Appreciate This Autumn Day
a quatern for nature lovers49 total reviews
Comment from Thomas Bowling
You draw an excellent analogy between the gay colors of Mardi Gras and the leaves of autumn. This is a fantastic contest entry. I don't see any way that you could lose.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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You draw an excellent analogy between the gay colors of Mardi Gras and the leaves of autumn. This is a fantastic contest entry. I don't see any way that you could lose.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much, Thomas, for your enthusiastic endorsement of "Autumn Day" and that bright gold star. I am thrilled by your response to my poem.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem and request to appreciate the autumn days that are brief and will soon be over before winter sets in then it will be only next year that autumn will come again.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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A very well-written poem and request to appreciate the autumn days that are brief and will soon be over before winter sets in then it will be only next year that autumn will come again.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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Yes, although the cycle continues, it's important to appreciate autumn NOW. Thank you for sharing my poem, Sandra.
Comment from Lucian Carter
This is a wonderful use of repetition. The movement of the repeated line in each stanza is inspired. The imagery is amazing. A smattering of French is wonderful. A strong contender in the contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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This is a wonderful use of repetition. The movement of the repeated line in each stanza is inspired. The imagery is amazing. A smattering of French is wonderful. A strong contender in the contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much, Lucian, for all the superlatives about "Autumn Day" and that bright gold star is a much appreciated bonus.
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
I love your repetion poem on, "Appreciate this autumn day" Your use of this line fits very well. A lovely write:) ~Kerry
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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I love your repetion poem on, "Appreciate this autumn day" Your use of this line fits very well. A lovely write:) ~Kerry
Comment Written 26-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much, Kerry, for your effusive praise of "Autumn Day."
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Your very welcome.
Comment from nbonner
All seasons should be appreciated I think. Autumn is one of my favorite's with it's cool winds and all the leaves different colors falling, it's wondrous. Thank you for sharing, NB
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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All seasons should be appreciated I think. Autumn is one of my favorite's with it's cool winds and all the leaves different colors falling, it's wondrous. Thank you for sharing, NB
Comment Written 26-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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Autumn, where I live, is the most pleasant season of the year weather-wise and our trees are gorgeous. Thank you so much for sharing my poem.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Lots of French language used in this post, Anonymous Poet. French is the language of love, and that "love" is well-conveyed here in your exceptionally well composed Quatern for the Repetition Contest.
You got my vote!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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Lots of French language used in this post, Anonymous Poet. French is the language of love, and that "love" is well-conveyed here in your exceptionally well composed Quatern for the Repetition Contest.
You got my vote!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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Merci beaucoup, Dean, for your very kind comments about my poem and your vote. I am delighted you enjoyed the Quatern.
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Vous etes les bienvenus. ;)
Comment from rama devi
Autumn is delightful and so is your poem and presentation (love the art choice).
Nice alliterative opening (and smattering of alliteration and other poetic devices deftly woven in the whole poem).
A strong etnry for the contest. Near-flawles meter (see notes below) and outstanding phonetics, rhymes and imagery.
Outstanding inventive rhymes, especially Mardi Gras and voila and soiree and jubilee (though I am unsure about the latter because of pronunciation differences)
Excellent personification, especially in this line:
with trees that think it's Mardi Gras.
*spag suggestions:
-Festooned in festive garb(,) they shout,
-but as we trod, leaves(,) crunching(,) cry,
"Appreciate this autumn day(,)
for soon we're gone. Au Revoir! Goodbye!"
Love the personification and rhyming here:
Enjoy Ma Nature's jubilee,
outbursts of color, gay soiree,
However, the scansion is forced on the word OUTBURSTS which usually accentuates the first syllable, not the second.
Love this line:
her haute grandeur and elegance.
Almost a six. Bravo.
Good luck!
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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Autumn is delightful and so is your poem and presentation (love the art choice).
Nice alliterative opening (and smattering of alliteration and other poetic devices deftly woven in the whole poem).
A strong etnry for the contest. Near-flawles meter (see notes below) and outstanding phonetics, rhymes and imagery.
Outstanding inventive rhymes, especially Mardi Gras and voila and soiree and jubilee (though I am unsure about the latter because of pronunciation differences)
Excellent personification, especially in this line:
with trees that think it's Mardi Gras.
*spag suggestions:
-Festooned in festive garb(,) they shout,
-but as we trod, leaves(,) crunching(,) cry,
"Appreciate this autumn day(,)
for soon we're gone. Au Revoir! Goodbye!"
Love the personification and rhyming here:
Enjoy Ma Nature's jubilee,
outbursts of color, gay soiree,
However, the scansion is forced on the word OUTBURSTS which usually accentuates the first syllable, not the second.
Love this line:
her haute grandeur and elegance.
Almost a six. Bravo.
Good luck!
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 26-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment on my poem, rama. I especially appreciate your comments about my poetic devices and use of rhyme. Yes, there are places where commas could be inserted, but I chose not to to preserve the "flow" of sounds when read aloud. I love that "soiree" is a sight rhyme with "jubilee," but actually pronounced "swah-Ray" it rhymes with "day,"
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:-))))) being a musician, I prefer rhymes that sound like rhymes as well as look like them...but I know some people do use sight ones.
Comment from angel123
I enjoyed reading your well-written poem. I like your subject and your repeating sentence. Your artwork choice is beautiful and enhances the message of your poem.
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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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I enjoyed reading your well-written poem. I like your subject and your repeating sentence. Your artwork choice is beautiful and enhances the message of your poem.
angel123
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Comment Written 26-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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I am delighted you enjoyed the poem and the artwork. Thank you so much for sharing.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a hearty welcoming request to everyone to appreciate the short-stay autumn day with her haute grandeur and elegance, and her grace, colour, essence, smell; I liked.
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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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This speaks a hearty welcoming request to everyone to appreciate the short-stay autumn day with her haute grandeur and elegance, and her grace, colour, essence, smell; I liked.
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Comment Written 25-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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I am delighted you like my poem and its sensory imagery. Thank you so much for sharing.
