Comment from beizanten

Excellent

Interesting and well written first paragraph. The mood flow quite well. A good and quite deep second paragraph. A well written third paragraph. A pretty great last stanza

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Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem. The emotion of fear comes from Satan himself, and that is exactly what he wants. We should do the opposite of fear and have faith in God and pray earnestly for His grace and the protection of the world leaders, He had chosen.

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Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

This is a fine piece of poetry dear dan! I relate it to the twin towers, but there is more depth. Humane society needs new morals.
Thanks for sharing!
Blessings and a big squeeze!
Rebekka x

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Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

I can see here, like me, you love writing around themes (such as your fairy pieces). In the same vein with a similar message. Clear and concise.

inhuman can be one word.

alongside x=can also be one word.



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Comment from nowdecidestomorrow

Needs Improvement

I agree with the point intended. But maybe add a little fact on each side to support your poetry transcended into your message to the reader?. other than that I think your work is serious and devoted.

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