Comment from Heather Knight

Excellent

This is cute, Patty. I like the playful rhymes you've used.
It's fun to see how we all write very different poems based on the same picture.
Thanks for sharing yours.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017

Hi Maria;
thank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem for the Picture This challenge. I'm glad you enjoyed it,

~patty~

Comment from Mitchell Brontė

Excellent

Hi Patty
A lovely, fun minute poem, you have brought Jim to life and yes he certainly doesn't look wise he looks baffled........great stuff.
Mitchell

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017

Hi Mitchell;
thank you so much for reading this silly little poem. I'm glad you liked it,

~patty~

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem and excelkent interpretation of the picture this challenge. The owl is a prominent figure in the picture and caught the most attention .

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017

Hi Sandra;
thank you so much for reviewing this little poem of fun,

~patty~

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

An excellently done minute poem for this challenge and it does fit the picture very well. I love minute poems for whimsy and fantasy.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017

Hi Barb;
I'm glad you enjoyed this little piece of whimsy for this challenge,

~patty~

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

I must be confused as well - at first glance I thought that was a rabbit!

Your Minute poem is well done (although a purist might hope for stricter meter in a couple of places). I like that you break the stereotype of the wise old owl.

'Who is it sits...' to start may be a little smoother, and why not change 'ruled' to 'rules' to fit in with the present tense throughout the rest of the poem?

Steve

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017

Hi Steve;
changed the 'ruled' back to 'rules.' A reviewer before you had suggested the change, and I couldn't figure out why.

Your comment on the first line is probably because I used 'Who's it that sits...' (I was limited by syllable count.)

I know my meter isn't the best -- that's why I'm going to take Jim's class!

thanks for the review,

~patty~

reply by kiwisteveh on 02-Oct-2017

Yeah, I forgot about the 8 syllable requirement. You could change it to something like:
'I wonder who's upon the branch...'

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Despite popular belief, the Owl is not very intelligent. This is very well very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. Their is good imagery.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017

Hi Charlie

thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem,

~patty~

reply by c_lucas on 02-Oct-2017

You're welcome, Patty. Charlie

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

A fun minute poem, Patty! I still am puzzled by the creature. I think it's the offspring of the Owl and the Pussycat. It doesn't look fully an owl or cat or bunny. And yes, he does look a bit confused and spaced out.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017

Hi there;
thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I thought the owl really looked strange, so that's why I made him a bit of an oddball.

~patty~

Comment from poetwatch

Excellent

I can picture Jim. Good humor poem, for Jim does not rules the dark if he misses his mark. How about if you use ruled instead of rules? I like it, for to paint a picture in words is the hardest thing a poet as well as writer must do to grab the readers attention.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017

Hi there;
thank you so much for the review. I tried 'ruled' instead of 'rules,' but I didn't like it as much, and neither did a few reviewers - so, I changed it back.

I appreciate your time and suggestions,

~patty~

reply by poetwatch on 02-Oct-2017

The pleasure is all mine, for I'm learning from the best. I don't know how to write humor so give me a few other examples. Please.

reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017

I will do my best

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

Excellent minute poem, my friend. Well worded with good rhyme and steady meter. You have grown so much as a poet and author, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017

Hi Debbie;
thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your comments - I'm glad you can see my growth!

~patty~

Comment from Bucketlist

Excellent

It was a different way to describe the owl, in minute style . Thankfully, it was a quick read
( I've been reviewing all day) and I enjoyed your version. Thanks for sharing
Hugs, Trisha

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 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017

Hi Trisha;
thank you so much for the review and stars,

~patty~