'Black Dog'
ABAB Poem35 total reviews
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a slice of living and how one thinks of living and how normally or easily one gets to ring out and wipe out the problems and find a way of happiness in living, a black dog; I liked.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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This speaks a slice of living and how one thinks of living and how normally or easily one gets to ring out and wipe out the problems and find a way of happiness in living, a black dog; I liked.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Thanks Alcreator Ltt Dear. Yes you are so right it is wringing out and starting again Thanks so mich for your comments and taking the time to read my black dog Cheers Christine
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi Chrissy,
I can certainly relate to this poem as the black dog looks me in the eye quite often. It's good to share with others and reach out to help others at the same time we're attempting to mend our own self. I think you approached this theme in a good way without depressing me. I especially like that you hunkered down to fight the black dog and caught sight of hope. My favorite expression is to get better and not bitter.
Okay, now I have to mention a few things I wasn't so keen on:
- "A warning flash of lightning I do dread" - I wouldn't talk like this. "do" has it's place, but you haven't used it in a natural way here.
- rhyming life and strife is something I'm not keen on. Poets seem to love this rhyme combination. You're not alone. It makes me cringe when I see it.
Yes, these were pet peeves of mine. You're well within your rights to write as you wish. My opinion can be tossed out.
In closing, I'd like to compliment you on your nice iambic pentameter. It is a pleasure to find a fellow poet that enjoys iambic meter as much as I do.
I hope you send that black dog on his way, and feel better soon.
Sincerely,
Joy xx
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Hi Chrissy,
I can certainly relate to this poem as the black dog looks me in the eye quite often. It's good to share with others and reach out to help others at the same time we're attempting to mend our own self. I think you approached this theme in a good way without depressing me. I especially like that you hunkered down to fight the black dog and caught sight of hope. My favorite expression is to get better and not bitter.
Okay, now I have to mention a few things I wasn't so keen on:
- "A warning flash of lightning I do dread" - I wouldn't talk like this. "do" has it's place, but you haven't used it in a natural way here.
- rhyming life and strife is something I'm not keen on. Poets seem to love this rhyme combination. You're not alone. It makes me cringe when I see it.
Yes, these were pet peeves of mine. You're well within your rights to write as you wish. My opinion can be tossed out.
In closing, I'd like to compliment you on your nice iambic pentameter. It is a pleasure to find a fellow poet that enjoys iambic meter as much as I do.
I hope you send that black dog on his way, and feel better soon.
Sincerely,
Joy xx
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Hi Joy Thanls so much for your understanding and for your helpful advice And compliments for my iambic pentameter I really enjoy this style and try very hard to get it right in syllables etc. What If I wrote A warming flash of lightning is my dread ? and I will keep life and strife because its the strife I felt I was in so it seems to be appropriate for this line but I do see what you mean and appreciate your feedback and will remeber for the future. yes the black dog is in its kennel and chained up at the moment LOL Many Cheers from Bali Christine xx
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Yes, I like the new sentence :)
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi Christine;
your poem describes the chaos in my head when I descend into the depths of depression. I had a bad few months, and I basically didn't move off the couch. (I cannot fit into any of my pants right now.)
The only thing that kept me going was the occasional urge to write and the knowledge that it would be over 'someday.'
I'm through it and one the other side. I've set up my schedule and made my checklists and oh yes - I've been exercising to lose the weight, but I'm so sore!
~patty~
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Hi Christine;
your poem describes the chaos in my head when I descend into the depths of depression. I had a bad few months, and I basically didn't move off the couch. (I cannot fit into any of my pants right now.)
The only thing that kept me going was the occasional urge to write and the knowledge that it would be over 'someday.'
I'm through it and one the other side. I've set up my schedule and made my checklists and oh yes - I've been exercising to lose the weight, but I'm so sore!
~patty~
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Hi Patty, Yes I can understand where you come from and it is an awful feeling to feel so down I am usually able to get out of the depression and my Bali Holiday certainly helps. Keep exercising I must get back to my Gym when I get home Tahnls so much for your lovely support Cheers and hugs Christine
Comment from His Grayness
I Found this to be a really rare and unusual work in a subject very arcane, yet fascinating in many ways. The black dog connection is unfamiliar to me although I lived many years in Australia (and had a magnificent) black dog of my own.. so I plan to read this a couple more times to get the connection. at this point I would rate this work fascinating and delightful, all at the same time! with thanks! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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I Found this to be a really rare and unusual work in a subject very arcane, yet fascinating in many ways. The black dog connection is unfamiliar to me although I lived many years in Australia (and had a magnificent) black dog of my own.. so I plan to read this a couple more times to get the connection. at this point I would rate this work fascinating and delightful, all at the same time! with thanks! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Hi Vance.cThanks so much for your review and it is not about a black dog literally it is a term often used for depression and it seemed to be appropriate for this. I am so pleased it kept your interest and really appreciate your comments Sending you a Bali Hug Cheers Christine
Comment from June Sargent
You've eloquently expressed a universal feeling that afflicts all of us from time to time, that black dog that is never far from us, hovering in the bushes. But the determination to stay true to ourselves can and will pull us up out of the darkness. Well done
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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You've eloquently expressed a universal feeling that afflicts all of us from time to time, that black dog that is never far from us, hovering in the bushes. But the determination to stay true to ourselves can and will pull us up out of the darkness. Well done
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Hi June, Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my black dog poem and yes I think the dog is everywhere and we need to keep it in its kennel. i am so pleased to have your review Many Cheers and have a great day Christine
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Christine
= So pleased you are feeling better.
= Indeed, feeling down like this is an awful place to be.
= Only those of us who have been there can truly understand your words.
= Take care, dear friend.
Cheers, J (*<*)
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Hi, Christine
= So pleased you are feeling better.
= Indeed, feeling down like this is an awful place to be.
= Only those of us who have been there can truly understand your words.
= Take care, dear friend.
Cheers, J (*<*)
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Hi Jackie, Yes not a good place to be bit now much better with a Bali holiday and some sun our winters are so long cold and drawn out I am sure that contributes to mood swings plus getting sick didn't help Thanks ever so much for your kind words Cheers my friend Christine
Comment from Oatmeal
CHRISSY710,
You did a wonderful job with the challenge that was presented to you. This is a beautiful poem. I liked it very much. It made for an enjoyable read. The flow was smooth. The theme well thought out.
I wish you the best in the contest.
I saw no SPAG and no typos. Everything looked in place.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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CHRISSY710,
You did a wonderful job with the challenge that was presented to you. This is a beautiful poem. I liked it very much. It made for an enjoyable read. The flow was smooth. The theme well thought out.
I wish you the best in the contest.
I saw no SPAG and no typos. Everything looked in place.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Hi Oatmeal What a delighful review . Thank you so much I am glad you read and reviewed this. much appreciated and Sending a Bali hug Cheers Christine
Comment from BeasPeas
Your poem is well written and described. Thank you for sharing the "black dog" explanation for Australia as depression--a terrible feeling. I first heard the term "black dog" in relation to a Patrick Swayze movie on truckers when they get so tired following the line in the road on long runs that they start to hallucinate. I hope you are enjoying your holiday in Bali. The sun and sea will surely help. Marilyn
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Your poem is well written and described. Thank you for sharing the "black dog" explanation for Australia as depression--a terrible feeling. I first heard the term "black dog" in relation to a Patrick Swayze movie on truckers when they get so tired following the line in the road on long runs that they start to hallucinate. I hope you are enjoying your holiday in Bali. The sun and sea will surely help. Marilyn
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Hi Marilyn, Yes black dog is something I think we all can be prone too and sometimes to get away dows help and my Bali holiday has restored my muse . As always great to hear from you. Cheers my friend Christine
Comment from lyenochka
Hi Christine, was wondering how you recovered from the flu and am glad that got away for a vacation. I like your vivid description of depression. The "black dog" as an overwhelming storm is very good! It is amazing how closely tied our bodies and spirits are tied so a prolonged illness affects our spirits as well. So glad you've recovered!
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Hi Christine, was wondering how you recovered from the flu and am glad that got away for a vacation. I like your vivid description of depression. The "black dog" as an overwhelming storm is very good! It is amazing how closely tied our bodies and spirits are tied so a prolonged illness affects our spirits as well. So glad you've recovered!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Hi lyenochka, Yes pretty much recovered now and feeling a lot better and black dog is often just waiting to pounce but have put him in the pound now LOL Your support for my work is always appreciated and Thanks so much for reading me Cheers my friend Christine
Comment from Irish Rain
Wow, this is most excellent. I rarely get depressed, I get angry, ha ha. I do know though, that if you're depressed with illness on top of it....that's a lot of misery. Glad you are better!! Shoot that dog!! Blessings....
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Wow, this is most excellent. I rarely get depressed, I get angry, ha ha. I do know though, that if you're depressed with illness on top of it....that's a lot of misery. Glad you are better!! Shoot that dog!! Blessings....
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Hi Irish Rain, Thanks for reading my poem and yes I don't get depressed that often but when I do I takes me a while to get over it and thankfullly some lovely Bali sun has helped and now feeling back to me. I thought I would share this and a bullet would be handy Ha Ha Cheers Christine
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Bali sun....how wonderful!!!
