Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very well written and good poem you have penned for the picture this contest. You used very good descriptive wording that goes with the picture this picture. Best wishes in the contest. Teri

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

thank you for such a lovely review of this little 'Picture This' poem. I oftentimes have difficulty writing from the inspiration of a picture, but this one seemed to come out alright,

~patty~

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

Patty, this is a nice take on the picture this challenge. Your rhyming is quite good and does not feel forced. May your week be blessed with wonderful things, Patricia

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

thank you for such a lovely review of this little 'Picture This' poem. I oftentimes have difficulty writing from the inspiration of a picture, but this one seemed to come out alright,

~patty~

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

wow what a different piece of writing, I don't remember this style and it plays very well into the subject and the way you wrote about the birthing and the little life

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

thank you for such a lovely review of this little 'Picture This' poem. I oftentimes have difficulty writing from the inspiration of a picture, but this one seemed to come out alright,

~patty~

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

What a fun poem, Patty! That's the brief life of a butterfly. Although there are some that must live longer as they migrate to Mexico. I'm sure each variety varies in lifespan.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

thank you for such a lovely review of this little 'Picture This' poem. I oftentimes have difficulty writing from the inspiration of a picture, but this one seemed to come out alright,

~patty~

Comment from Mitchell Brontė

Excellent

Well this just wonderful Patty, I'm a big fan of the bookend monorhyme and you have done a fantastic job describing the birth of a butterfly, the imagery is superb.
Loved it
Mitchell

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017

Hi Mitchell;
thank you so much for the wonderful review,

~patty~

Comment from Heather Knight

Excellent

I like your bookend monorhyme. I think Marilyn created a very pretty kind of poem, I never get tired of these ones.
Can you explain the last lines to me? It must be my ignorance of biology, but I'm not sure I get them, even though I researched a bit before writing mine today.
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017

Hi Maria; thank you for your review.

The butterfly needs to find a mate before they die, but the part about the pain was an abstract thought about death.

Hope this helps clear it up,

~patty~

reply by Heather Knight on 28-Aug-2017

Yes, it does. Thanks for explaining.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

From a Caterpillar to a butterfly with a short life span. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017

Hi Charlie;
thank you so much for the wonderful review,

~patty~

reply by c_lucas on 28-Aug-2017

You're welcome, Patti. Charlie

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

It is hard to think that butterflies only live such a short time. I don't know how that is possible to do but there is much I don't understand about God's world:)

Great picture it poem!

teresa

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 Comment Written 28-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017

Hi Teresa;
thank you so much for your time to read and review,

~patty~