Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

OH yes you got it dear friend and very descriptive at the same time. I can picture the insects like the moths to flame and then the captured. Very well done

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2017

Thank you Barb:)

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I enjoyed your lighthearted, 4-6-2 haiku. It is very visual and intensified by your use of sound--no picture is necessary. I also liked the flowing, cursive font. Smiles- Joan

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2017

Thank you for the kind review Joan:)

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Any insect who gets
too close to a spider nest
Is marked for death
There is no reprieve
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very easy read.

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2017

Thank you Charlie:)

reply by c_lucas on 30-Aug-2017

You're welcome, Tab. Charlie

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hi Tab,

I love to read the poems that you write. You are very good at writing different things. They are always wonderful to read. I might get a poem written today.

Kat

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2017

thank you Kat:) I look forward to reading it if you write one.

reply by MizKat on 30-Aug-2017

I hope I'll get it written. Thanks for saying you look forward to reading it.
Kat

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

This is awesome. It tells a story in haiku style. Well done! Good juxtaposition of concrete imagery and pitch perfect single-word satori line. Love it. Bravo! Good consonance of P and S-Z sounds too... (brilliant: sounds like buzzing)

Warmly, rd

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 Comment Written 30-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2017

Thank you for the kind review RD:)

reply by rama devi on 30-Aug-2017

:-)))

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Teresa,

I really like your haiku. Great imagery is created with your well chosen words.

Everything is done as required by the rules--the syllable count is good, the lines connect, the imagery is there as an observable moment in time. This is a great addition to the shared book.

Thanks for sharing. Jan

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 Comment Written 30-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2017

Thank you for the great review Jan:)