Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "haiku (dove flies)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
23 total reviews
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day mate.
Another beautifully said little piece.
I think they need all the peace prayers and doves that they can get at the moment. This is a crazy world right now and living, here, in the Philippines, is mighty scary at times with all the strife going on around us.
Great job.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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G'day mate.
Another beautifully said little piece.
I think they need all the peace prayers and doves that they can get at the moment. This is a crazy world right now and living, here, in the Philippines, is mighty scary at times with all the strife going on around us.
Great job.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words my friend.
Comment from Sis Cat
Yes, peace over the White House and country is what we need right now. The imagery of your Haiku conveys a hope and wish for peace during these troubled times. Your poem serves as a prayer.
One minor error is that you misspelled flies as flys.
Other than that, this is a well-timed, thoughtful poem.
Thank you for sharing and caring.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Yes, peace over the White House and country is what we need right now. The imagery of your Haiku conveys a hope and wish for peace during these troubled times. Your poem serves as a prayer.
One minor error is that you misspelled flies as flys.
Other than that, this is a well-timed, thoughtful poem.
Thank you for sharing and caring.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words my friend. I will correct that.
Comment from robyn corum
MariVal,
Perfect example of construction helping to create meaning. I appreciated your lovely message of hope - much different than what so many others have to say about our current political condition. I also thought the addition of the primary colors black and white helped tell the story. Cool.
Only 'flys' should be 'flies' please.
Thanks!
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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MariVal,
Perfect example of construction helping to create meaning. I appreciated your lovely message of hope - much different than what so many others have to say about our current political condition. I also thought the addition of the primary colors black and white helped tell the story. Cool.
Only 'flys' should be 'flies' please.
Thanks!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words. I will correct that.
Comment from Ric Myworld
It will take more than one dove to fix that mess in the White House. But I, too, am praying for peace and calmer heads to work through the worlds problems with a newfound attitude of caring and compassion. Thanks for sharing. :-)
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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It will take more than one dove to fix that mess in the White House. But I, too, am praying for peace and calmer heads to work through the worlds problems with a newfound attitude of caring and compassion. Thanks for sharing. :-)
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words
Comment from royowen
A very well placed poetic plea, and or, wish, that is the place to put your prayers, right at the feet of those that can make a difference to the state of the world and nation Gypsy. Beautifully written, with a particularly well intentioned and very clever satori, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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A very well placed poetic plea, and or, wish, that is the place to put your prayers, right at the feet of those that can make a difference to the state of the world and nation Gypsy. Beautifully written, with a particularly well intentioned and very clever satori, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Thank you very much for the review and kind words, my friend.
Gypsy
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Well done
Comment from DR DIP
You can only pray Gypsy. As an Australian we can only observe from a distance lets hope the peace dove flies forever.
Its funny spell check had me changing flys to flies. Always an interesting one that
thanks for sharing your haiku of hope
Tell me gypsy? how long does it take you to write a haiku usually?
dip
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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You can only pray Gypsy. As an Australian we can only observe from a distance lets hope the peace dove flies forever.
Its funny spell check had me changing flys to flies. Always an interesting one that
thanks for sharing your haiku of hope
Tell me gypsy? how long does it take you to write a haiku usually?
dip
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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It doesn't take me long. I corrected the misspelled word, thank you. Thank you very much for the review.
Gypsy
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hi Gypsy.
very good I like you white dove haiku what a nice thought of sending the sign of peace o'er the
White House
Gert
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Hi Gypsy.
very good I like you white dove haiku what a nice thought of sending the sign of peace o'er the
White House
Gert
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Thank you very much for the review and kind words, my friend.
Gypsy
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You are welcome Gypsy
Gert
Comment from BOO ghost
Could be a good Omen. Usually doves travel in two's, doves choose a mate for life. I see... picture is in black & white. Race relations have been in turmoil since hate groups hit the streets. Black lives matter and KKK are hate groups for their own race. Some use these riots so they can pillage and rob stores. They want to be on TV. They do not want peace. Most riots start out peaceful. BOO-terrific!
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Could be a good Omen. Usually doves travel in two's, doves choose a mate for life. I see... picture is in black & white. Race relations have been in turmoil since hate groups hit the streets. Black lives matter and KKK are hate groups for their own race. Some use these riots so they can pillage and rob stores. They want to be on TV. They do not want peace. Most riots start out peaceful. BOO-terrific!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Thank you very much for the review and kind words, my friend.
Gypsy
Comment from Hitcher
It would not surprise me if Mr off his rocker Trump was caught with a bb gun trying to smoke said Dove.
Another great Haiku from you gifted pen friend, should make for some interesting reviews.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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It would not surprise me if Mr off his rocker Trump was caught with a bb gun trying to smoke said Dove.
Another great Haiku from you gifted pen friend, should make for some interesting reviews.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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hahaha... I can picture that...it's something he would do. I hate Mr off his rocker Trump. Thank you very much for the review and kind words, my friend.
Gypsy
Comment from MizKat
Hi Gypsy,
You have written a very nice poem again. I always look forward to reading
them. Because they are always so interesting. Thanks for sharing.
Kat
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Hi Gypsy,
You have written a very nice poem again. I always look forward to reading
them. Because they are always so interesting. Thanks for sharing.
Kat
Comment Written 16-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2017
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Thank you very much for the review and kind words, my friend.
Gypsy
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You are very welcome my friend. Kat
