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Dr. Howler's Nightmares

Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Nineteenth Floor"
A collection of most unusual bedtime stories

14 total reviews 
Comment from Natali Holden
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As I read this, I imagined a creepy, old man telling it. I heard his voice. Dr. Howler is an interesting man. Why would this story be appropriate for "little kiddies"? Especially at bedtime? Cool story though. "Sleep tight my little kiddies."
Natali ð???

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
    As I said, you may have a slightly different opinion than the good Doctor does as to the appropriateness of his Nightmars being told to "little kiddies". That is part of what he believes makes them much more frightening to them.

    Glad you enjoyed this Nightmare.

    Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review.
Comment from Ulla
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Well, well, a very good little tale with its surprise ending. I found one little thing:
began it's ascent = its ascent. I enjoyed the reading. All the best. Ulla:)

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
    Glad you enjoyed this Nightmare.

    Appreciate the review and the catch.
Comment from emptypage
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Okay...who was the vampire? Tommy or the evil man? I'm not clear. The reflexive pronouns in the last paragraph don't explain.

Creepy, good entry. Peace.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
    Tommy left the elevator, and the man was dead.

    Appreciate you taking the time to read this Nightmare and to write a review.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
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Hi Brett. You certainly get my vote on this little gem. I love Doctor Howler and his nightmares! I like quick tight stories that creep me out and excite me too. That's what this precious did for me today. Thanks! xoxo deborah

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
    Glad you enjoyed this Nightmare.

    Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review.
Comment from BOO ghost
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Hate elevators. They do get stuck. BOO was stuck in an elevator for 15 minutes of hell. Will float next time to next floor like ghosts do. BOO's favorite paragraph: He pushed the button for the nineteenth floor. The light illuminated in amber as the elevator door creaked closed and the car began it's ascent. Tommy Martin was going to visit his invalid grandmother. BOO-tastic!

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
    Glad you enjoyed this Nightmare.

    Don't you just not like it when an elevator gets stuck?

    That can be the real nightmare.

    Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from LaRosa
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Well, yeah, I guess it is a nightmare. Too much for my blood.

But, the only suggestion I have is that you should put 'thoughts' in italics. To do so, use the Advanced Edit option on the page you enter your story. Holding down the right button of your mouse, drag it over the words desired. This will highlight them. Click on the italics option.

Of course, you probably already know how to 'highlight' but...just to be sure...
Just don't come haunt me now, 'k?

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2017
    Glad you enjoyed this Nightmare.

    Appreciate your comments, support, and the review.
Comment from bookishfabler
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What a good boy Tommy is. I loved it. Not complicated, not for children, of courses who's to say, I grew up on witches eating small children, and wolves slaying grandmothers and three pigs. Great job.
hugs Heidi

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
    Glad you enjoyed this Nightmare.

    Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review.
Comment from giraffmang
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Hi Brett,

A good taut little piece.

the car began it's ascent - its ascent.

A tall, dark-haired, stranger - don't think you need the second comma here.

I like the gradual descriptions as the story progressed, more organic rather than a big info-drop.

There's a certain ambiguity to the last paragraph that is very pleasing.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
    Giraff,

    glad you enjoyed this little Nightmare.

    Appreciate the catches as well.

Comment from MizKat
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Hi Brett,

You're story was okay. But having had so many bad dreams etc. it made me afraid again. Still I'm sure there are many people who won't be bothered at all.
So keep writing and I'll keep reading.

Kat

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
    Glad you enjoyed this little tale.

    Appreciate your comments and support.
reply by MizKat on 27-Aug-2017
    Hi Brett,

    I always look forward to reading what you write. You are always wonderful at writing them.

    Kat
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written frightening nightmare. Elevators are creepy in any circumstances. When a stranger spooks me in one I will definitely try to get away from him as quick as possible.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
    Glad you enjoyed this Nightmare.

    Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review.