Comment from Asem.inspirations

Excellent

Good morning Patty:

This is a pretty thorough poem about the life of a butterfly. You have even included information that I did not know about the butterfly. I must have forgotten but I will google "the life of a butterfly" later on. I've seen this photo for the picture this contest and yours is very nicely done.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2017

Hi Tier;
thanks for reading my poem about the butterfly. I guess not ALL butterflies only live for twenty-four hours, but some do.

I felt pretty good in the creation of this poem, I actually enjoyed writing it,

~patty~

Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

What a beautiful butterfly. I read somewhere that every creature has roughly the same amount of heartbeats in its lifetime. Time is realative. A day is a lot longer to butterflies than it is to us. I wouldn't mind spending the day in the field watching him.

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

thank you for such a lovely review of this little 'Picture This' poem. I oftentimes have difficulty writing from the inspiration of a picture, but this one seemed to come out alright,

~patty~

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

What a beautiful wide world is this,
To spend just twenty-four hours of pure bliss.

Nature is indeed amazing - even beautiful, but often cruel - particularly in this case - such a short life after all the effort.

well Penned, Patty.


Margaret

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

thank you for such a lovely review of this little 'Picture This' poem. I oftentimes have difficulty writing from the inspiration of a picture, but this one seemed to come out alright,

~patty~

Comment from Halfree

Average

observation....first two line and last two lines seem to get in the way of lines 3-6.
Lines 3-6, very good, nice poem.
I may be full of it, but did like the poem in the form I just stated.


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 Comment Written 29-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2017

Comment from apky

Excellent

Just the mention of a 4-syllable line monorhyme and an 11-syllable line monorhyme had my head wooshing with lack of knowledge. You poets simply do my head in.

But I loved the poem of its own, could see the stages of the metamorphosis, from that cylindrical pupa to the beautifully many-coloured butterfly, flexing its wings to be off and find the mate.

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

thank you for such a lovely review of this little 'Picture This' poem. I oftentimes have difficulty writing from the inspiration of a picture, but this one seemed to come out alright,

~patty~

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Hello my friend this is well written and reads well the butterfly has so much beauty and also so much to achieve in its short life well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

thank you for such a lovely review of this little 'Picture This' poem. I oftentimes have difficulty writing from the inspiration of a picture, but this one seemed to come out alright,

~patty~

Comment from rtobaygo

Excellent

Good morning, Patty

Your description of a butterfly emerging was spot on. You captured the innocence of the moment. I've had the good fortune to witnesses this a few times.

Of these two lines in the last stanza, it's the first line I don't understand:

Pain like a knife,
Look for a wife.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

Hi Ray;
I kept thinking those last two lines should be switched; he needs to find a wife, and then he dies - does it hurt? I'm not sure.

~patty~

Comment from Bucketlist

Excellent

How true strife begins, and a reminder how short and fragile life can be for us too. It is an
Interesting style of poetry. I liked reading your version of the picture, it made. Me grateful for living.
Hugs Trisha

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

thank you for such a lovely review of this little 'Picture This' poem. I oftentimes have difficulty writing from the inspiration of a picture, but this one seemed to come out alright,

~patty~

reply by Bucketlist on 31-Aug-2017

Certainly did and you are welcome

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I liked the bookend style Marilyn created. Your take on the picture this challenge, was not only excellent but educational too. Well done, it was a pleasure to read. :) Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

thank you for such a lovely review of this little 'Picture This' poem. I oftentimes have difficulty writing from the inspiration of a picture, but this one seemed to come out alright,

~patty~

Comment from Mary Wakeford

Excellent

We just showy s weekend in Prescott (Northern Arizona), and the cecadas were singing so loud it was deafening. They are in the ground 17 years, then finally come to the surface, shed their skin, mate, and fur within 24 hours. How fooooooking depressing is that?

Reading this poem so close after that existence gives me great sympathy for these little creatures.

Very effective poem, that also aligned somewhat with a downtrodden child, in a way.

Well done!

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017

thank you for such a lovely review of this little 'Picture This' poem. I oftentimes have difficulty writing from the inspiration of a picture, but this one seemed to come out alright,

~patty~