Perennials of War
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Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Barbara.
Well, that certainly packed a punch! First, you made me hungry. I haven't had beef for over 2 years, they hardly ever eat or sell it here. Secondly, the short time it took for them to be followed and draw there weapons was like, wow!
Your dialogue is always spot on and entertaining.
Fabulous chapter.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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G'day Barbara.
Well, that certainly packed a punch! First, you made me hungry. I haven't had beef for over 2 years, they hardly ever eat or sell it here. Secondly, the short time it took for them to be followed and draw there weapons was like, wow!
Your dialogue is always spot on and entertaining.
Fabulous chapter.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 07-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review. I am a HUGE beef fan.
Comment from Janie King
I'm just coming in so I've missed a lot buy iy is well-written and easy to read. It's been a loooong time since I've been on this sight. Glad to run into you my friend. Janie
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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I'm just coming in so I've missed a lot buy iy is well-written and easy to read. It's been a loooong time since I've been on this sight. Glad to run into you my friend. Janie
Comment Written 07-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
I can hear a little voice say, "You better move ,you are standing where I'm going to shoot. LOL. Good one Barb. Sorry to be late. Taking a break.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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I can hear a little voice say, "You better move ,you are standing where I'm going to shoot. LOL. Good one Barb. Sorry to be late. Taking a break.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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I always enjoy hearing from you. Thank you.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Looks like the action is ramping up in fine fashion, full of danger and excitement. I'm set in and ready to read. My hopes and prayers continue for all of those dealing with the pain, suffering, and heartbreak left by Harvey's devastation.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2017
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Looks like the action is ramping up in fine fashion, full of danger and excitement. I'm set in and ready to read. My hopes and prayers continue for all of those dealing with the pain, suffering, and heartbreak left by Harvey's devastation.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend this is well written the action is building up now which I like a story that involves a little of everything I enjoyed well done again regards Jill
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Hello my friend this is well written the action is building up now which I like a story that involves a little of everything I enjoyed well done again regards Jill
Comment Written 04-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from giraffmang
Nice developments here, Barbara. Now Anderson has their attention and turned the tables somewhat. Excellent end point.
Jeff glanced over his shoulder. "You got that right? - this felt more like a statement than a question here.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Nice developments here, Barbara. Now Anderson has their attention and turned the tables somewhat. Excellent end point.
Jeff glanced over his shoulder. "You got that right? - this felt more like a statement than a question here.
All the best
G
Comment Written 04-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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I will change the question mark. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rtobaygo
Good afternoon, Barbara
Strong continuation. I like how you show as opposed to telling. The dialogue was spot on. You gradually increased the tension, the anticipation of impending danger.
Superb hook at the end. Enjoyed.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Good afternoon, Barbara
Strong continuation. I like how you show as opposed to telling. The dialogue was spot on. You gradually increased the tension, the anticipation of impending danger.
Superb hook at the end. Enjoyed.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 04-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, this is a great chapter and it's so very well written. You leave us on a cliff hanger and I can't wait how this will pan out. It's a great story and you have me engrossed in it. Well done. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Hi Barbara, this is a great chapter and it's so very well written. You leave us on a cliff hanger and I can't wait how this will pan out. It's a great story and you have me engrossed in it. Well done. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 04-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
An intriguing chapter, Barbara - so well written, leaving me wanting more.
Maxim placed in front of Anderson a black, leather envelope. - Might I suggest you turn this about:
Maxim placed a black leather envelope in front of Anderson."
also: Anderson whispered loudly - this sounds a bit strange - to whisper would be speaking softly not loudly - just an observation, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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An intriguing chapter, Barbara - so well written, leaving me wanting more.
Maxim placed in front of Anderson a black, leather envelope. - Might I suggest you turn this about:
Maxim placed a black leather envelope in front of Anderson."
also: Anderson whispered loudly - this sounds a bit strange - to whisper would be speaking softly not loudly - just an observation, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 04-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the suggestions. I will take another look.
Comment from apky
Very enjoyable read. Once more you left it a pitch perfect end. You do this with such excellence, Barbara.
Maxim placed in front of Anderson a black, leather envelope. ~ I think it would sound better if you changed this to: "Maxim placed a black leather envelope in front of Anderson."
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Very enjoyable read. Once more you left it a pitch perfect end. You do this with such excellence, Barbara.
Maxim placed in front of Anderson a black, leather envelope. ~ I think it would sound better if you changed this to: "Maxim placed a black leather envelope in front of Anderson."
Comment Written 04-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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I have wondered about that sentence myself, but I have been told to keep the object by the verb. I will see what other reviewers say. Thank you for the kind review.
