Poetry Potlatch Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Dedication"Practice and Topic pieces
13 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
Kim,
I, too, adore wind chimes! I used to have several hanging outside my back door - but then we tore the old covered deck off and replaced it with a full roofed model and -- no more wind chimes. --sigh-- Maybe... I could still find them and put them up!
Thanks - this was lovely and very enjoyable!
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Kim,
I, too, adore wind chimes! I used to have several hanging outside my back door - but then we tore the old covered deck off and replaced it with a full roofed model and -- no more wind chimes. --sigh-- Maybe... I could still find them and put them up!
Thanks - this was lovely and very enjoyable!
Comment Written 25-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Hi Robyn,
Thanks for the wonderful comments. I'm so happy that you enjoyed this one, I'm still warming up to this form lol
Kim
Comment from honeytree
Really love the art work
for these words written.
When we write our poems
stories or a message
can be something we can be
proud as the words would be
written by the writer.
Honey tree
I have no six left.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Really love the art work
for these words written.
When we write our poems
stories or a message
can be something we can be
proud as the words would be
written by the writer.
Honey tree
I have no six left.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Hi Annie,
A virtual six is always a gift from you. Thank you so much!
Kim
Comment from Pantygynt
There seem to be as many different interpretations of the rules as there are poets attempting this form. This one attempts to hang on to more of them than most and could well prove the definitive form. I hope so because this works for me and is cleverly contrived.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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There seem to be as many different interpretations of the rules as there are poets attempting this form. This one attempts to hang on to more of them than most and could well prove the definitive form. I hope so because this works for me and is cleverly contrived.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Hi Jim,
I hope so, too! lol I don't know how else to interpret what has been asked for in this style, but I think there are too many repeats. Perhaps if the first stanza wasn't repeated in the last stanza I'd like it more? I appreciate your comments and vote of confidence!
Kim
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Well done Kim with the Cantena Rondo and a great choice of topic - the poet;s inspiration coming amongst the tinkle of the wind chimes. A lovely read Kim
cheers.
valda
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Well done Kim with the Cantena Rondo and a great choice of topic - the poet;s inspiration coming amongst the tinkle of the wind chimes. A lovely read Kim
cheers.
valda
Comment Written 25-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Hi Valda,
I'm happy that you enjoyed this one. You gave us quite a challenge with wind chimes, fear, and breathless. You are doing an awesome job facilitating this month! Thanks for the challenges!
Kim
Comment from rama devi
Hi, dear Kim. Nice work!
Standing ovation for the eloquent lines and the way the poem SOUND LIKE WIND-CHIMES! Loved reading it aloud. Great rhymes. Great flow.
NOTES:
Favorite stanza and rhyme:
Engaged in artful eloquence --
left breathless by exposition
and an eager disposition.
Engaged in artful eloquence.
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poet/nature reunited.
Left breathless by exposition.
Suggestion enjambment here:
poet/nature reunited,
left breathless by exposition.
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the poet embraced her rhymes;(,)
as words inspired and excited.
Enjoyed this. Nice presentation too.
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Hi, dear Kim. Nice work!
Standing ovation for the eloquent lines and the way the poem SOUND LIKE WIND-CHIMES! Loved reading it aloud. Great rhymes. Great flow.
NOTES:
Favorite stanza and rhyme:
Engaged in artful eloquence --
left breathless by exposition
and an eager disposition.
Engaged in artful eloquence.
*
poet/nature reunited.
Left breathless by exposition.
Suggestion enjambment here:
poet/nature reunited,
left breathless by exposition.
*
the poet embraced her rhymes;(,)
as words inspired and excited.
Enjoyed this. Nice presentation too.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 25-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Hi rd,
It is always wonderful to hear from you and I am thrilled that you enjoyed this piece. I wasn't sure about all the repetitions on this style, but your review is making me like this one more and more. I made the edits you suggested and always appreciate your excellent advice.
*hugs*
Kim
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:-)))))) *hugs*
Comment from lyenochka
I like the way you used this form. I find the form extremely repetitive so it's hard to capitalize on the repetition without it becoming overwhelming. But I feel that there's a progress made from the first stanza as the poet thinks and reflects and then the middle stanzas show us how by reading and learning and so that by the time the last one is repeated, I feel the transition from ethereal inspiration that materializes into written word. Great job!
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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I like the way you used this form. I find the form extremely repetitive so it's hard to capitalize on the repetition without it becoming overwhelming. But I feel that there's a progress made from the first stanza as the poet thinks and reflects and then the middle stanzas show us how by reading and learning and so that by the time the last one is repeated, I feel the transition from ethereal inspiration that materializes into written word. Great job!
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Hi Helen,
I find this form a bit too repetitive, too. It was probably the biggest challenge we've undertaken this month in Poetry Potlatch. I'm happy that you enjoyed the progression and found this to be a pleasing piece. Thanks for the awesome comments!
Kim
Comment from CD Richards
I believe you met all the requirements of the prompt, Kim. Also, you produced an enjoyable examination of the process the poet goes through to apply their craft. I didn't even see any "false rhymes" to pick you up on ;-) Well done with this.
Craig
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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I believe you met all the requirements of the prompt, Kim. Also, you produced an enjoyable examination of the process the poet goes through to apply their craft. I didn't even see any "false rhymes" to pick you up on ;-) Well done with this.
Craig
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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Hi Craig,
Sorry to be so far behind in replies. I've been busy trying to beat the frost here. With any luck we'll get to catch up soon!
Kim
Comment from sunnilicious
That's a gorgeous wind chime. It looks like those doorway curtains, popular in the 1970's. Wonderful poem. Well thought out and clearly written. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Nice work :)
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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That's a gorgeous wind chime. It looks like those doorway curtains, popular in the 1970's. Wonderful poem. Well thought out and clearly written. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Nice work :)
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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Thanks, Sunni! Sorry to be so far behind in replies. I've been busy with the garden harvest.
Kim
Comment from nbonner
Hopefully I was understanding it right, but what I got out of this poem is a poet who was lost and trying to find their way back to the 'pen and the page'. I liked. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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Hopefully I was understanding it right, but what I got out of this poem is a poet who was lost and trying to find their way back to the 'pen and the page'. I liked. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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Hi nbonner,
Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate your comments.
Kim
Comment from Sasha
I especially enjoyed this one. I do love poems with repeating lines and this one was superb. Marvelous rhythm, excellent rhyme and your ability to use the specifically chosen words. This is a wonderful Cantena Rondo and worthy of 6 stars, but as always, I am out when I really need one.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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I especially enjoyed this one. I do love poems with repeating lines and this one was superb. Marvelous rhythm, excellent rhyme and your ability to use the specifically chosen words. This is a wonderful Cantena Rondo and worthy of 6 stars, but as always, I am out when I really need one.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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Hi Sasha!
A virtual six is always a wonderful gift! Thank you for the lovely comments! I appreciate you taking the time to read and review.
Kim
