Look deeper, see me.
A child's inner struggle with Autism.31 total reviews
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I like the point of view you took with this piece. I'm sure this applies to some children with autism but is quite a generalisation. A lot have no awareness of any of this. To some 'we' are just furniture or objects. Some don't really acknowledge or show awareness of 'us' at all.
Of course, we all live within our own worlds anyway, so why should a chid with special needs be any different?
I like this piece and I think it'll do well in the competition.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Hi there,
I like the point of view you took with this piece. I'm sure this applies to some children with autism but is quite a generalisation. A lot have no awareness of any of this. To some 'we' are just furniture or objects. Some don't really acknowledge or show awareness of 'us' at all.
Of course, we all live within our own worlds anyway, so why should a chid with special needs be any different?
I like this piece and I think it'll do well in the competition.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 14-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your feedback. Yes agree, the " spectrum" is a long one and I'm sure we all fit on there to some degree. PM
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
this has to have a six. I have written so many things on autism and this is the best I have read from anyone, you have captured the essence of the child completely and instead of entering this contest, you have my vote all the way. I have never read anything so moving and so compelling. This is truth told very bluntly. Autistic sufferers know what we are saying and how we are saying it.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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this has to have a six. I have written so many things on autism and this is the best I have read from anyone, you have captured the essence of the child completely and instead of entering this contest, you have my vote all the way. I have never read anything so moving and so compelling. This is truth told very bluntly. Autistic sufferers know what we are saying and how we are saying it.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your feedback.
Comment from Jake P.
This is truly an emotional story, and you've written it from the child's point of view. Kudos. It's hard for someone see a child's heart beyond their behavior.
Good job.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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This is truly an emotional story, and you've written it from the child's point of view. Kudos. It's hard for someone see a child's heart beyond their behavior.
Good job.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your feedback. I seem to have a knack at being able to "put myself in someone else's shoes." PM
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt and informative story. Autism are more and more a part of our lives. Each child has their own abilities and disabilities and we love them anyway.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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A very well-written heartfelt and informative story. Autism are more and more a part of our lives. Each child has their own abilities and disabilities and we love them anyway.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Thank you your feedback
Comment from doggymad
Wow this was a powerful write.It is heart breaking to know that there is so much trapped inside the mid of a non verbal autistic child and be unable to help.
Thankfully it now better understood compared to the days when people used to proclaim that violence was just part of the illness.
Best of luck with this
hugs
Freda
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Wow this was a powerful write.It is heart breaking to know that there is so much trapped inside the mid of a non verbal autistic child and be unable to help.
Thankfully it now better understood compared to the days when people used to proclaim that violence was just part of the illness.
Best of luck with this
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your silence.PM
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello author
I read your story about a child that has autism through an adult inner feeling of how a child feels about being
trapped inside his/her lonely, empty world
Well written
Gert
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Hello author
I read your story about a child that has autism through an adult inner feeling of how a child feels about being
trapped inside his/her lonely, empty world
Well written
Gert
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your feedback.
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You are welcome
Gert
Comment from Jackreese
This was an amazing piece. I know several people that work with Autistic children and know that they struggle just working with them. I can't imagine having a child with this and having to deal with this on a daily basis. Aside from this, I think you did a great job with the child's perspective. Thank you for this.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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This was an amazing piece. I know several people that work with Autistic children and know that they struggle just working with them. I can't imagine having a child with this and having to deal with this on a daily basis. Aside from this, I think you did a great job with the child's perspective. Thank you for this.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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I have a cousin who has to boys with Autism and a friend with two boys one who has autism. I see and hear the pain in their voices when they talk about the difficulties that they encounter. Thanks for the feedback and for the "6" that's awesome. PM
Comment from EverInParadise
This story is compelling. It is a story that says so much. How very creative; to use this autistic voice struggling to be understood. Absolutely well done. Even so, I suggest a couple of edits that I believe strengthen this important tale. "I have words and sounds locked away(.) omitting *deep inside* as it changes the rhythm of this brilliant sentence and diminishes the power of the statement. I wish you well in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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This story is compelling. It is a story that says so much. How very creative; to use this autistic voice struggling to be understood. Absolutely well done. Even so, I suggest a couple of edits that I believe strengthen this important tale. "I have words and sounds locked away(.) omitting *deep inside* as it changes the rhythm of this brilliant sentence and diminishes the power of the statement. I wish you well in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your feedback. I've altered the writing to reflect your comments. Thank you for that. I have a cousin with two boys with Autism and a friend who has a son with Autism. I have worked with adults with Aspergers and I am very intuitive in picking the moods a thoughts of people with disabilities, having worked in the field for 20 odd years. I appreciate the six that you gave me. Thank you again.
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I was sure you had close relations with this disorder to be so intuitive to its depths.
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I do have relatives with this disorder but I just want to say and hope you understand, that I am intuitive by nature. I can watch a person and almost feel their pain. I cried as I wrote this piece because I see my cousins young boy, smiling, beautiful, yet totally vacant in every way. I often watch him and wonder " what goes on inside that head?" PM
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You spelled it out with affection and perfection.
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Thank you so much. You are very helpful. PM
Comment from luther maddox
Great poem of communication lost. Words thrown against a window, thoughts trying to make room for tears, echoes of love in the heart beating so hard trying to come out and say I love. I want to be love. I love you mom but they do not reac her ears. But mom is tormented by her lack of really understand, yet comprehending in
her own way, love.
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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Great poem of communication lost. Words thrown against a window, thoughts trying to make room for tears, echoes of love in the heart beating so hard trying to come out and say I love. I want to be love. I love you mom but they do not reac her ears. But mom is tormented by her lack of really understand, yet comprehending in
her own way, love.
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Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your feedback. I love your comments " words thrown against a window" they are the example of the words I would use if I was an adult describing my inner thoughts of Autism . A child's words needed to be much simpler. Than you for reading fully and comprehending my intentions. PM
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you are so welcomed
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Author,
Autism is such a difficult disease to work with. I'm glad you are sharing this post, because more people need to be aware of its potentially devastating effects - not just on the child, but on the caregivers. We need to offer help and support to the whole family. Thanks and good luck!
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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Dear Mystery Author,
Autism is such a difficult disease to work with. I'm glad you are sharing this post, because more people need to be aware of its potentially devastating effects - not just on the child, but on the caregivers. We need to offer help and support to the whole family. Thanks and good luck!
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Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your review. I have a cousin with two autistic boys and it's heartbreaking. I also have a friend with two boys one of whom has Autism. It devastates families and carers alike at times. PM
