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Comment from poetsteve15
Now that I like. It is funny, the picture goes with the writing. Not sure if that is true haiku or not I through they were be 5 7 5 but either way I like this one lot better. GB
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
Now that I like. It is funny, the picture goes with the writing. Not sure if that is true haiku or not I through they were be 5 7 5 but either way I like this one lot better. GB
Comment Written 31-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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Hi, Steve
Yes, it is haiku even though it's not the norm here at Fanstory. The 5-7-5 form is more of a teaching tool to get folks started. It's a good way to learn the basics and get the idea of how the Japanese write them. Actually they can be in four lines or even one. BUT, yes, the norm is three lines and the key is SHORT, using as few words as possible. So, really, less than 5-7-5 is the goal. If you go to the Challenges Forum, there's a haiku club. Lots of members and there's a weekly challenge, that's what this piece is. Some real experts there as well as beginners. But everyone is happy to pass on information and there's a LOT to talk about with haiku, way more than I ever dreamed of that's for sure. Anyway, thanks kindly. mike
Comment from BOO ghost
Haiku Club Challenges, Book II. OK. This is on insects. he --he. Clever, use the Greyhound for mobilization. They smart fleas. Be back shortly with another review. Two line haiku. Not a fan of confound it fleas! Got cats, hopefully they not got fleabite tabefactions. BOO's castle quarantined because of fleas with black plague. he --he. BOO-tastic!
Haiku Club Challenges, Book II. OK. This is on insects. he --he. Clever, use the Greyhound for mobilization. They smart fleas. Be back shortly with another review. Two line haiku. Not a fan of confound it fleas! Got cats, hopefully they not got fleabite tabefactions. BOO's castle quarantined because of fleas with black plague. he --he. BOO-tastic!
Comment Written 27-Aug-2017
Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, Mav. This is adorable and that Greyhound doggie definitely looks like he is carrying his fleas with great speed and in flight too! Some genius marketer should start Greyhound Airlines. Hmmm, maybe not. lol.
Excellent addition to your group's Haiku book!
Ange
Ha, Mav. This is adorable and that Greyhound doggie definitely looks like he is carrying his fleas with great speed and in flight too! Some genius marketer should start Greyhound Airlines. Hmmm, maybe not. lol.
Excellent addition to your group's Haiku book!
Ange
Comment Written 26-Aug-2017
Comment from Poetic Friend
Wow, what a play on words in that last line! This is very, very clever. This poem can interpreted in multiple ways. It could be literally "fleas" on the greyhound breed or metaphorically speaking, the "fleas" could symbolize people who take the Greyhound bus.
It is unbelievable that you managed to speak volumes with minimal syllables.
Good luck in the contest.
Wow, what a play on words in that last line! This is very, very clever. This poem can interpreted in multiple ways. It could be literally "fleas" on the greyhound breed or metaphorically speaking, the "fleas" could symbolize people who take the Greyhound bus.
It is unbelievable that you managed to speak volumes with minimal syllables.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2017
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
Lol, this was a very cute and clever insect Haiku, Michael. Well done.
"fleas use Greyhound". That's hilarious. ~Kerry
Lol, this was a very cute and clever insect Haiku, Michael. Well done.
"fleas use Greyhound". That's hilarious. ~Kerry
Comment Written 26-Aug-2017