Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Those are really loaded words! It makes me wonder what is the poet talking about? Someone dear to the poet may face jail time and needs to make contact. Well done!

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017

Hi there;
could be jail or some other type of confinement. Thank you for reading and reviewing,

~patty~

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

HMMM, you left me wondering about his fate. I'm not so sure about this person. I did, however, enjoy reading this wonderful contest entry and wish you good luck.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2017

Hi Barbara;
Imagine the young, youthful offender. He has called home and left a message asking for bail - will they call back? Or will they leave him in jail for the night?

~patty~

Comment from His Grayness

Excellent

Very well done indeed, for this brief and restricted style of poetry. The photography is excellent and keeps the message very clear and simple as possible. I cannot offer anything to make this work any better and thank this author for a fine read! HIS GRAYNESS

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2017

Hi Vance;

thank you so much for reading this little work. I'm so appreciative of your kind words,

~patty~

reply by His Grayness on 02-Sep-2017

My treat Patty, always..from you Vance

Comment from BOO ghost

Excellent

Appreciate the explanations via the author notes. Yep,the words open up a can of worms for questions. Could mean something different for each person. Lets explore, what does these words mean to BOO? Pondering the notion... could mean that today is my last day on planet earth and I do not realize that a fracking meteor is inbound from space and will strike me before dusk commences. i realize the odds but people do win the lottery and look at their odds. Fate. How many times can you kill a ghost? God may call me to the promised land. Purgatory on earth is hell. BOO!

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2017

Hi again, Boo;
Fate would change this - especially the meteor part. Thank you so much for reading,

~patty~

reply by BOO ghost on 02-Sep-2017

May get the first gunfight out by tonight. You are in it. Don't miss your gunfight with top ten poets. Day one. It is a dandy. Will you live or die. lol!

Comment from Curly Girly

Excellent

Lune? A lune contest?
Huh, this guy sound like a Lunatic!
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Today's the last day,
Will he call?
Or is jail his fate?
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Leave him to his fate.
He's a jailbird!
This is a great entry. It hints at a big story in so few words.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017

Hi Nicole;
I'm so glad you enjoyed this poem. I was writing about an event that hasn't happened, but I fear. When/if I receive the call that my son is in jail for selling drugs to support his habit, will I bail him out?

A big question.

~patty~

Comment from Auto-Manic

Excellent

Hey Mustang, usually I can pick up on things if not by the emotion of the words, then intuitively, but I was left wondering about this one, it could fit a multitude of parameters, which is something I like, but didn't quite get the overall picture...but many came to mind. Ho ho!
Congrats Mustang.
AM

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2017

Hi AM;
this one is about 'the call' that can decide whether or not one will sit in jail over night. It could be the call from the bail bondsman or someone to bail you out.

~patty~

reply by Auto-Manic on 02-Sep-2017

Ahhhhh, Now it strikes a chord. I've got that call.
Thanks.
AM

Comment from smbau

Excellent

The poem creates the image of a lover giving her beloved ultimatum. Unknown whether he will call or not, one thing is for sure, he does not call, he seals his fate. In my description, I could not imagine a jail other than that of the heart in this poem.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2017

Hi there; thank you so much for the lovely review of this piece. I'm glad you were able to get so much out of the few words.

~patty~

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

Waiting for the jury to come back and telling of his fate is nerve-racking. Will he call or is he being taken off the prison? Time will tell. This is an excellent Lune contest entry, Patty. I wish you much luck with it! :) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2017

Hi Sandra;
thank you so much for the wonderful review. I appreciate your kind words and well wishes. I wonder if the call will ever come.

~patty~

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

Nicely done lune poem for the contest. I wish you luck in the contest. Have a blessed holiday weekend and do stay safe. .... Blessings for a great day. Patricia

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 Comment Written 02-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2017

Hi Patricia;
thank you so much for the lovely review. You, too, have a lovely weekend. I'm not doing anything more than hanging out and binge watching television.

~patty~

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written Lune poem. Syllable count is spot on 5-3-5. The topic is about waiting for a call while time is running out and the author wonders if jail is possibly his fate and that he won't call after all.

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 Comment Written 02-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2017

Hi Sandra;
thank you so much for reading and reviewing,

~patty~