Where Purple Iris Grow
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Comment from Oatmeal
Jmf4119,
Very nicely written work. This is a beautiful poem. I liked it very much. It made for an enjoyable read. Perfectly arranged and the formatting is wonderful. Good flow. Understandable.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Jmf4119,
Very nicely written work. This is a beautiful poem. I liked it very much. It made for an enjoyable read. Perfectly arranged and the formatting is wonderful. Good flow. Understandable.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 04-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
Thank you so much for the wonderful review Oatmeal and for the special six stars. I'm always happy to see you name in my inbox for a review. Thank you too for your encouragement and for giving my work some extra cent pumps. No one has ever done that for me before and it is greatly appreciated. I have been working on other things lately and your confidence in my poetry gives me strength and desire to write more.
Blessings to you and yours
Janet
Comment from R.A.Partin
A poem about the yearn to travel and explore, but that home is always the best place to be. The flower imagery in this poem is very pretty and is a good reason for returning when adventuring is done.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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A poem about the yearn to travel and explore, but that home is always the best place to be. The flower imagery in this poem is very pretty and is a good reason for returning when adventuring is done.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from rama devi
Nice rhymes here and medley of S, L, W and R sounds that convey the hushed serenity phonetically:
My pale blue room within these walls
is tranquil and serene.
Soft floral drapes shade morning light --
to me, it seems routine.
I enjoyed these two stanzas as well--fine imagery and phonetics--especially all the S sounds (the skiing line is super!) However, I recommend not using so many dashes where commas would do:
If only I could fly away
to worlds beyond the moon --
where I could play among the stars
and hear Sinatra croon.
Or sail upon a Viking ship --
flamenco dance in Spain --
ski down the slopes in Switzerland
and ride the midnight train.
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But,(no comma) if I traveled round the world
I love the closing note. So tender and sweet.
Excellent entry, my dear Janet.
Good luck
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Nice rhymes here and medley of S, L, W and R sounds that convey the hushed serenity phonetically:
My pale blue room within these walls
is tranquil and serene.
Soft floral drapes shade morning light --
to me, it seems routine.
I enjoyed these two stanzas as well--fine imagery and phonetics--especially all the S sounds (the skiing line is super!) However, I recommend not using so many dashes where commas would do:
If only I could fly away
to worlds beyond the moon --
where I could play among the stars
and hear Sinatra croon.
Or sail upon a Viking ship --
flamenco dance in Spain --
ski down the slopes in Switzerland
and ride the midnight train.
*
But,(no comma) if I traveled round the world
I love the closing note. So tender and sweet.
Excellent entry, my dear Janet.
Good luck
Love,
rd
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Thank you rd as always for your wonderful review and suggestions. I'm so pleased that you liked this one. It was a joy to write.
Blessings
Janet
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Comment from lyenochka
Lovely verses in perfect meter and rhyme scheme! Enjoyed the picture described of the purple irises and the inside of the home and the imaginative tour of the world. It's superlative statement that all those places mean less than being at home with the beloved.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Lovely verses in perfect meter and rhyme scheme! Enjoyed the picture described of the purple irises and the inside of the home and the imaginative tour of the world. It's superlative statement that all those places mean less than being at home with the beloved.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessing
Jane
Comment from Thal1959
This is all very well done, but if you don't mind me saying so (I take reviewing seriously) the sentiments of the verse are fine, but there is no indication of "love" until the very end. The rhyme and meter are excellent. I just don't know how well it might fare in the "love" poem contest. Of course, it could just be me. Good luck, though.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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This is all very well done, but if you don't mind me saying so (I take reviewing seriously) the sentiments of the verse are fine, but there is no indication of "love" until the very end. The rhyme and meter are excellent. I just don't know how well it might fare in the "love" poem contest. Of course, it could just be me. Good luck, though.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessing
Jane
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You're welcome, Jane.
Comment from Irish Rain
Absolutely. So very much we wish we could do, places to go, things we think we are missing...BUT....when it comes down to it...we have already what makes us happiest. This is a lovely entry!! Blessings...
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Absolutely. So very much we wish we could do, places to go, things we think we are missing...BUT....when it comes down to it...we have already what makes us happiest. This is a lovely entry!! Blessings...
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I always appreciate hearing from you my friend.
Blessing
Jane
Comment from susan18
This is lovely!
I like the way you bring the ending and the beginning together.
I was pleasantly surprised that was not yet another "flowery" poem about the beauty of nature.
Your words are unique and entwine fantasy with reality.
We all daydream, but in the end being with aloved one is best. You really captured that sentiment.
Great poem!
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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This is lovely!
I like the way you bring the ending and the beginning together.
I was pleasantly surprised that was not yet another "flowery" poem about the beauty of nature.
Your words are unique and entwine fantasy with reality.
We all daydream, but in the end being with aloved one is best. You really captured that sentiment.
Great poem!
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Thank you Susan for your honest and encouraging review. I greatly appreciate your comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Teri7
Janet, This is a very beautiful love poem for the contest you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the gorgeous picture of the purple Iris flower. Check out this one thing that may not be wrong:
flamenco dance in Spain
should that be famengo? of is it right the way you spelled it? wasn't sure and didn't want your pretty poem messed up! Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Janet, This is a very beautiful love poem for the contest you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the gorgeous picture of the purple Iris flower. Check out this one thing that may not be wrong:
flamenco dance in Spain
should that be famengo? of is it right the way you spelled it? wasn't sure and didn't want your pretty poem messed up! Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Thank you Teri for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I always get the bird and the dance mixed up. haha
My husband picked up on the spelling which I had wrong but this is correct for the dance. Thanks for checking.
Blessing
Jane
Comment from DR DIP
Beautifully written in ABCB rhyme scheme it flows so eloquently The accompanying image is perfect for your words. I love the way you write J thanks for sharing with us
dip
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Beautifully written in ABCB rhyme scheme it flows so eloquently The accompanying image is perfect for your words. I love the way you write J thanks for sharing with us
dip
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Thank you dip for your wonderful and encouraging review. I greatly appreciate your comments and those sparkling six stars
I didn't realize before that you live in Australia. My grandson, Nate, is living on the Gold Coast and plays soccer for the Coomera Colts. Their season is over and he will be coming home soon for a few months before returning to Queensland.
Small world after all.
Blessing
Janet
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Some of my absolute favourite colours mentioned here, this is truly beautiful and absolutely stunning and vivid. I like that it is slightly different from a traditional love poem, I enjoyed it so very much well done kind regards Meia xx
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Some of my absolute favourite colours mentioned here, this is truly beautiful and absolutely stunning and vivid. I like that it is slightly different from a traditional love poem, I enjoyed it so very much well done kind regards Meia xx
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Thank you Meia for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessing
Janet
