Playground
Grass, carpet of life5 total reviews
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading your 5-7-5 poem "Playground". You followed all the rules for this genre and you chose a beautiful photo.
All the best in the contest.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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I enjoyed reading your 5-7-5 poem "Playground". You followed all the rules for this genre and you chose a beautiful photo.
All the best in the contest.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the read and the comments.
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
Comment from rspoet
This is a very fine 5-7-5 poem and entry for the contest
with excellent imagery that satisfies the theme of grass
Good use of alliteration and an excellent picture to match
Nicely done
Good luck in the contest
RS
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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This is a very fine 5-7-5 poem and entry for the contest
with excellent imagery that satisfies the theme of grass
Good use of alliteration and an excellent picture to match
Nicely done
Good luck in the contest
RS
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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Thank you for your read and the comments.
Comment from nbonner
Definitely a Haiku poem with all the qualifications. I love that you wrote about nature. Nature is so mysterious and heaven all in one. Thank you for sharing and best wishes in the contest
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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Definitely a Haiku poem with all the qualifications. I love that you wrote about nature. Nature is so mysterious and heaven all in one. Thank you for sharing and best wishes in the contest
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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Thanks for the read and the encouraging words.
Comment from tfawcus
A serene scene indeed - just as long as there are no dogs around! Bunnies and squirrels have a way of winning our hearts, though here in Australia, rabbits are a real pest - and I know quite a few people who regard grey squirrels as tree rats - especially in areas where they have displaced the red squirrels. Squirrel Nutkin - now there's a real sweetie!
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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A serene scene indeed - just as long as there are no dogs around! Bunnies and squirrels have a way of winning our hearts, though here in Australia, rabbits are a real pest - and I know quite a few people who regard grey squirrels as tree rats - especially in areas where they have displaced the red squirrels. Squirrel Nutkin - now there's a real sweetie!
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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Serenity, I guess is in the eye of the beholder. Over here, especially for gardeners, rabbits can be a problem, but those little bunnies are really cute. Thanks for the read and the comments.
Comment from rama devi
Nice 5-7-5. Love the closing satori-like line. Nature's scheme indeed. Love seeing animals cavorting. if only humans would do more of that! Since the first two lines are interconnected, I recommend not capping line two:
Amid blades of green
bunnies and squirrels cavort
Serenity's scheme
Fins alliteration & consonance of S plus alliteration of B and consonance of C-Q, R, D and L sounds.
Sounds good read aloud.
Warmly,
r d
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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Nice 5-7-5. Love the closing satori-like line. Nature's scheme indeed. Love seeing animals cavorting. if only humans would do more of that! Since the first two lines are interconnected, I recommend not capping line two:
Amid blades of green
bunnies and squirrels cavort
Serenity's scheme
Fins alliteration & consonance of S plus alliteration of B and consonance of C-Q, R, D and L sounds.
Sounds good read aloud.
Warmly,
r d
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2017
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Dear r d, Thanks for the suggestion and the read. I have edited.
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:-)))
