Emptiness
I'm afraid my heart will freeze.34 total reviews
Comment from JennaG
This is so true! Songs can really take you back, can't they? This is wonderfully written and I think it's a subject that so many readers can relate to, myself included. There are some songs that no matter where I am or what I'm doing when I hear them, I have to stop and listen. Best of luck in the contest! This is a wonderful entry! :)
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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This is so true! Songs can really take you back, can't they? This is wonderfully written and I think it's a subject that so many readers can relate to, myself included. There are some songs that no matter where I am or what I'm doing when I hear them, I have to stop and listen. Best of luck in the contest! This is a wonderful entry! :)
Comment Written 04-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Thank you, Jenna, for reviewing my poem and the best wishes for the contest.
Jo
Comment from jenintorre
A very good poem about emptiness and loneliness. Very sad and poignant and true.
I wish you lots of luck in the competition.jen
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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A very good poem about emptiness and loneliness. Very sad and poignant and true.
I wish you lots of luck in the competition.jen
Comment Written 04-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Thank you for your kind comments on my poem and the contest well wishes.
Jo
Comment from Ogden
Beautifully written poetry, and a most involving read.
I wonder, Jo66, back in the day when you were most likely to be experiencing the yearning expressed so candidly now, when women, by and large, were more reticent about revealing intimate aspects of their sexuality, do you think you would have written this poem differently?
(In my time, that might have been a confession murmured between the sheets, or divulged not in words.)
;)
Don (aka Ogden)
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Beautifully written poetry, and a most involving read.
I wonder, Jo66, back in the day when you were most likely to be experiencing the yearning expressed so candidly now, when women, by and large, were more reticent about revealing intimate aspects of their sexuality, do you think you would have written this poem differently?
(In my time, that might have been a confession murmured between the sheets, or divulged not in words.)
;)
Don (aka Ogden)
Comment Written 04-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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So true, Don, in the days when I was feeling this loneliness I was 25 and just divorced from my high school sweetheart. We dated from 9th grade to marriage. I don't think I had the maturity then to write or confess my feeling as I can today at 68. Today I can look back on the events of my past with more honesty. Thank you for the six stars, I truly am encouraged when I receive them.
Jo
Comment from honeytree
The art work is really
great for these words
A memory when we meet
someone can be hard
when we want to see them again.
I guess such is life.
Honey tree
I have no six left
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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The art work is really
great for these words
A memory when we meet
someone can be hard
when we want to see them again.
I guess such is life.
Honey tree
I have no six left
Comment Written 04-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Thank you, honeytree, for your kind comments on my work.
Jo
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that's fine.
honeytree.
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that's fine.
honeytree
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi justjo 66 I wonder how many women and men could identify with this. this resonates with the lonliness of being alone and wondering if love will ever be found again.cSometime just a hug is all that is needed.cA great poem Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Hi justjo 66 I wonder how many women and men could identify with this. this resonates with the lonliness of being alone and wondering if love will ever be found again.cSometime just a hug is all that is needed.cA great poem Cheers Christine
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Thank you, Chrissy, for commenting on my poem and your observations.
Jo
Comment from mermaids
Excellent use of words that captures a feeling of loneliness. A vivid scene is created with emotions that the reader can relate to. "I am afraid my heart will freeze" is a line that has an impact on the poem.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Excellent use of words that captures a feeling of loneliness. A vivid scene is created with emotions that the reader can relate to. "I am afraid my heart will freeze" is a line that has an impact on the poem.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much for commenting on my poem. Truthfully, I did feel like at the time my heart did freeze. After my divorce at 25 from my high school sweetheart, my emotions seemed to dry up for a very long time.
Jo
Comment from Mustang Patty
A woeful poem which resonated within my soul. You have created a great deal of imagery within these lines and described the loneliness of 'wanting,' and having to face going home to a cold and lonely house.
Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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A woeful poem which resonated within my soul. You have created a great deal of imagery within these lines and described the loneliness of 'wanting,' and having to face going home to a cold and lonely house.
Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Patty, thank you for commenting on my poem. I think you have got the essence of the emotions of this work. I am glad. :o)
Jo
Comment from MizKat
Hi justjo66,
You've written a very interesting poem.
I always enjoy reading them too.
Thank you for sharing them with us.
Kat
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Hi justjo66,
You've written a very interesting poem.
I always enjoy reading them too.
Thank you for sharing them with us.
Kat
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Kat, thank you for being a consistent reviewer of my work. I am always glad you like my work.
Jo
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I like your work very much. I'm not sure how long I'll be on here though. It seems that it's hard for me to write poetry etc. Kat
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Don't give up. Poetry is from the soul. I always write for myself first and then just "throw" it out there. :o)
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I love writing poetry. There's one person on here that doesn't like my work and lets me know how terrible she thinks it is. Then lets me know that she's sharp as ever.
Comment from Oatmeal
justjo66,
You did a wonderful job with this challenge. The flow was very nice. The theme was good. Your arrangement looks very nice. The words you chose worked well. The artwork complemented your poem.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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justjo66,
You did a wonderful job with this challenge. The flow was very nice. The theme was good. Your arrangement looks very nice. The words you chose worked well. The artwork complemented your poem.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Thank you, Oatmeal, (what a cute choice of names) for reviewing my work. I am glad you liked my poem.
Jo
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about a love's labour lost lover's tale, how he feels the need of love at night in isolation but he believes the love would not help fully in his emptiness stand of living; I liked.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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This speaks about a love's labour lost lover's tale, how he feels the need of love at night in isolation but he believes the love would not help fully in his emptiness stand of living; I liked.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much for reviewing and commenting on my poem. I am glad you liked it.
Jo
