Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem from the world of the caterpillar that walks and walks all get life going smoothly from point A to point B until her wooden leg broke with a clank.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2017

Thank you, Sandra.

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Okay Bill this is some seriously twisted humour and I love it! Because it drew in the thought of a caterpillar tank or something like that. lol.

Very entertaining!

Gloria

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017

Thank you, Gloria

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I enjoyed your lighthearted poem and echoing sounds plus humor. I appreciated your alliteration of "p's" as well in the short quatrain. Smiles- Joan

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017

Thank you, Joan

Comment from Octavia

Excellent

Very creative. I got my laugh for the day.
Phrasing was great:
"Cater- pitter- patter - pillar" - you can "hear" the caterpillar walking.
Pill/sill/'til rhyme
Then the twist - wow- so funny.
Well done.
I liked this.

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017

Thank you, Octavia

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Lol. That's cute. I'm not sure how many legs a caterpillar has. I like the sound effects in the first line which places the little feet sounds of "pitter patter" in the word, caterpillar. Then the last line gives us the surprising, humorous ending.

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017

Thanks, lyenochka,for the nice review. Bill

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is another cute little caterpillar poem you have penned. You used very cute and descriptive wording with great imagery with your words. I enjoyed it very much! Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017

Thanks, Teri

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

haha I can just about hear this Bill.

Good job on the alliteration of 'p', cross rhymes pill/sill/til, & ononmonopeia--CLANK.

So she is crawling around on her many legs, then the wooden one makes the noise. Funny. Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017

Thanks, Jan

reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017

Thanks, Jan

Comment from frogbook

Excellent

Ha-such a great inventor of words. What an imagination lurks within the head of Bill. LOL This was so funny and creative! Described to a tee. Exceptional.

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017

Thank you, FB, for your kind review. I like this one.

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

YOU are TOO much! I'm still giggling. Poor caterpillar. Each word carefully chosen is a gem to complete this unique and creative poem. Last line is a clincher. Great job. Marilyn

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017

Thanks, Marilyn, for the excellent review. Bill

Comment from damommy

Excellent

You didn't take a photo of that? Darn.

I love jokes like this. Throws one completely off. There you are reading along, and then SURPRISE! lol

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017

Thanks, da, for the nice review. Bill