My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 57 "Out from Under"a collection of my poetry
44 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Sheesh, it sounds serious, but I think you have a constitution similar to my wife, she once had, (still... to a degree) of agoraphobia, she was terrified of doing even the shopping, as she is a teacher by profession, it was a difficult time, but treated it as a passing faze, and largely overcame it, by sheer strength of character, (plus faith) as you are displaying here Patty. Friends can help, to degree...! Well done, great theme, well written, and will help others too! Great poetic technique and rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy (I pray for others onsite, consider yours done!)
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2017
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Sheesh, it sounds serious, but I think you have a constitution similar to my wife, she once had, (still... to a degree) of agoraphobia, she was terrified of doing even the shopping, as she is a teacher by profession, it was a difficult time, but treated it as a passing faze, and largely overcame it, by sheer strength of character, (plus faith) as you are displaying here Patty. Friends can help, to degree...! Well done, great theme, well written, and will help others too! Great poetic technique and rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy (I pray for others onsite, consider yours done!)
Comment Written 29-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2017
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Hi Roy;
thank you so much for your wonderful review and well wishes. I should be better in about a week,
~patty~
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Good job
Comment from frierajac
It seems nearly like a prayer of a writer with writer's block. It also seems like you are confronting the problem by confronting it directly. And also like you may be lost in the maze of the art illustration so to express yourself.
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It seems nearly like a prayer of a writer with writer's block. It also seems like you are confronting the problem by confronting it directly. And also like you may be lost in the maze of the art illustration so to express yourself.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2017
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Hi there;
thank you so much for your comments and nice thoughts,
~patty~
Comment from pipersfancy
This compelling piece rings with the truth of authenticity - it describes my own personal journey through life with recurring bouts of depression. Your final line, "Just killing time." captures perfectly the overall feeling at this point in my life. The huge swings between highs and lows have mediated somewhat... but the lows, which can last for quite a while, feel so melancholy... no energy... just waiting and killing time until the fog lifts again.
But the bright spot (and there is one) is having come to the knowledge that life moves like the tides... ever changing, the ebb and flow continues. The light always returns.
Thank you for such an insightful poem, Patty.
pf
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This compelling piece rings with the truth of authenticity - it describes my own personal journey through life with recurring bouts of depression. Your final line, "Just killing time." captures perfectly the overall feeling at this point in my life. The huge swings between highs and lows have mediated somewhat... but the lows, which can last for quite a while, feel so melancholy... no energy... just waiting and killing time until the fog lifts again.
But the bright spot (and there is one) is having come to the knowledge that life moves like the tides... ever changing, the ebb and flow continues. The light always returns.
Thank you for such an insightful poem, Patty.
pf
Comment Written 29-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2017
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Hi pf;
I'm hanging in there - I should come into the light completely soon,
~patty~
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. We all have our depressing and dark days. To be able to get out of the darkness without major medication is a plus point. Most people under medication seem not to get out of their bad situation.
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A very well-written poem. We all have our depressing and dark days. To be able to get out of the darkness without major medication is a plus point. Most people under medication seem not to get out of their bad situation.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2017
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Hi Sandra;
thank you for the lovely review,
~patty~
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend I hope this is not biographical and that you are indeed ok depression is something that can take hold of anybody you describe it well regards Jill
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Hello my friend I hope this is not biographical and that you are indeed ok depression is something that can take hold of anybody you describe it well regards Jill
Comment Written 29-Aug-2017
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Hi Jill;
I am in the tunnel, but I'm working my way towards the light,
~patty~
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glad to hear your get there take care my friend Jill
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Patty,
Hopefully this isn't about you. If it is, then be careful. Your lines flow smoothly with a great message. The art supports your well-chosen words, too.
My only concern is labeling this free verse--too much patterned rhymes for that. Maybe just call it rhyming quatrains. But that isn't important if this is actually about you. Take care. Jan
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Patty,
Hopefully this isn't about you. If it is, then be careful. Your lines flow smoothly with a great message. The art supports your well-chosen words, too.
My only concern is labeling this free verse--too much patterned rhymes for that. Maybe just call it rhyming quatrains. But that isn't important if this is actually about you. Take care. Jan
Comment Written 29-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2017
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Hi Jan;
thank you so much for your review; I changed this to rhyming quatrains. Thank you for pointing that out,
~patty~
Comment from lyenochka
Great use of the artwork to show what it feels like to be in the downward spirals of depression. I like that there is a positive element of waiting to get out of it and using even this struggle to write and express. Hope it's not really happening but if it is, hoping you're out of that tunnel now.
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Great use of the artwork to show what it feels like to be in the downward spirals of depression. I like that there is a positive element of waiting to get out of it and using even this struggle to write and express. Hope it's not really happening but if it is, hoping you're out of that tunnel now.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2017
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Hi there;
nope - I'm still in the tunnel. But, I can see the light,
~patty~
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You can do it! Sending hugs and prayers.
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thank you so much
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Hey Patty
Hope this is just artistic selection rather than biographical but one sure thing with wonderful writing like this the blue skies will soon be shining......if all else fails go and give those lovely pets of yours a hug.
Mitchell
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Hey Patty
Hope this is just artistic selection rather than biographical but one sure thing with wonderful writing like this the blue skies will soon be shining......if all else fails go and give those lovely pets of yours a hug.
Mitchell
Comment Written 29-Aug-2017
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Hi Mitchell;
I am going through a bit of a rough patch, but I should be better soon. Thank you for your lovely comments,
~patty~
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
It does pass even though it seems like it takes forever until we want to run and play so to speak.
Love the flow and the promise of it getting better
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It does pass even though it seems like it takes forever until we want to run and play so to speak.
Love the flow and the promise of it getting better
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2017
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Hi Barb;
thank you so much for your review,
~patty~
Comment from robina1978
Lovely artwork that complements your poem very well. Sorry you feel depressed, I had an acquaintance that gets depressed for a half year. You write about the disablement it gives you. But you wrote this with rhyme.
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Lovely artwork that complements your poem very well. Sorry you feel depressed, I had an acquaintance that gets depressed for a half year. You write about the disablement it gives you. But you wrote this with rhyme.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2017
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Hi there;
thank you so much for your lovely comments,
~patty~
