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Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Section 6 - Part 1: Sponge"Cody's worst nightmare from Hell becomes reality!
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Comment from Asem.inspirations
Well Brett, I'm not one to appreciate any child learning how to shoot a gun but I guess I do realize the necessity of Cody learning how to protect himself from his abuser. After all his father may very well want to torture him and end his life. I know that most cases men like Earl will just keep coming until they cannot come anymore.
Okay I will be looking to see what happens next.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2017
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Well Brett, I'm not one to appreciate any child learning how to shoot a gun but I guess I do realize the necessity of Cody learning how to protect himself from his abuser. After all his father may very well want to torture him and end his life. I know that most cases men like Earl will just keep coming until they cannot come anymore.
Okay I will be looking to see what happens next.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of Cody's story.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from Abby Wilson-hand
YOU HAVE ONE AMAZING STORY HERE
I'M NOT A TORY READER I LOVE POETRY
BUT FOR SOME REASON I'M DRAWN TO YOUR
STORY AND I LOVE IT YOU SHOULD MAKE IT A BOOK ITS
SPETACULAR
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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YOU HAVE ONE AMAZING STORY HERE
I'M NOT A TORY READER I LOVE POETRY
BUT FOR SOME REASON I'M DRAWN TO YOUR
STORY AND I LOVE IT YOU SHOULD MAKE IT A BOOK ITS
SPETACULAR
Comment Written 31-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of Cody's story.
Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review.
Would really like to make a book out of his story, perhaps even find a publisher for it. That would be so good!
Comment from Rasmine
Brett,
Good writing. I like this chapter. If children knew about guns and respected them -- I think that is important.
You have a great weekend.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Brett,
Good writing. I like this chapter. If children knew about guns and respected them -- I think that is important.
You have a great weekend.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of Cody's story.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from emptypage
Cody did not say a word. Like a sponge, he soaked up every word his Dad reiterated.---He didn't "reiterate" it, he "iterated." Reiterated means he said it twice.
Crap. I hate the idea of Cody killing his biological father. That traumatizes any kid. I've seen in, in cases of accidents with high school kids, in a case where a boy shot his little sister. Even doing it as "an expert," which takes more than all day and all night, killing someone is traumatic. Not just for kids, either.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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Cody did not say a word. Like a sponge, he soaked up every word his Dad reiterated.---He didn't "reiterate" it, he "iterated." Reiterated means he said it twice.
Crap. I hate the idea of Cody killing his biological father. That traumatizes any kid. I've seen in, in cases of accidents with high school kids, in a case where a boy shot his little sister. Even doing it as "an expert," which takes more than all day and all night, killing someone is traumatic. Not just for kids, either.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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Don't jump the gun with my writing. You never know what the end result will be.
Perhaps Cody will get killed attempting to end his nightmare? (Then, many FanStorians would lynch me! So, perhaps I should not go there either? Hummm! Who knows?)
Comment from Sankey
Well done. I think the only gun I ever fired might have been an air gun or pee shooter hehe. BB gun maybe. This was a great chapter. Have a look at the saga of four chapters on Louise's adventure in Hospital.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Well done. I think the only gun I ever fired might have been an air gun or pee shooter hehe. BB gun maybe. This was a great chapter. Have a look at the saga of four chapters on Louise's adventure in Hospital.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of Cody's story.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Very well done as always and you did it with a lesson for your readers as well as entertaining us with an exceptional piece to the story
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Very well done as always and you did it with a lesson for your readers as well as entertaining us with an exceptional piece to the story
Comment Written 30-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of Cody's story.
Always, as I have said so many times before, appreciate your comments, support, and reviews.
Comment from royowen
After Cody's unfortunate incident with a supposed encounter with a missed rock, and the hurler perhaps being Earl Anthony Schroder. Cody receives a lesson in handling and shooting a pistol in the firing range. Cody is very pleased with himself, and pleased he has a dad who cares! Well done, no nits, and good scribing. Brett, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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After Cody's unfortunate incident with a supposed encounter with a missed rock, and the hurler perhaps being Earl Anthony Schroder. Cody receives a lesson in handling and shooting a pistol in the firing range. Cody is very pleased with himself, and pleased he has a dad who cares! Well done, no nits, and good scribing. Brett, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 30-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of Cody's story.
Appreciate your insights, comments, support, and the review.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
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Well done, Brett,
Comment from bookishfabler
Awesome.
"First, and foremost, Little Man," the Sheriff began, ( call my little dogs little man a lot of the time.)
"Relax your hand, son. Don't be afraid of it," he said, "always hold a gun like you would fine china."
(Isn't this two sentences so it would end with a period after "said, and Start with a capital at Always.)
hugs Heidi
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Awesome.
"First, and foremost, Little Man," the Sheriff began, ( call my little dogs little man a lot of the time.)
"Relax your hand, son. Don't be afraid of it," he said, "always hold a gun like you would fine china."
(Isn't this two sentences so it would end with a period after "said, and Start with a capital at Always.)
hugs Heidi
Comment Written 30-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of Cody's story.
Appreciate your comments and support, as well as the review.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brett,
Again you've written another part of your book which is always nice to read. It's
also fun to find out that Cody is learning a lot from his dad. He keeps teaching the things he wants Cody to learn. I'll be looking forward to what you'll write
next.
Kat
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Hi Brett,
Again you've written another part of your book which is always nice to read. It's
also fun to find out that Cody is learning a lot from his dad. He keeps teaching the things he wants Cody to learn. I'll be looking forward to what you'll write
next.
Kat
Comment Written 30-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of Cody's story.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
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I will always like reading about Cody. So I'll continue to do so. Kat
Comment from apky
I'm leasrning how to handle a gun here right alongside Cody.
Of course I have my own personal reservations about teaching
children this sort of "craftsmanship" but then as they say:
When in Rome, do as the Romans."
The writing was excellent and the story still enjoyable.
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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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I'm leasrning how to handle a gun here right alongside Cody.
Of course I have my own personal reservations about teaching
children this sort of "craftsmanship" but then as they say:
When in Rome, do as the Romans."
The writing was excellent and the story still enjoyable.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of Cody's story.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
