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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A resonating and thoughtful write and made me think if lost souls mindlessly and aimlessly wondering and looking for a place to rest, best wishes, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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A resonating and thoughtful write and made me think if lost souls mindlessly and aimlessly wondering and looking for a place to rest, best wishes, love Dolly x
Comment Written 31-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the excellent review and for your comments supporting this poem. It is a more romantic pastoral kind of poem, for me. The theme is really about the beauty of the individual within the beauty of the crowd. About the beauty of the present, within the beauty of the past and the future, the timelessness of life estory
Comment from c_lucas
The soul has many names
One being "The Higher Consciousness"
For those who see a higher meaning
The path waits for you to travel
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The human soul lives on many planes and can carry you far. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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The soul has many names
One being "The Higher Consciousness"
For those who see a higher meaning
The path waits for you to travel
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The human soul lives on many planes and can carry you far. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and for your wonderful comments supporting this poem. I am glad you enjoyed it so much. themes of the individual within the crowd, the past and the future within the present, are in this poem estory
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You're welcome.
Comment from jaded831
The first line to me says, the only limits we have are the ones we create, very profound. We are but one of many, yet we stand out from the crowd by what we accomplish. Your poem is to abstract, this is my interpretation of your poem. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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The first line to me says, the only limits we have are the ones we create, very profound. We are but one of many, yet we stand out from the crowd by what we accomplish. Your poem is to abstract, this is my interpretation of your poem. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Thanks for the excellent review and for your wonderful comments supporting this poem. I strive to be obtuse in my writing, so that the pieces are approachable from many angles, many perspectives, and can be interpreted in many different ways. I think truly great poems have this characteristic, so I am glad I am making headway in that regard. estory
Comment from frierajac
I especially like the first line. I can see s ar as I can dream. It makes the reader pause
as the concept upon which the rest of the poem hangs seems to be an idea that there is something miraculous in vision that just is.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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I especially like the first line. I can see s ar as I can dream. It makes the reader pause
as the concept upon which the rest of the poem hangs seems to be an idea that there is something miraculous in vision that just is.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the excellent review and for your wonderful comments supporting the poem. I liked that first line too. the poem is really about the beauty of the individual making up the beauty of the crowd, the past and the future glimpsed in the present, the timelessness of life estory
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Again estory:
You have wonderfully expressed your vision of each grass blade and then you so thoroughly explain your poem in the Author notes which makes it all so perfect.
I love the way you have written this poem and the lines below are so splendid to me:
A field where I am one among millions
In the blinking of an eye
Where I will be and what I once was
Stretching away under the endless sky
For as far as the eye can see
And the spirit can dream
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Again estory:
You have wonderfully expressed your vision of each grass blade and then you so thoroughly explain your poem in the Author notes which makes it all so perfect.
I love the way you have written this poem and the lines below are so splendid to me:
A field where I am one among millions
In the blinking of an eye
Where I will be and what I once was
Stretching away under the endless sky
For as far as the eye can see
And the spirit can dream
Comment Written 30-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and for your wonderful comments supporting this poem. I am glad you enjoyed it. This is a more opened up theme, the timelessness of life, the beauty of the individual making up the beauty of the crowd, the past and the future contained in the present. estory
Comment from rama devi
Loved this. The pensive, wistful intense depth of it, the flow, the feeling, the originality. Bravo.
I would have liked it if not all lines were capped, since there is so much enjambment.
The poem achieves the aims mentioned in your notes/ I love it for the feeling of unity in diversity and the grass metaphot is wonderful. the triptych style is superb too.
Alliterations are great as well.
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I can see for as far as I can dream
Across fields of light and rain
Great opening lines!!
Love this too:
Where I will be and what I once was
Stretching away under the endless sky
For as far as the eye can see
And the spirit can dream
I like the mirror effect in the imagery and echoing repetition style. Musical, too.
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Each face, its own day dream
daydream is one word
Read this thrice.
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Loved this. The pensive, wistful intense depth of it, the flow, the feeling, the originality. Bravo.
I would have liked it if not all lines were capped, since there is so much enjambment.
The poem achieves the aims mentioned in your notes/ I love it for the feeling of unity in diversity and the grass metaphot is wonderful. the triptych style is superb too.
Alliterations are great as well.
NOTES
I can see for as far as I can dream
Across fields of light and rain
Great opening lines!!
Love this too:
Where I will be and what I once was
Stretching away under the endless sky
For as far as the eye can see
And the spirit can dream
I like the mirror effect in the imagery and echoing repetition style. Musical, too.
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Each face, its own day dream
daydream is one word
Read this thrice.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 30-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Thanks again for this six star review and your amazing comments supporting this poem much appreciated estory
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:-)))))
Comment from nbonner
What a lovely poem and great message. We should all find the higher power (spirit) in all of us and life would be so much simpler, less stress. The metaphors and imagery used were excellent. Thank you for sharing, N.B
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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What a lovely poem and great message. We should all find the higher power (spirit) in all of us and life would be so much simpler, less stress. The metaphors and imagery used were excellent. Thank you for sharing, N.B
Comment Written 30-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Thanks for the excellent review and your wonderful comments supporting this poem. glad you enjoyed it. it was fun to write estory
