Hollow Words
Lies mean nothing, give you nothing.15 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
HI Dos, I know how you feel sweet girl...lies seem to take the trust out of a relationship...how much was ever true...once again you...I am so sorry you went through that...I'm so glad I have gotten back into the church...I just wish the things I prayer for would come true...sigh...very well written you...love ya Uno...xxoo
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017
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HI Dos, I know how you feel sweet girl...lies seem to take the trust out of a relationship...how much was ever true...once again you...I am so sorry you went through that...I'm so glad I have gotten back into the church...I just wish the things I prayer for would come true...sigh...very well written you...love ya Uno...xxoo
Comment Written 23-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017
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Thank you, Linda. Linda, too.
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your so welcome Dos...I'm back home now...working on my house...love xxoo Uno
Comment from Joan E.
What a striking artwork, which also reinforces your message well! I admired your quatrains and your rhyme scheme. Your "wind," "cards" and "path" metaphors are very effective. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017
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What a striking artwork, which also reinforces your message well! I admired your quatrains and your rhyme scheme. Your "wind," "cards" and "path" metaphors are very effective. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 23-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much Joan E. for reading and sharing your thoughts with me. Linda
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Such truthful words spoken here and the shame in a lie is not worth telling, we learn that as children and hopefully we can be honest as adults, a poignant write, best wishes, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017
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Such truthful words spoken here and the shame in a lie is not worth telling, we learn that as children and hopefully we can be honest as adults, a poignant write, best wishes, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017
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Thank you for reading, Dolly. livelylinda
Comment from misstory9197
Very good account of the disillusionment when feeling betrayed with a broken trust, and all that we thought we'd known is gone. "House of cards" was a good description. My preference would be to eliminate the first stanza. The rest of the poem could stand on its own.
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017
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Very good account of the disillusionment when feeling betrayed with a broken trust, and all that we thought we'd known is gone. "House of cards" was a good description. My preference would be to eliminate the first stanza. The rest of the poem could stand on its own.
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017
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Thank you for reading. livelylinda
Comment from Irish Rain
What I hate most about lies...they are not only an insult to the intelligence, but they leave you doubting every single experience with the person who lied. Surely, there must have been some truth, some beauty there....but now you have to sort through the trash to find it. This is great. Love the picture, and the song, 'I'm Still Standing'...by Elton John. Blessings....
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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What I hate most about lies...they are not only an insult to the intelligence, but they leave you doubting every single experience with the person who lied. Surely, there must have been some truth, some beauty there....but now you have to sort through the trash to find it. This is great. Love the picture, and the song, 'I'm Still Standing'...by Elton John. Blessings....
Comment Written 17-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Irish Rain: yes, I have been doing just that . . . sorting out what few things I know are true and weeding out all the things that were lies. I found very little truth . . . thanks for reading and commenting. Linda
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At least you're out of it now, thank goodness. It will be awhile, but one day he'll be the dust you see behind you...
Comment from robyn corum
Linda,
Oooowee! Very impressive! So much wisdom and smarts in these few words. *smile* Just goes to show once more how perceptive you are. haha! My favorite lines are the closing ones. Beautiful!
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Linda,
Oooowee! Very impressive! So much wisdom and smarts in these few words. *smile* Just goes to show once more how perceptive you are. haha! My favorite lines are the closing ones. Beautiful!
Comment Written 17-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Thank you Robyn! Whenever Kathy would throw me some lies, I would always remind her that, "I'm not STUPID. Do not underestimate me." Anyway, it is all gone now. Linda
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Comment from Jesse James Doty
I like the rhyme scheme, and the imagery is beautiful. I like the last two lines the best, "hollow words with empty meanings echo endlessly." It flows nice, and I like your conclusion about hollow words. It would be nice to know more about who or whom you are talking about. It sounds like you have an axe to grind, but I have no idea at who. If I were to change anything about this poem, I would give some examples of who you are aiming this at in your commentary. I like the artwork and title of the piece. Thank you for sharing.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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I like the rhyme scheme, and the imagery is beautiful. I like the last two lines the best, "hollow words with empty meanings echo endlessly." It flows nice, and I like your conclusion about hollow words. It would be nice to know more about who or whom you are talking about. It sounds like you have an axe to grind, but I have no idea at who. If I were to change anything about this poem, I would give some examples of who you are aiming this at in your commentary. I like the artwork and title of the piece. Thank you for sharing.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 17-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Thank you for reading, Jesse. It is unimportant to tell about whom I am speaking and more about the circumstances. The poem is about lies and that I think they are worthless and cause more problems than the ugliest truth. Linda
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Yes, when someone lies, it can seem worthless. Why they lie can sometimes be just as important as the lie itself.
Comment from Aussie
A well written poem of truth and lies. Man is not perfect, we have all walked on the dark side and mostly, found that lies makes us nothing at all. Jesus said "know the truth and the truth shall set you free." XXK.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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A well written poem of truth and lies. Man is not perfect, we have all walked on the dark side and mostly, found that lies makes us nothing at all. Jesus said "know the truth and the truth shall set you free." XXK.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Aussie, for reading and commenting. livelylinda
Comment from rheabug
I love this message in the poem. You have written it very well and I commend you on your talent. The picture that you chose to go with this is spot on. Thank you for sharing this with fanstory. Hugs....
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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I love this message in the poem. You have written it very well and I commend you on your talent. The picture that you chose to go with this is spot on. Thank you for sharing this with fanstory. Hugs....
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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rheabug: thanks so much for reading and commenting. livelylinda
Comment from Fridayauthor
There is something pure and clean about honesty, and just the opposite about dishonesty. Your words present this very well.
Thank you for this honest posting.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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There is something pure and clean about honesty, and just the opposite about dishonesty. Your words present this very well.
Thank you for this honest posting.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Fridayauthor:: thank you for reading and commenting. livelylinda
