "I sure as hell was having none."
Comment Written 05-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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I realize that but the character knew nothing about double negatives. Thank for for reading and I hope you chuckled.
Fan Friend,
Brigitte
Comment from fastdigits
Delight as the tale unfolds building up to the end of this little ditty which is sure to explode into howls of laughter for anyone who stops by to read this little masterpiece.
Well done and good luck
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Delight as the tale unfolds building up to the end of this little ditty which is sure to explode into howls of laughter for anyone who stops by to read this little masterpiece.
Well done and good luck
Comment Written 05-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Thank you. This was fun to write. Glad you chuckled.
Comment from RodG
There is one TV ad repeated ad nauseam these days that says, "Wouldn't it be nice if we all said what we were thinking . . ." The Speaker, nicely characterized as someone just "looking for cheer" meets a guy whose line is queer. Amusing and well-composed, following the required parameters of the prompt.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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There is one TV ad repeated ad nauseam these days that says, "Wouldn't it be nice if we all said what we were thinking . . ." The Speaker, nicely characterized as someone just "looking for cheer" meets a guy whose line is queer. Amusing and well-composed, following the required parameters of the prompt.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Thank you for this kind review. Glad that you liked it. I like the comparison to that particular ad.
Brigitte
