Fortune Cookies
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The Gift"A Romantic, Superhero-like, Geek Horror story.
32 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a place to stop! I hope she isn't going to do what I think she is. This is an eerie nightmare, at least I hope it's going to be a nightmare in this story, and an excellent contest entry. You certainly laid the trail for something dreadful all along the corridor. Well done, and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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What a place to stop! I hope she isn't going to do what I think she is. This is an eerie nightmare, at least I hope it's going to be a nightmare in this story, and an excellent contest entry. You certainly laid the trail for something dreadful all along the corridor. Well done, and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 31-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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Awesome! Thank you for you insightful comment and rating. I hope you can take time to venture into chapter three to find out how it all ends. Happy Halloween!
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Awesome! Thank you for you insightful comment and rating. I hope you can take time to venture into chapter three to find out how it all ends. Happy Halloween!
Comment from c_lucas
Most of us have awakened to an unrealistic dream. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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Most of us have awakened to an unrealistic dream. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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Thank you! Happy Halloween!
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Thank you! Happy Halloween!
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You're welcome.
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You're welcome
Comment from Earl Corp
Is it real or is it Memorex? Is Eu El dreaming? The way you're describing the action i think this is real. Your build up of tension is great. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Is it real or is it Memorex? Is Eu El dreaming? The way you're describing the action i think this is real. Your build up of tension is great. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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I remember that phrase as a kid. :) In the story, Eu El is dreaming, but what he does not realize is that the dreams are real. Thank you the kind review and stars. Very much appreciated.
Comment from heart of Lou
This is very horrible indeed. Why must the witch pick on the innocent baby girl? Eu El is in a very hazy fuzzy state of mind and it's hard to say whether he's in a nightmare or truly in this weird condition.
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This is very horrible indeed. Why must the witch pick on the innocent baby girl? Eu El is in a very hazy fuzzy state of mind and it's hard to say whether he's in a nightmare or truly in this weird condition.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2018
Comment from KatyM
Interesting...I did notice how on this sentence: Everything that was Eu El's world, mixed with the confusion of adolescence, had transformed his life into a confusing equation he was left to solve by himself.
You used the word confusion and confusing...which are close together. So you might want to change one of them to a different word. Otherwise, very good.
Katy
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2018
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Interesting...I did notice how on this sentence: Everything that was Eu El's world, mixed with the confusion of adolescence, had transformed his life into a confusing equation he was left to solve by himself.
You used the word confusion and confusing...which are close together. So you might want to change one of them to a different word. Otherwise, very good.
Katy
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2018
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Well noted. I missed that entirely. Thank you for that attention and the generous stars. :)
Comment from Raul1
A different kind of horror story. It is suspenseful. A boy with great power. This story brought chills to my bones. It is creepy and unique. Excellent work! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2018
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A different kind of horror story. It is suspenseful. A boy with great power. This story brought chills to my bones. It is creepy and unique. Excellent work! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2018
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Awesome! I?m soo happy you found it entertaining. Thank you for your generous stars and time for review. :)
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You're welcome.
Comment from RGstar
I came in to see if there was something on the book side to catch my attention.
Not knowing what to expect, I read this as a passing decision.
Author. Your writing is superb. Grammar flowed but not stretched....effortless. I like that. Some try to hard, but when talent is a part, it comes naturally.
Insight to thoughts (the characters) and the actions forthcoming were excellent. The narrative through words that were excellently wielded. Very impressed, and worth the six stars.
Well done.
Hope you have success with it.
My very best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2018
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I came in to see if there was something on the book side to catch my attention.
Not knowing what to expect, I read this as a passing decision.
Author. Your writing is superb. Grammar flowed but not stretched....effortless. I like that. Some try to hard, but when talent is a part, it comes naturally.
Insight to thoughts (the characters) and the actions forthcoming were excellent. The narrative through words that were excellently wielded. Very impressed, and worth the six stars.
Well done.
Hope you have success with it.
My very best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2018
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Deeply honored for this attention and rating. I wasn?t sure if my chapter was headed in the right direction, or not. I?m planning on promoting my chapter 13, entitled, ?The Thirteenth Chapter? soon for Halloween. Hope you take time to read it as well. Thank you again for the uplifting and motivating support. God Bless.
-Euell
Comment from Kelly Hanna
This is a great horror story for the contest. The sci-fi effect of what I believe was travel of some sort, either to a different dimension or time was a cool concept to add into a horror piece. A very nice touch and an original premise, I think. The writing was excellent with a lot of solid descriptive words. You also did a great job of keeping the reader interested. Well written!
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2018
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This is a great horror story for the contest. The sci-fi effect of what I believe was travel of some sort, either to a different dimension or time was a cool concept to add into a horror piece. A very nice touch and an original premise, I think. The writing was excellent with a lot of solid descriptive words. You also did a great job of keeping the reader interested. Well written!
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2018
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Awesome! Thank you much for the support and time to read, and rate. I?m thrilled you found it interesting. :)
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi there,
A great horror story for the upcoming contest. You have managed to build the tension and cause that eerie feeling of a cold finger running down my spine. I wish you lots of luck in the contest. I'm glad I read this in the light.
~MP~
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2018
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Hi there,
A great horror story for the upcoming contest. You have managed to build the tension and cause that eerie feeling of a cold finger running down my spine. I wish you lots of luck in the contest. I'm glad I read this in the light.
~MP~
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2018
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LOL Thank you! I?m glad it worked well to connect with you for the Halloween festivities. I tend to enjoy horror flicks with a little light on myself. :)
Comment from meeshu
this is such a strong write. full of suspense and surprise, it is written in style that really accents the story with pace. I enjoyed reading this and will be looking for more. well done, Cybertron1986.................meeshu
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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this is such a strong write. full of suspense and surprise, it is written in style that really accents the story with pace. I enjoyed reading this and will be looking for more. well done, Cybertron1986.................meeshu
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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Thank you for this uplifting review. I promoted this chapter for the Halloween festivities, and I have 14 chapters available. Thank you again.
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Thank you for this uplifting review. I promoted this chapter for the Halloween festivities, and I have 14 chapters available. Thank you again.
